Ron Weasley's forbidden love, Not as forbidden as you'd think. Options

[Moose]

Originally, I was going to wait until I finished my mock for Guardian Angel to post this, but then I decided I just wanted to start this.

It's obviously a Harry Potter fic. With an OC that is obviously so wrong for Ron in the eyes of his friends, that he needs to keep it to himself, lest they stop talking to him forever, instead of understanding... you know, like they WOULD IF THEY WERE IN CHARACTER?

But whatever. Let's just start this, okay?

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What if Ronald Weasley doesn't end up with Hermione Granger at the end?

What if he doesn't fight along Harry Potter?

What if he falls in love with someone he shouldn't?

Well, that is why it's called fanfiction, after all.

What if they are actually meant to be?

What if it is a forbidden love?

What if she loves him back?

What if he has to do something terrible to prove everybody his love?

Like completely turn his back to the loveable sidekick character he is, and change into an annoying pile of shit that doesn't know why he loves a mary-sue?

I've seen worse.

Ron walked slowly to defense against the dark arts, his first class of his sixth year.

When he and Harry got there the classroom was half empty, Hermione was already there.

However, she will have little to no appearance for the next few chapters.

Ron saw Draco Malfoy laughing in the corner of the room, he was with Crabbe and Goyle, and a black-haired girl, at first he thought it was Pansy, but thinking about it, she didn't look like Pansy at all, so he turned to see his Slytherin classmates again. He wasn't sure if he had seen this girl before, he really never cared about Slytherin students.

Damn right he didn't! Get back to the factory, OOC Ron!

"Harry? Who's that girl? Next to Malfoy". Ron asked his friend, who was talking to Hermione.

"Elizabeth? Is that who you mean?".

"Elizabeth? Has she been here all these year or is she new?". Ron asked, looking at her again.

"Don't tell me you don't remember her? Maybe you know her by her middle name? Bellatrix?". Ron didn't answer so Harry went on. "Most of the Slytherins and well almost all the school knows her as Bellatrix, she's Bellatrix Lestrange's daughter and Draco's cousin, Sirius told me awful things concerning her" Harry said opening his book.

Harry: Like, she's a mary-sue, and she is being forced into an incestuous relationship with her cousin.

…

No, really.

"Awful things?" Ron whispered to Harry.

"I'll tell you later" Harry said when he noticed Professor Snape was looking directly at them.

"Finally you finished gossiping" Professor Snape snapped. "20 points from Gryffindor". He said turning around.

"We don't even have points, it's the beginning of the year". Ron whispered a bit mad.

What do you mean, you're used to Snape taking away points, Ron? FUCK YOU, ACT LIKE IT'S NEVER HAPPENED!

"Another 10 points, thanks to Mr. Weasley".

The class was over much to Ron's pleasure.
"Harry, are you going to tell me more?".

"Oh, yeah, I forgot about it, well her parents hasn't been that lovely with her, specially her father, he wanted a son, not a daughter, she has been abused all her life, or that's what Sirius said, she will become a death eater as well, not because she wants to, but because her parents decided that, I don't know if she has become one already, or she will after school, I don't know, what I'm sure about is that Malfoy is one"

Abused daughter who is being forced into doing evil things against her will? Never heard of it. Elizabeth sure sounds delightful and interesting!

"Oh Harry can you forget about Malfoy?" Ron said a bit frustrated that Harry kept thinking that.

"I can't, seeing as how he's caused me nothing but grief for the past six years, and he also is very obviously evil, oh, and talking about Malfoy, he was engaged to Bellatrix".

"What?" Ron exclaimed in surprise.

"You know how all those pureblood families are, but is sick because they are like second cousins or something like that, Sirius wanted to help her to find another man, if they didn't find anyone before school is over they'll get married, she always could rely on him, he is, was her godfather as well, I'm sure her mum regretted that decision".

I'm sure, since she was working with Voldemort when she gave birth to her kid, and obviously wouldn't have named Sirius godfather for her child. So yeah, she probably did regret it.

"That's really awful".

"Yeah, and there's even more, but Sirius didn't tell me anything else, Ron? Why so interested in her out of nowhere?" Harry asked arching an eyebrow.

"Just that, I hadn't seen her before need to fall in love with her, for the plot's sake. Author threatened certain death or something".

"Right".

I am assuming that is in a disinterested tone. I mean, Harry probably doesn't care much about Elizabeth either.

This post has been edited by Moose: Apr 2 2011, 10:51 AM

[oneluckyduck]

Oh great. There's abuse in this story.
No, not the character. I don't care about the character despite the fact that she stole my name-not my real name, mind you, but my name nevertheless. Long story. but the poor commas! It's bad enough, when the authors forget then, but now, they are being overused, over worked, and it's, quite, annoying.
*tear*

[Lizard-Man]

Let's see... abused, random connection to a canon character, forced to do evil things, member of Sytherin, apparently pretty, forced into canon with little to no actual build up in order to rush the narrative... yep typical HP Sue.

In my experience there are so far three fandoms you can count on for shitty fanfiction so far.

1: Harry Potter
2: Naruto
3: Kingdom Hearts

Digimon and Avatar come in close though. In any case you're bound to find very similar mary sues in all three communities. HP Sues tend to be located in Sytherin for one because... fuck I don't know apparently everyone feels sorry for the little Hitler Youth club. They possess most of the characteristics of all normal Mary Sues, except a few unique fandom oriented processes. I'll be sure to see if I can find any as we go along.

All I know is they tend to be abused, evidently NOT evil but forced to do bad things and more often than not are in Sytherin, so far we're batting three hundred.

[Moose]

Ron was distracted most of the day, he barely touched his food, during dinner. He couldn't get this girl out of his head.

She was so disgusting to him, he couldn't even bear the thought of food, or anything else for that matter. He only had one choice; kill her.

He couldn't stop imagining the nightmare she was living. Abusive parents, that were death eaters and that also wanted her to become one, and that will marry her own cousin., and the only person she trusted was death.

Since OMG! THE WHOLE WORLD WAS AGAINST HER!!!1111 SHE IS SO MISUNDERSTOOD!

While unconsciously playing with his food, Ron took a glance on the Slytherin table, and in less than ten seconds, he spotted her, she had her hair in a loose ponytail, and was just finishing drinking her pumpkin juice.

He didn't realized he had been staring at her for more than a minute until Harry waved a hand in front of him.

Harry made a joke about it, which Ron didn't put attention to it, he just shrugged it off.

Harry: Haha, Ron is going to be stuck with a sue forever!

"Ron? Are you alright? You have been quiet all day" Harry commented when both guys were in their dorm.

"Yeah, just been thinking, you know" Ron whispered before he fell asleep.

Next morning wasn't as sunny as the past one, it had rained all day, even the fake sky in the Great hall looked like the real one above Howgarts.

Ron slept all night but felt like if he hadn't rested. So he slept through transfigurations, until Professor McGonagall caught him. Harry had barely talked to him, since he snapped at Harry for a comment he said.

I don't even remember Ron snapping, but let's just assume so. HE IS SO ALONE NOW!!!11

Ron turned around to find a particular girl, but she was nowhere to be found, he hadn't seen her all day. He started to wonder if he had dreamt all the day before.

When the class was over he rushed outside for no apparent reasonplot purposes, it had stopped raining, so he walked fast to the black lake and while looking at it, he sat down. He magically dried the grass and lots of thought ran through his mind, until he heard laughter.

He didn't know how much time he had spent thinking. Five minutes? Ten maybe? Or even more?. He didn't know.

He turned his face to the left to see the owners of the laughter. It was Draco Malfoy and Bellatrix Lestrange.

Wasn't her name Elizabeth, though?

WAIT, I GET IT! SO WE DON'T FORGET SHE IS BELLATRIX'S DAUGHTER, AND OMG!SOABUSED! Silly me.

He stared once again at her, this time with light, showing her features.

Goody, we get to endure a lengthy paragraph describing her.

Her black hair, was not really black, but a chocolate brown colour, which was below her shoulder, she, thanks God, didn't inherit her mum's messy hair. She was thin, and tall, not as tall as Malfoy but pretty close, maybe a bit shorter than Ron, or same height. He couldn't see well if her eyes were green, or the same colour as Malfoy's, a light grey.

As long as they don't change color depending on her mood, I'm fine.

When they got nearer, he noticed her nails were painted green, which matched her uniform.

He hadn't noticed how beautiful she really was. He hadn't thought of her since he saw her yesterday because of her beauty, actually he didn't know why he had been thinking about her.

Because he is falling head over heels for her, duh.

But you know what? How come it's never an okay looking girl? Like, she's kinda cute, but nothing too special.

He wondered how such a woman like Bellatrix had had a daughter like the girl in front of her.

Sex, duh.

She looked sweet and innocent, she didn't look like the type that becomes a Death Eater.

Apparently the pair hadn't noticed Ron yet, so he tried to hide behind a tree next to him, in case they got even nearer which they did, and stayed there watching the lake.

"I think this is a good idea after all" he heard Draco said to Bellatrix. "I'm sure you don't want to, and believe me, I don't enjoy that much the idea of marrying you, but if we actually get married, I'll keep you safe, more than anyone could ever do, and I love you so much to risk something happen to you".

I am sure Draco would talk like that, instead of being “OH MY GOD, EW! YOU'RE MY COUSIN!”

"But you are like my brother!" Bellatrix argued, looking directly at Malfoy's eyes. "I can't marry you".

"What? Would you preferred marring someone that hits you, like your father? Or someone that really loves you?" Draco asked her turning her around so he could see her slender face.

Draco: Fuck love, man! We need to keep the family bloodline completely pure!

"The answer is quite obvious, isn't it?".

"Then everything is set, we will get married in August or something like that next year" Draco said started to face.

"What? Next year? What about when we finish our seventh year not our sixth!" Bellatrix raised her voice a bit.

"We are doing it anyway, so the sooner the better, don't you think?".

Draco is such a charmer. How could Bellatrix ever say no to him?

"Why the rush? Is not like we are 50 years old" Bellatrix said sarcastically.

"Remember my mission, your mission? What if we don't survive? Let's just get married soon".

"You're crazy" Bellatrix said turning her back to Draco.

"I know you don't want this marriage, neither did I, but think about it, it's a really good option".

Yeah! Because then... you know, with the thing?

Yeah, I don't know why either. They can find any other Slytherin, and the blood would still be pure.

Draco said attempting to kiss her on the lips but she just turned her head so Draco ended up kissing her right cheek. "Fine" he whispered. "Let's go back to the castle". Draco said grabbing her hand.

When the brown-haired girl and blonde-haired boy were out of sight, Ron went their same way to the castle, digesting all the information he just heard.

Ron: OM NOM NOM, INCEST IS DELICIOUS!

[oneluckyduck]

Next morning wasn't as sunny as the past one, it had rained all day, even the fake sky in the Great hall looked like the real one above Howgarts.

Yeah no duh.

Wasn't her name Elizabeth, though?

No, it really was Bellatrix. Elizabeth only works in this story part time, the rest of the time she’s in Shattered Kingdom, Broken Hearts.

Draco: Fuck love, man! We need to keep the family bloodline completely pure!
Ron: OM NOM NOM, INCEST IS DELICIOUS!

And that --^ is why you are awesome.

[Moose]

I keep thinking of THAT Elizabeth when I read this. But just you wait until Ron starts calling her Bella. Makes me rage on the inside, for obvious reasons.

[oneluckyduck]

I'm ready.


(Also, no thank you for the compliments? I'm hurt. )

[Newandimprovednobody]

Late comment, but why are the Sues always abused? Can't they come from a nice home? I mean, I'm not trying to give anyone ideas, but wouldn't they be more perfect if they weren't mentally scarred from child abuse?

You know what, what I want to know is how Elizabeth grew up to be a relatively healthy, normal teenage girl when HER PARENTS WERE LOCKED IN AZKABAN FOR OVER A DECADE AND SHE WAS ABUSED. I doubt you can teach your daughter much surrounded by Dementors.

This post has been edited by Newandimprovednobody: Apr 3 2011, 01:09 PM

[Moose]

Late comment, but why are the Sues always abused? Can't they come from a nice home? I mean, I'm not trying to give anyone ideas, but wouldn't they be more perfect if they weren't mentally scarred from child abuse?

You know what, what I want to know is how Elizabeth grew up to be a relatively healthy, normal teenage girl when HER PARENTS WERE LOCKED IN AZKABAN FOR OVER A DECADE AND SHE WAS ABUSED. I doubt you can teach your daughter much surrounded by Dementors.

I keep wondering that too; Elizabeth's childhood. How could her father abuse her and stuff when her parents were in Azkaban? Because I doubt she would have been made to go there too, considering she would've been a baby when the whole sentence to Azkaban went down. Maybe her upbringing will be explained later in the story. Either that, or the author is ignoring canon completely. But she wouldn't do that!

EDIT: I just realized that chances are, she was raised by the Malfoys. It's never mentioned to be that way (so far, anyway), but Elizabeth did say Draco was like a brother. That wouldn't really explain the whole father abusing her thing, but it would make more sense in the canon plot's time-line... kind of. I guess we'll wait and see if it's ever explained.

This post has been edited by Moose: Apr 3 2011, 04:02 PM

[Newandimprovednobody]

Chances are, it won't be explained, and I just pointed out a plot hole the author overlooked in her mad efforts to give her Mary-Sue a tragick backstory.

[Screaming_Soulcatcher]

Why are sues so abused in these stories? Because its A FUKKIN CURSE!1!!

[oneluckyduck]

Heh, get it, curse? Heh heh heh! X)

[Newandimprovednobody]

Why is she even allowed to go to Hogwarts? Think about it--Voldemort has come back two years ago and broken his followers out of Azkaban. Bellatrix Lestrange is one of his best lieutenants. And then, someone who claims to be her daughter comes to Hogwarts and asks to be taught. Or maybe they even send the letter. Why would Elizabeth's parents even let her go to Hogwarts? Let's say she's a spy, then. Do you really think Dumbledore'd be that stupid? He knew Voldemort wasn't defeated and laid out a careful plan that took place over seventeen years, which included his own death! He's not going to be so stupid as to let an obvious spy for Voldemort in.

[Moose]

Elizabeth is there because... WELL, IGNORE THAT!
She is so obviously abused, Dumbledore felt sorry for her. That's why.

[Newandimprovednobody]

That's it, in two chapters I've picked two glaring plot holes. I wanna group mock this shit with you, it gives me something to do over Spring Break, I wanna get some practice in before the Author Fighters thing we may or may not be doing, and this fic is just asking for it from me.

[Moose]

Okay, Nobody. I'll send you chapter three tomorrow or Wednesday. I'm on my cell at an open mic right now.

[Newandimprovednobody]

Good luck at your open mic thing.

[Moose]

Thanks. Haven't played in a month. Made twenty bucks at a gig last I played, then took a break.

[Lizard-Man]

Overly descriptive paragraph outlining every facial feature, check. Lack of any distinct facial faults or imperfections, check. Borders on Disney Princess levels of sexual arousal via appearance, check. Everyone immedietly loves her for no reason other than she exists, check.

Yep, we're dealing aces here folks. We've reached average HP sue levels. Now we just need her to be an instant expert in all classes, and references to things the author herself enjoys and we got a grade A example.

[oneluckyduck]

Like, the same musical tastes?
What are you talking about, I don't make my characters Mary-Sues! Just because I don't think that they would like rap...what...no, that's...
Shut up.
I hate stories where they define the characters musical tastes so strongly. Who said Ichigo can't like both Ichirin no Hana and Frank Sinatra? :raises eyebrow: