One Less Lonely Gurl, Wherein I have a noble first attempt
One Less Lonely Gurl, Wherein I have a noble first attempt
The Ultimate Gentleman
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Nov 19 2011, 04:56 PM
Finally! My first mock can begin. And I must say, this is a true atrocity against any semblance of good taste, entitled "One Less Lonely Gurl" by one "Monica Gilbey-Bieber". The chapters themselves are absurdly short, so I will be able to have several in a single post. Tally ho! I shall be in bold.
AN: I donut own this spongebob thiny. dis is just a fanfic OK!
Oh, dear, what have I gotten myself into?
It wuz jazz an ordnary day when I dove deep into the dark azure hue of hte ocean.
Wait, who is this?
I was tasked to gether some samples of some rare, newly-discovered specimen of coral reefs to send back to the lab for furhter examination.
What lab? What specimen?
As you can see, I am a marine biologist.
Stop this nonsense at once, author! Please, explain what is happening! I have not even the vaguest semblance of an idea whatsoever! This is frankly uninterpretable!
You drowned? Oh, I bequeath of you, please tell me you drowned.
what I thought was the tip of a huge coral reef...
Well, it was worth a try anyway.
I discovered Atlantis. It was shiny anf oh so beautiful. It's huge.
It’s only a model.
So I wanted to dive deepter into the murky waters to get to see if I was right, if this IS indeed Atlantis./
And yes, it is. A huge neon sign lured me to the the deep which ewas ebony black background...
Well, it doesn’t get much more obvious than that, I must say.
and it says "welcome to Atlantis."
I was right. I wonder what is in here...
Let’s find out!
From down the iridescent light of the 'coral reef' I discovered came the ebony darkness Dementia Raven Way, anf from the darkness came a bright, flashing light from the neon sign that led me to the inner depths ot the 'coral reef'. This is a most fascinating discovery that I have looked at through my cerulean orbs surrounded with abundadnt lashes.
Oh, for the love of God, just say “blue eyes”, you great twit. There is no reason whatsoever to make your prose this nauseatingly purple.
Inside was a huge sity just as I read in mystery books and surprisingly, there were people in it.
What mystery books? “Look here, Holmes, a great underwater city!” “Excellent observation, Watson, let us investigate without any breathing apparatus whatsoever!”
I never knew that atlantis has albready been riscovered but maybe it's just that mo one would ver bother to go back to the land because of the filth there and perhaps because of the fact that atlantis is supposed to be a utopia.
Very subtle commentary, my good sir, very subtle indeed.
Everyone was staring at me.
Unending damnation! Why did I think that would work?
They all stopped whatever they were doing.
Including breathing. There were no survivors.
"She's beautiful!" someone said.
I mean, we’re all fish people, so that might be somewhat insulting, but still!
"Ans she has all curves in right places," said anohter.,
Cease, author. She’s already a garishly obvious Mary Sue, please don’t try to state what we already know to be there.
Even down here, I could have been called someone beautiful, just like back in the land where I came from.
"Where I’m from, everybody has gills and fins."
I have supposedly perfect, blonde hair with pink and green streaks that wave along with the waters down below.
Blonde hair with pink and green streaks? Who came up with that, a Hasbro executive?
"Not really," I replied. "I just came here by accident and am pretty much lost. Can someone give me some dirsctions?"
I would, if I had any idea what you just said.
"Sure," a man with blonde hair, fair skin, and hughe, blue eyes said.
You are in Nazi Germany! HEIL HITLER!
He was wearing a white button-up sirt with a red tie, brown pants, and black shoes.
Oh, please don’t…if you dare to ship Spongebob Squarepants with your awful Mary Sue, I will burn the world.
"This is Bikini Bottom, a city within this entire state known as atlantis, located underneath the Bermuda triangle.
Wow. Watching the show for even a moment would immediately tell you that is wrong in every conceivable way.
THat's why many ships and aircraft mysteriously disappear when passing there. THis is a place that must never be known to man because of their sins.
Again, very subtle.
And by the way, I'm Bob. And you are?"
Enough about this incredible discovery that will change everything we know, what’s your name?
"I'm C'ren Amethyst LeHeart-Bieber.
Oh, good lord. Must every original character have an incredibly preposterous name?
Just call me C'ren. I'm not related to Justin Bieber-"
"But I’m about as annoying and easily loathed."
"Justin Bieber?" Bob replied eagerly, interrupting me. "How do you know about him? He's, like, the biggest star here in all Atlantis."
"We’re all completely deaf, but still."
"Wait..." I said. "If you just said that land himans are not allowed here because of theis sins, then why the heck is Justin Bieber well-known here?
Or anywhere, for that matter?
He is, like, the biggest star in the land above where I come from."
"Wha... !:" he said loudly. "You are from the land above!"
KILL THE ABOMINATION! BURN HER TO THE oh what’s the use?
[AN: who the hell is Ebony and why the heck am I even like her?
You’re phenomenally obnoxious and your story is terrible?
She's an emo fag. I hate emo's. I love rainbows and I hate rock songs.
This confliction prevented her from enjoying My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic ever since it’s induction.
Please do not crucify me.
I simply hate that dark stuff. Goths, punks, and emo's creep me out. I'm blonde, I like pink, and I love Hilary Duff! She's one of the best singers ever! Justin Bieber is ah-dorable!]
And here I thought C’ren was the one I wanted to die the most.
"Yes, yes I am. I was tasked by them to go down to the ocean and collect coral reefs from here to bring back to the land. I just came by here accidentally."
"How convenient! Hee hee!"
The people stared at me again in deeper admiration and put out some papers and pens. They wanted an autograph from me.
Why? It’s been established that these people hate humanity, why would they suddenly admire this woman out of all-
Oh, yes, of course. Mary Sue. Carry on.
"Thank you, thank you so much," I said as I signed their papers, handkerchiefs, and even shirts one by one.
As soon as that commotion was over, Bob took me to his home that was shaped like a pineapple.
"So about Justin Bieber, he is actually like me, also from the land above. What I don't know for sure is how he even got well-known doen here in the first place.May I know why?"
The author is a complete failure?
"Dude, we have computers and TV's down here. Unlike you landlubbers, we have access to both land and undersea channels and websites. My friend Pearl is like, so totally in love with him.
Boys Who Cry is so yesterday.
And she even gave me these concert tickets. Do you want to go with me?
Every sentence this damnable story sputters out makes me loathe existence more and more.
I'll also take my friend Patrick along, but he happens to like those rock bands such as Stingray 5000 and Ned and the Needlefish...
Random references to the series do not a proper fanfiction make. In fact, nothing a proper fanfiction makes.
Oh, and yeah,. Bieber will perform alongside Boys Who Cry."
Oh…I was kidding about that.
I believe the correct term is “Called it!”
"Really? That's awesome.
That is completely the wrong use of that word.
If you said that only the worthy are allowed here, then Justin Bieber IS worthy.
They must have a very low standard for that. Next thing you know, they’ll be letting in bronies and Irishmen!
And that's why I love him and worship him.
I even have some of his hair…and skin flakes…and semen…
Good lord, that was foul. I apologize.
I've always known that he was superhuman," I replied.
Only if we are referring to Satan.
"I think I know this place..." I sad as soon as we got there and I looked around.
"Pardon?" Bob said. "I thought you only have been here now. What do you mean you already know this place?
“I’m a Mary Sue. I know everything.”
That's just deja vu you're feeling. Maybe you just need some sleep."
Talk about instinct!
"Maybe," I replied.
"You sleep upstairs, while I stay down here in the sofa," Bob said. "Goodnight."
And goodbye. I’ll have the next few chapter mocked and ready to upload soon! Assuming this story doesn’t give me a cancerous tumour in my brain, of course.
This post has been edited by Professor Pineapple: Dec 6 2011, 07:22 AM
One Less Lonely Gurl: Complete
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