Seasons of Love: Summertime Love, Why Jaden how... Twilight of you.
Seasons of Love: Summertime Love, Why Jaden how... Twilight of you.
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Jul 4 2012, 02:30 PM
Hey guys, first Fanfic mock, so let's do something with significance to me... Namely the first Fanfiction I ever read.
This little ditty was written by Anime-Queen-2011 back in June of 2007 and clocks in at 108,263 words in 44 chapters plus a separate authors note that reminds people that there's a sequel to this.
There's something you should know about Anime-Queen (Other then she has one of the most generic screen names ever). She is a huge Twilight fan, and boy does it show. True fact, I actually read this before Twilight and I pretty much instantly recognized the style when I got around to reading it years later, that's how exact it is. I'm talking "I wouldn't have trouble believing that Anime-Queen is really Stephine Meyer writing Yu-Gi-Oh GX Fanfiction" levels of exact here.
So, without further ado, the fic is in white, I'm in pink
Chapter 1: Airplane Ride
Hey everyone. This is my first really coupled based fanfic so I hope you like it!
Disclaimer-I don't own Yu-Gi-Oh! GX. Kazuki Takahashi does. Man, I wish I was him!
And I shall be! *Pulls out box cutter and laughes manically*
The plane hit turbulence, again. I felt my seat bump forward a bit. Chazz hit his head on my seat, again. I turned around and looked at him. His forehead was beat red and he kept rubbing it with his left hand.
"Damn it! I hate fuckin' turbulence!" he cursed for the thousandth time.
Unlike Meyer, Anime-Queen does not shy away from the cursing.
I just let out a deep sigh and turned back around. I rested my left elbow on the left arm of my chair placing my head in my hand, looking out the window.
Fascinating, Tell me more!
The clouds always look so puffy from up here.
Holy Crap, I didn't mean it.
I kept hearing Chazz screaming.
"Chazz! Shut the fuck up!" Blair screamed from the other side of the aisle at him.
You'll also notice that, despite being at least 4 years younger then everyone else, more if you go by the English version, old Blair Flannigan has one of the biggest potty mouths in the story.
She was on the aisle seat; her group of seats was right next to his.
In case you haven't seen Yu-Gi-Oh GX, don't worry I'll tell you everything you need to know about the characters, first girl who's younger then everyone else
She was sitting next to Syrus who was in the middle,
Wimpy Best Friend.
Hassleberry took the window seat.
In front of him was Jasmine. She was talking with Mindy, who was sitting next to her.
Friends of the main female lead, who do nothing.
Atticus was sitting on the aisle seat next to Mindy.
Older brother of main female lead.
His group of seats was right next to mine. Behind me was Chazz, as we have already established. He had the window seat
Snarky rival of protagonist who actually has some talent but is an utter goof.
Next to him was Aster, who wanted the window seat but Chazz beat him to it.
Rival who get's introduced in the second season, but doesn't get to do much after the second season.
Next to Aster was Zane, Syrus' older brother. He was quiet, like always.
Stoic older brother to the wimpy best friend... who really shouldn't be here right now. No really, he shouldn't be here. Not only did he graduate after the first season, During the second season, after losing to Aster, Zane goes on a losing streak and is only brought out of the funk when a shady promoter, Mr. Shroud, takes him under his wing. He's put through an underground duel, in which electrodes are attached to and shock you every time you lose life points. Over the course of the match Zane comes to conclusion that his respect for his opponents is whats keeping him from winning a match. Throwing that the wind, he pretty much dumps the rest of his deck into a monster called Chimertech Overdragon, which hits the dude he was dueling so hard, it actually damaged the arena they were dueling in. After that Zane becomes a psychopath who doesn't care how badly his opponents get hurt, as long as he wins. He even loses all respect for his cards, which, in Yu-Gi-Oh terms, is like pissing on your own grandmothers grave. And he defiantly doesn't get better in between season 2 and 3, which is when this story takes place, because he's still defiantly a psycho all through season 3. So what in the name of Yugi's magic plot powers is he doing here!
Bastion was sitting on the aisle seat of my group of seats. He was talking with Atticus about only God knows what.
The smart guy, who doesn't do much after season 1.
Between me and Bastion was Alexis, Atticus' little sister.
Main female lead, who doesn't do much... are you noticing a pattern yet.
If you haven't already guessed it, I'm Jaden.
And the rocks for brain protagonist who's actually has amazing talent, but is a slacker. Gang's all here.
I bet you're wondering what's going on, right? Well, here's what's going on.
And here we see some sixth grade level writing, and, if her profile is to believed, she was just about a freshman when she wrote this.
We are on a plane ride, pretty obvious right? Anyway, it's summer break but Atticus talked his parents into letting all of us spend the entire summer together, he also got Chancellor Sheppard to convince the rest of our parents. We were going to the best place to be in Japan during the summer. You guessed it, Ochi City(1).
If you wondering about that (1), it's not really anything. I guess it's supposed to be for a footnote, like there is in the next chapter, but there's not footnote to be seen in this one so .
Everyone was really excited about it, except me. I mean, don't get me wrong, Ochi City is a great place to be during the summer. A lot of stuff happens and you're never bored. But I wasn't excited for my own reasons, which you'll find out later.
They involve a hooker and a meat cleaver, make your own connections after that.
"Enough yelling!" Dr. Crowler yelled from the front of the plane.
Whoops forgot one, the stuck-up teacher who doesn't like the protagonist or his friends very much. There we go, Now the gang's all here.
I bet you're confused now. Its summer so why is one of our teachers here? Well, it's because Atticus told his parents, and Chancellor Sheppard told the rest of ours, that a teacher would be with us at all times. Lucky us when we found out Chancellor Sheppard told us that the teacher with was going to be Crowler.
"This is going to be one fun summer," Aster whispered from behind me. I turned to see that he was leaning toward me so I could hear him.
"Just loads," I said, my voice dripping with sarcasm.
Oh man, your getting sarcasm all over the seat
He chuckled and leaned back in his seat. Crowler was about ten rows in front of us because we all were in the back of the plane. But we never took any chances when it came to talking about Crowler with him in the same room. Anyway, I went back to looking at the clouds. There was a bunch of noise going on around me, ninety-nine percent of it being Blair screaming at Chazz.
Chazz: YOU'RE ADOPTED!
Blair: NO, YOU'RE ADOPTED!
It was going to an extremely long summer.
The plane was about forty-five minutes from Ochi City. Blair and Chazz finally stopped screaming at each other. Of course, it took a lot of coaxing from Zane to do so. Thank God he was going to be there with us. I was looking out the window at the clouds, in my own little world.
The World God Only Knows?
"Jaden?" Alexis called. I turned away from the clouds and looked at her. She was looking at me in confusion.
"Are you okay?" It didn't surprise me she asked that. She was the only one on the entire plane that could probably see that I wasn't.
"Yeah, perfect," I lied. She cocked an eyebrow at me. Damn it. Why could she read me like a book? I gave her one of my trademark smiles. She lowered her eyebrow and smiled at me. I loved her smile. It was perfect. Just like the rest of her. Oh! This must seem really weird, right? Well, Alexis and I have been dating for about two and a half months.
Yeah, you couldn't just, oh I don't know, show that they were dating, no, that would be what a good writer does.
"You've seemed awfully quiet lately. Something has to be bothering you," she pressed. I didn't want to tell her why I was quiet. It just wasn't the right time. I just smiled at her again.
"It's nothing," I lied again. She let out a sigh.
That sigh had been locked in her basement for three months, it was traumatized for the rest of it's short life.
"Fine. It's obvious I'm not getting anything out of you today." That's another thing I loved about Lex. She didn't press far, well, sometimes.
That's cause the judge with penalize her if she presses in the wrong spot
I'm just glad this was one of the times that she didn't. She rested her head on my right shoulder. The fingers of her left hand were weaved through the fingers of my right hand. When Alexis and I first started dating, this sorta thing wasn't very thrilling for a lot of people to see. I mean, a Slifer Red dating an Obelisk Blue, and not just any Obelisk Blue but the queen of Obelisk Blue.
Correct me if I'm wrong, but I'm pretty sure no one called her that.
At least, that is what people kept calling her. I really didn't pay attention to the title, neither did Lex. When we had been dating for about a month, people didn't find this sorta thing shocking anymore. Chazz and Blair weren't thrilled by it. He liked Lex and Blair was IN LOVE with me. But Atticus and Zane made sure they didn't try to do anything to us. Of course, everyone else helped but it was mainly those two. Dr. Crowler however…he wasn't very thrilled…EVER!
Said man passed by my group of seats, heading toward the restroom. He shot me a glare. I'm used to the glare though. Ever since Lex and I started dating, he gave me it whenever he saw us like this. I ignored it now. But it was starting to get rather annoying.
Pretty sure he glared at you any chance he got anyway, but whatever
"Will he every accept the fact that those glares don't work on you?" Bastion asked.
Bastion you're supposed to be the smart guy, why are you making errors like that?
I was looking out the window again. I turned to face him. He was looking at me. I was about to shrug when I realized that Alexis had fallen asleep on my shoulder.
"I don't think so," I replied.
"Well he should!" Atticus chimed in. I looked past Bastion, well, not really. I didn't need to. Atticus stuck his head out so I could see him.
"You know he never will."
"I stand by my previous statement." I sighed and turned back to looking out the window. I wasn't paying any attention to what was happening around me.
You seem to have gotten your Jadens confused. You see the one you should be writing, season 1-3 Jaden, he was a goofy motherfucker. This was a dude who couldn't seriously duel in the final duel of season 1 until he had a snack. You seem to be writing season 4 Jaden, who took a typical stoic main character shtick. You know that, or your writing Edward Cullen.
That is, until, there was a bright flash.
Atticus used flash! Jaden's accuracy fell!
"Agh!" I cried bringing up my left arm and rubbing my eyes. I looked in front of me to see Atticus, smiling, with a camera. "What the hell was that for?" His smile only got bigger.
"It was a Kodak moment Jaden. I just couldn't resist." He winked at me and then headed back to his seat.
"You could to have resisted," I said. He shook his head.
"Nope. I mean," He pulled out his digital camera and handed it to Bastion to hand to me, "Look how cute it is!"
Bastion handed me the camera. I looked at the display screen. Damn it. I hate it when Atticus is right. It was a cute picture. I was looking out of the window, thinking. Alexis was asleep on my shoulder, some hair was in her face. Her perfect face looked so peaceful. Our hands were weaved together and they were resting on her lap. I turned to hand the camera back to Bastion. He took it and handed it back to Atticus who tucked it into his carry on bag. I looked at Alexis' perfect sleeping face. The hair that fell in her face in the picture was still there. I took my left hand and took the stray hairs
Little known fact about Jaden Yuki, he's secretly a hair thief.
and tucked them behind her right ear. She stirred a little but didn't wake up.
"I bet it would have looked cuter if it was me in the picture and not Jaden," Chazz said from behind me. Stupid Chazz. Atticus pulled back out the camera and turned it on. He looked closely at the picture.
"I don't think so," he said, cocking his head to look at the picture at a different angle. Mindy took the camera out of his hand.
"Hey!" She and Jasmine were looking at the picture.
"No way, Chazz!" Mindy said, shaking her head.
"Yeah. This picture could only be cute because it is Jaden and Alexis," Jasmine agreed. Mindy was about to hand the camera back to Atticus when Syrus took it from her.
"Hey again!" Atticus cried.
Oh, this, *yawns* this is just hilari-zzzzzZZZZZZZZ
He turned and was standing on his knees with his hands gripping the top of his seat, looking at Syrus. He was looking at the picture. Hassleberry and Blair were also looking at it. She was about to say something but stopped and just looked away from the camera.
"I'm with Jasmine and Mindy," Syrus said, turning the camera around to look at the picture differently. Hassleberry nodded in agreement.
"I agree." Zane reached over Blair and snatched the camera from his brother.
"Aw, come on!" Atticus said. I chuckled. Poor Atticus. Everyone was stealing his camera. I looked at Zane who was doing the same thing Syrus did. Aster was looking at the picture, too.
"Agreed," Zane said plainly. Aster nodded.
"Defiantly." Zane handed Atticus back his camera. He grabbed and put it back in his bag quickly.
"Protective much?" I joked. He looked at me.
"It just kept disappearing!" Everyone started laughing at him.
"Bastion, you didn't seem to have a comment on the picture," Syrus said. He shrugged.
"I did but everyone else seemed to have it under control."
"See, Chazz, everyone agrees. You lose!" Mindy said. He shot an angry glare at her. I sighed and looked back at the clouds. Just was I did, the pilot came over the PA system.
ZZZZ... huh, I'm sorry, dozed off there for a minute, where were we?
"Attention flyers. We are approaching Ochi City. We will begin our decent in five minutes so please fasten your seat belts and return all trays to their upright positions." I buckled myself in and gently shook Alexis. She opened her eyes slowly.
"Hey, we're there," I said quietly. She smiled and buckled up, not letting go of my hand or lifting her head from my shoulder.
Excuse me while I question how.
Then I felt my chair moving, again.
Don't worry, it's just the local poltergeist.
"DAMN TRAY!" Chazz screamed trying to move the jammed tray back up.
Oh, please let him start saying he hates everything, I have a clip of Francis that I so want to use.
"CHAZZ JUST SHUT THE FUCK UP AND CALM DOWN!" Blair screamed, annoyed.
Again, biggest potty mouth, I'm not sure why.
He started to argue with her while still trying to get the tray back up. I sighed and Alexis rolled her eyes. Yup, it was going to be a long summer.
There we go. I hope you guys liked it. Please review. The next chapter will come faster with reviews. I love reading reviews so please review!Hey, maybe I'm crazy, but I think she wants reviews.
Thanks and I hope you enjoyed it.
So, there's the first chapter of Summertime Love, hope you stick around for the second chapter.
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