If it helps I know your name, A really fucking boring Avatar fanfic Options

[Lizard-Man]

Many probably ask, why did I pick such a dull as crap Naruto fanfic to mock? Well to be honest, it’s not like there are many all that different from it. Crappy fanfics that are boring as fuck are everywhere in Naruto fanfiction. It is only rivalled by the Avatar fandom. Which has tons of fanfics and a good chunk of them are crap. You’d think a series that prides itself on expert writing and storytelling would have fans that pretty much know how to do it themselves. Not so. Most of these people are drooling fangirls who know less about story structure then they do about bras. There are many examples of pretty horrible Avatar fanfiction, here is one. It’s pretty stock, a lame original character, usually a Mary Sue, Author avatar or self-insert, is forced into the actual series for no other reason than to get her to sleep with Zuko.

Trust me, there are more of these kinds of stories than I care to count.

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It's been 3 years. I'm still not over it though. And I don't think I ever will be.

The Konami E3 2010 Press Conference was just that horrible. Ask future narrator here.

I wonder where he could be now?

Guatemala most likely, I hear they got great banana martinis. Ask the US government.

FLASH BACK

"Arisu." said Father, looking up from where he and mother were sitting on the couch.

Well actually it was a futon, but details.

"Hnn? What is it father?" I replied, looking up.

"We were thinking," said mother, in her usual sweet and gentle voice, "You're thirteen now, and we think it'll be good if you got engaged now."

Your biological clock is ticking like a time bomb honey.

My eyes widened. What? ENGAGED?

"But I'm thirteen!"

"Thirteen is old enough," said father, looking rather annoyed with me.

“I’m getting me my damn arcade room honey and I ain't waiting on you to settle down! Plus the groom’s family offered me five cows in exchange for your hand. Be grateful, your sister only netted me a chicken.”

"His name is Zuko? The fire lord's son!" Mother added, giving me a look that said I'm Sorry.

They wanted to get her a king, but the Fire Nation doesn’t really have too many pedophiles in power at the moment.

My eyes just got wider.

Before long they burst out of her skull.

A PRINCE? Wow! But why would he want to marry me?

Uh, he doesn’t. Arranged marriages don’t give a shit about what the bride and groom want.

Father is a Commander I guess. The famous Commander Zhao.

Oh hell no! Bullcrap! No way this crappy OC is in anyway related to the awesome that is Commander Zhao! Fuck you. Besides why the hell would he want his spawn to marry a boy he considers a complete and total failure and deserves to be kicked around?

Oh wait! He hates the annoying waste of sperm and wants to stick Zuko with her so he’ll suffer the embrassing spawn of his loins for eternity! My mistake Commander Zhao, truly you are an evil genius and a bastard to boot.

A part of me really didn't want to go through with this.

Arisu is in reality a Zuko/Jin shipper.

It wanted me to get up and stamp my feet and say no. But who was I to say anything? I guess they needed me to do this.

I smiled at them. "I guess I'll meet him first, then? And we'll see if he's nice."

Well considering how Zuko is with girls and people in general that won’t end well.

END FLASH BACK

I sat up, rubbing my eyes and looking around. Today was the day that father returned to the Fire Nation!

He’d been off burning down villages and looking smug. The typical Fire Navy Officer’s tour of duty.

Of course the great Commander Zhao was always busy.

Wait, Zhao’s a commander three years ago too. I just remembered that in the series when Zuko was exiled he was still a Major or Captain, I know for sure he wasn’t a commander.

I jumped up quickly, put on a dress and opened the windows breathing in the fresh air.

Joke is on her, a lard factory opened up next door.

I really appreciated the kind of view the windows in my bedroom gave me.

It looked right over the local morgue!

Father never allowed me to go anywhere,

Except maybe the red light district when the family needed the extra cash.

and from my windows I could see people going about with their daily lives. Students practicing fire-bending, merchants selling fire flakes in a box and little children pestering their parents to buy them toys.

You are such a voyeur.

I only wish I had that kind of freedom.

Do what Toph did, break out at night and fight Wrestlers. Oh wait, you can’t do that cause you’re bland and boring. My mistake.

"Arisu?" One of the maids called, "Your father's here!"

I smiled and said a quick thank you, before running off for the main room.

"Father! Welcome back." I curtseyed, knowing he wouldn't appreciate bad manners.

Zhao once burned her left kidney out for not curtseying low enough.

Mother smiled next to us. "Good Morning, Arisu."

I smiled and said good morning back.

They kept this pattern up for six hours no doubt. Then they kept saying good afternoon.

"Ahh, Arisu," said Father, "I have something for you,"

If it ain’t a new Xbox she doesn’t care.

One of the servants brought in a small box, and opened it, revealing a

A teddy bear covered in blood, the less said about how he got it the better.

necklace. It was a small jade chain with a sparkling red pendant.

Since when did Zhao care about anyone enough to blow coin on that kind of stuff!

"Thank you!" I said, as the servant helped me put it on, "It's beautiful."

Mother came buy my room

Now you’re gonna have to sleep outside with the dog.

as I was looking through the window. There was a festival on our street today, and even more people than usual were there. I only wish I could join in.

Jump out the window then, you’ll break your neck but you’ll be joining them.

"Arisu,"

I looked up and smiled. "Hi."

She saw however it was the Terminator and he had come back to the past to kill her so this crappy story wouldn’t continue.

AKIRA POV

She looked really sad. Maybe she missed him. Maybe she wanted to go outside.

Maybe she wanted to eat cow pies, it was always so hard to tell with her.

It wanted to tell her. I wanted to tell her about Zhao meeting Zuko at the docks.

Um, no, Zuko didn’t meet with Zhao in the Fire Nation. If he did he would’ve been arrested. The area we first saw Zhao in was a Fire Navy base in the Earth Kingdom. There wasn’t a town around for miles it was a military instillation.

About how she had a chance of meeting him again.

And she totally missed it. Yeah how is that suppose to cheer her up again?

But Zhao wouldn't like it. He would get angry. He would get angry if Arisu knew,

Redundant narration is redundant.

and if he knew I told her.

Smiling, I hugged Arisu, and asked her whats wrong, flicking her long black hair away from her eyes.

And for some reason shouting “”Pantene Pro-V!”

"What's wrong?"

You’ve apparently asked that twice now.

"Nothing," She smiled, "Nothing's wrong."

"Don't lie, Arisu," I frowned, "Some thing's bothering you."

She stuck a light over her face and told her to spill the location of the drugs.

She didn't answer.

She requested a lawyer.

I knew that I had to tell her. But what if Zhao was right? What if she did run away? So what if she did?

That’s the same reaction I’d imagine the real Zhao, me and everyone else in the world would have.

She has a right to freedom. But I didn't want her to get hurt. With all these thoughts running in my head, the same thing always came up. Zhao wouldn't like it.

Zhao doesn’t like a lot of things, like spinach and Hippies and warm beer.

I sighed and got up, walking towards the door. But when I was nearly there, I stopped. I didn't want Arisu to be unhappy. And I couldn't continue listening to Zhao.

He can be quite a dullard what with all his “”Sons and daughters of fire!” speeches.

"Arisu? There's something I have to tell you."

“You see my daughter, we don’t exist. We’re just some stupid fangirl’s attempt at creating characters so we can be vaguely related to a far more interesting and bad ass one.”

A/N: This is the edited version of my original chapter 1, cos after I read a review, I realised I actually left out a lot of details D:

Yeah I can tell this thing is just SO much more detailed and interesting now.

Thank you, SeraphielSong xD I appreciate the help.

If she wanted to help she’d have told you your story idea was crap.

And thank you for all nice reviews I'll update soon, please review

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Chapter 2

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A/N: Thanks for all the reviews! They're very encouraging!

They’re humouring you.

I changed the first chapter so if you haven't seen that, go have a look

Already saw it, not impressed. Can only imagine how much worse the original was.

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I was surprised mother told me. She always seemed to agree with everything father said. And father would not want to let me know if he met Zuko at the docks.

He wanted Zuko for himself you see.

He started hating Zuko ever since he was banished,

He never really seemed to have much of a high opinion of the kid like ever actually.

and would not stand anyone mentioning him.

One too many Naval Officers wound up decapitated for even asking “What was that annoying Prince’s name again?”

"Arisu, promise me you won't do anything rash and stupid," said Mother, looking into my eyes.

"I won't, I promise," I say, looking away.

Joel and the Bots: Liar! Liar! Liar!

I had to leave and look for Zuko,

Told ya.

even if I was only doing so to get away from the house.

Not because you love the asshole, it’s because you want to disobey your parental figures.

I'm sorry I couldn't tell mother, but she wouldn't understand.

Neither does anyone in the readership, but I’m sure there will be a flashback to explain.

"Goodnight," I said, giving her a hug.

"Goodnight,"

I waited until she left, and started packing a bag with food and gold coins.

I spotted something on my bedside table. A journal. A gift from my mother on my last birthday. I never wrote in it, since I never did anything interesting enough to write down in a journal.

Highly doubt that will change anytime soon.

I stuffed it in my bag and looked out the window.

It was getting dark outside, but the festival continued. Happy looking children and their families past by.

With one last look back, I jumped out of the window and hurried into the crowd.

Well she would if she didn’t break both legs in the fall.

"Excuse me? Hello? Does anyone know where the docks are? Excuse me?"

Oh I don’t know, maybe you should head towards the water? Considering you could see pretty much half the damn town from your window it shouldn’t be hard to figure out where to go.

I called through the crowd, but my voice died away in the commotion and music. A parade came marching through, pushing me to the side.

It shouldn't be that hard to find the docks, they were very close

So... why are you asking people?

- which is the reason father came home for a few days.

Wow an explanation for why Zhao’s home that both wasn’t needed and doesn’t really explain anything. Why did Zhao take time off to visit home when he’s got a world to help conquer exactly? Was he just in the neighbourhood and decided to pop by? Cause that really doesn’t sound like Zhao.

"Does anyone know which way the docks are?"

You just said the docks wouldn’t be that hard to find why are you asking this question?

I sat down near a wall and sighed.

Why did I ever think I could do this? I never get anything right! I've never done anything useful! My parents would be glad to be rid of me.

Oh wah wah! Two minutes of trying and already you’re complaining it’s too hard already. God you have no patience or work ethic period lady.

Tears welled up in my eyes and I started to cry. I couldn't help it. I've never been any help to anyone. I was always just a burden. I just wished I could be less useless...

Oh don’t go trying to make me feel sorry for her. I have no attachment to this character, she has no personality, why should I care about her stupid feelings?

FLASHBACK

"But...I don't want to marry him." I said quietly, looking down. We just came back from meeting Zuko for the first time. I didn't like him much back then.

So first impressions of your arranged husband were horrible and now you’re sneaking off to find him why exactly? I mean, I’d like some kind of explanation. Did your daddy’s sudden hatred of him make you decide you wanted to jump his bones? Is this relationship like jiggling keys in front of a baby and taking them away?

Father turned bright red, "You WILL marry him. You WILL do what I say and you WILL not speak out against me. Is that understood?"

Okay, now that’s the Zhao I know.

"But..."

"You WILL marry him! This will be the MOST useful thing you've ever done! Because you've NEVER done anything worthwhile with yourself before. Don't you want to HELP YOUR FAMILY, Arisu? You WILL do what I say!"

If that’s how he feels why does she care if she runs off? More importantly why buy her crappy necklaces if you think she’s worthless? Conflicting messages here.

I stared at my feet, holding back tears. "Yes, father."

END FLASHBACK

"Hey, um, are you okay?" I looked up, and saw a boy around my age, looking rather concerned.

A front of course for when he inevitably slips her a roofie.

I wiped my tears away and smiled. "I'm fine,"

"Are you looking for your parents?"

No just some prince to bone.

"No, I'm fine,"

"Okay, if you're sure," He started walking away. I should have asked him where the docks are!

But it was too late, and poor Arisu wandered the countryside in vain, confused as to where exactly the docks would be forever more. Eventually she became a rabid bestial wild child. The rest of the world, including her father didn’t notice or care. The end.

"Wait!" He stopped, and I ran up to him.

"Do you know where the docks are?"

“They’re by the water ya dumbass.” He told her “Where’d you think they were? The moon?”

He smiled. "Yes, that's where I'm going now! Follow me."

He took my hand and pulled me along in the crowd, making me turn bright red. Hey? I haven't seen anyone my age in 3 years.

Bullshit you haven’t, you’re the town snoop, spying on everything from your window. You’ve seen plenty, especially in the sauna and local hot springs.

"Here we are!" said the boy, as we arrived at the docks.

"Thank you so much!" I said, smiling.

"It was no problem! Bye." "Bye!"

What a completely pointless and unnecessary character that we will never see again. I’ll sure miss him.

Now all I had to do was look for Zuko's ship.

If he has any sense he’s gotten his tub as far away from this place as he can. In fact he should be gone now, because he left to go search for the Avatar. In fact, Zhao shouldn’t have come home period since he spent most of the day during the episode this seems to take place brow beating a teenager and essentially telling him how much his penis was bigger than Zuko’s before leaving to find the Avatar himself.

But I’m arguing about continuity in a crappy fanfic that doesn’t know what the fuck it’s doing.

I was so excited! What would it be like seeing him again after 3 years? He would be glad to see me, right?

Unless you have an arrow on your head and can bend air he won’t care.

I hope so. He wouldn't have changed much.Apart from being banished and all.

Before he was banished he was a semi-happy prince who was smiley and shit, after he was pissed off beyond imagination at the world and obsessive to the point of an existential psychotic breakdown. Yeah, he’s changed quite a bit.

But he's still allowed in docking areas,

No he wasn’t, if he even went into Fire Nation waters he’d get arrested. That’s what banishment means. Fire Nation colonies maybe, but not the main islands of the Fire Nation and I highly doubt Zhao set you folks up in the colonies him being an imperialist jag off and all.

He would smile and hug me and tell me that he loves me...

Zuko was never like that period, he had no moves with ladies and imagining Zuko beinging so quick to hug and kiss anyone that wasn’t his mom is unlikely.

Why do the girl fans of Avatar keep screwing this up? Zuko is not some sex god, he’s a dork, he has no experience with women period apart from Mai and from what I can tell their relationship before they met up again was a bit awkward. Hell it even remained awkward because of Zuko’s constant moodiness. Course I’m not giving Mai enough credit here, she was actually a decent character that didn’t irritate me. Arisu though...

At least, maybe that's what it would be like if I could find him. I searched the whole dock area. He must have left. So what would I do now? Why do I never think things through?

Well at least you and Zuzu share that much in common.

I couldn't go home again. I couldn't be with Zuko.

You can’t go home why exactly? It would be easy, hell for all you know Zhao doesn’t even know you left. Mind explaining?

I could...I could... "Boat ride! Boat ride! Anywhere in the world! Low prices!"

And god put his hands together and shouted “Deus Ex Machina!” and said it was good. Then he threw a kick ass kegger party.

I could go somewhere far away, and start a new life there!

I suppose you could always go to Vegas and repeat the plot of “Showgirls”

I felt bad for leaving my parents, but not bad enough to go back.

Yeah you sound real broken up about it that’s for sure.

Kyoshi Island seems nice. It's in the earth kingdom, and being and island, it was cut off from other places. No one would recognise me there.

Why is a Fire Nation boat headed to Kyoshi Island which at this point in the series is both isolationist, highly suspicious of outsiders and is in the Earth Kingdom? You know the country the Fire Nation is at war with? Germany and Britain didn’t keep boat trips to each other open during the Great War!

"Excuse me?"

The man turned around and smirked. "Lookin' for ya parents, little girl?"

I frowned. "No, how much would a ride to Kyoshi Island be?"

"That's a bit far, little girl, two gold coins."

“Usually it would be more expensive but I’ll do anything for buck. I’ll even suck your dick, well I would if you were a man.”

I smiled. I had two gold coins. I had MORE than two gold coins.

This is how you end your chapter? By reiterating information that we already known or probably just assume without being told, and at the same time is completely pointless, redundant and nonsensical? I have never seen a fanfic do this at this frequency. The chapters are so short that they never properly take time to explain or detail things and yet they waste so much time explaining shit that no one cares about. It’s an enigma.

A/N: Second Chapter's finally done! I had trouble with this one. Probably because nothing's happening! It's so boring D:

At least it’s consistent with the last chapter.

Please Review, next one will be out soon

Too soon if you ask me.

And then something will finally happen!

Highly doubt it.

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Chapter 3

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A/N: Now this is where the story really starts

I’d rather this be where it ends.

Sorry about the lack of Zuko,

Yeah I’m really torn up over that. Not because I hate the guy but because I know when he shows up this bitch is gonna rape his character.

will make up for in flashbacks

Yeah that makes it so much more tolerable.

Thank you for the reviews


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On Kyoshi...

"I know it seems wrong to run, but it's the only way!"

Aang looked down. "I'll call Appa,"

Oh we skipped over the part with Sokka in drag? That was hilarious! No fair.

"Come on, Katara!" Aang sat on Appa's head and helped Katara up.

Copping a feel rather quickly.

"Aang! Wait, there's a girl sleeping in the saddle!"

Frickin hitchhiking hobos. Get a job you losers!

Katara took a glance at the girl again and realised she was wearing...a fire nation dress.

The ellipses was so required.

Katara gasped. "And she's from the fire nation!"

If you could tell, so could the Kyoshians. Why they didn’t feed her to the Unagi when she arrived I have no clue.

"We'll worry about that later, we've got to get Sokka! Yip yip!"

Aang I know you love all living things and cherish the sanctity of human life, but seriously, push the bitch over the side like now. Save us all the trouble.

As Sokka climbed on Appa wearing his pretty dress,

Sokka: It’s not a dress! It’s a warrior’s uniform damn it! Although it does make me feel pretty.

Katara glanced back worriedly at the fire nation girl. She was small and skinny with long black hair, and looked harmless enough. But she was still from the fire nation.

Also she’s a very lame and uninteresting character that will no doubt be a total load.

"I know it seems wrong, but Zuko would have destroyed the whole place if we stayed. They're going to be okay, Aang."

The girl in the red dress turned over in her sleep, and started sleep talking. "Zuko? Oh, it's Zuko? Hi, Zuko! Haven't seen you in a while, Zuko. Oh, you want me to kiss you Zuko? Just this once, then."

Oh god, dear fucking god. I really hope dream Zuko slaps the annoying bitch, like, now.

She started making little kissing noises, which caught Sokka's attention.

"WAIT A MOMENT!" screamed Sokka, "WHOSE THAT? SHE'S FROM THE FIRE NATION?" Sokka jumped up and down on the saddle.

This caused Appa to jerk and the girl accidentally flew over the side and got eaten by the Unagi.

No one was paying attention to him though, because Aang had jumped down into the ocean, onto the Unagi, and was spraying water all over the village on Kyoshi Island, putting out the fire.

The way you write makes the scene look far less bad ass then it is. How do you drain the life out of something that looked so cool? Ask this author.

"I know, I know, that was stupid and dangerous!"

"Yes, it was," said Katara, smiling, hugging a blushing Aang.

"Hey, hey," Sokka crossed his arms, "That's very sweet and all, but whose THIS?" he pointed at the sleeping girl.

"We...don't know," Aang scratched his head, laughing nervously.

Aang: We just like picking up strange vagabonds who stow away on our giant flying monster for no reason other than a contrived plot point.


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Zuko growled, fire shooting out of his hands. They were soaking wet, and the Avatar escaped.

And there was someone else on the back of their sky bison. Someone in fire nation clothes,

How could you possibly see that? She was sleeping in the saddle! Lying down and really really fucking high up. Do you have eagle eyes or something with built in X-Ray vision?

and she looked very familiar. But it couldn't be Arisu, right?

Why you would care I don’t know since you have a sorta girlfriend back home that is also a hot ninja chick. I mean she may be gloomy but at she has an actual personality.

Her father would never allow her to leave her house! And she always listened to her father.

FLASHBACK

Zuko took Arisu's hand, looking in her eyes. "You could come with me,"

She closed her eyes, tears running down her cheek. "I'm sorry Zuko, father would never allow me,"

I never thought I’d see a role reversal of the Edward/Bella scene in New Moon, but there you go.

"Then don't tell him,"

"I'm sorry." The tears were coming down faster now, and she couldn't see clearly any more. That was good, it meant that she didn't have to see his hurt face.

It also meant she ran straight off the balcony and plummeted to her death. Yay!

But she couldn't betray her own father. He cared about her, right? She mattered to him.

Which is why the first thing he said to you when you said you didn’t wanna marry Zuko was “You’re a worthless sack of crap” and you had self-worth issues back in chapter two. Yeah this is consistent.

Again I have to ask though, what exactly changed your mind about Zuko. It’s funny, I complain a lot about “Show don’t tell” but this is the first really crappy fanfic I’ve mocked that does neither!

"I'm sorry," she repeated, turning away, "I'm sorry..."

It’s too late to apologize! It’s too laaaaaatttttteeee!

END FLASHBACK

"Really Zuko," Uncle's voice interrupted Zuko's little flashback moment, "Did you have a run in with some rain? Have some hot Jasmine Tea before you get a cold,"

No Uncle no! You can tell better jokes than that! Damn you Avatar writers! Why can’t you ever be funny! You should know how to be funny! You watch the series!

Zuko growled, taking the towel Uncle offered him.

"The Avatar will not escape again,"

Never make empty promises to yourself Zuko.


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A/N:

LOL at sleep talking Arisu

You have a strange concept of what is funny young lady.

Thanks for reading Please review, will update soon

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Chapter 4

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A/N:

Sorry about the longness!

You mean this chapter is actually going to be more than two worthless paragraphs? Oh joy, three worthless paragraphs of the same tripe we’ve been reading! Such an improvement.

Oh wait, no she means how long she took to get it updated. Nevermind.

But I got very sick and couldn't update for about a week. But here it is

Damnit, if she stayed sick for another day she would’ve lost interest in it like most fanfic writers her caliber.

Thank you for all the lovely reviews


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"Here we are, the earth kingdom city of Omashu! I used to always come here to visit my friend Bumi!"

He had a wicked stash of shrooms.

The three of them stood, looking out at the wonderful city.

"Wow, we don't have cities like this at the southern water tribe!" said Katara, eyes widening.

"They have buildings that don't melt!" Sokka gaped.

On the downside, not as easy to make popsicles in this weather.

"Let's go slow-pokes, the real fun is INSIDE the city!"

They got both hookers AND blow.

"What do we do about the fire nation girl?" Katara glanced back at the girl in Appa's saddle.

9 mil? AK 47? Curbstomp? Just throwing out ideas.

"Oh, we'll just leave her here!" said Aang, grabbing his staff.

Can we smother her with a pillow first?

"WE CAN'T DO THAT!" yelled Sokka.

Yeah we have to at least put whip cream in her hand, do something to fuck with her!

"Oh, Appa will take care of her, won't you Appa?"

Appa made his Appa-noise.

Oh do you mean bellow? Or Roar? Or Grunt? Or Groan? Or grumble? Or any other possible word you could use for the sound Appa’s mouth makes. Your vocabulary sucks ass.

"I don't mean that!" said Sokka, "She's from the FIRE NATION! She'll probably just take Appa to her fire nation lands and do creepy fire nation things to him!"

Oh great, now I got images of bestiality in my mind, thanks Sokka.

"Don't be stupid, Sokka," Aang waved his hand, "She looks harmless,"

And she really did. She was very skinny and frail looking, but also very pretty.

Like every other female OC in every other Avatar fanfic ever made.

"FIRE NATION!" stressed Sokka,"Katara?"

"Actually, I think it's fine!" said Katara.

Oh what you wanna make her your next little project? Wanna shout hope speeches and shit at her like you do everyone else?

"Besides, we're only going in for a visit, we'll be right back."

Well they’re off to engage in far more hilarious and interesting hijinks.


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I woke up on a big fluffy cloud. Wait, WHAT?

My thoughts exactly.

I felt the leather saddle underneath me, and looked around. On one side, there was the countryside, with wild plants and shrubs as far as the eye can see. On the other, was a huge earth kingdom city, with many walls surrounding it. All these big things made me feel rather small.

I can make you feel smaller. You’re a crappy original character who is presently inhabiting this universe to serve as the author’s own little avatar in order for her to write a fantasy about boning Zuko. You’re nothing but a vehicle for a young horrible writer’s wet dream, you’re a masturbation tool. Feel pathetic and insignificant yet? Wanna kill yourself now or later?

I realised I must be sleeping on my new friend.

How you possibly managed to stay asleep for who knows how many hours that it took Appa to fly here along with the battle back at Kyoshi I have no idea. You must be a very heavy sleeper.

"Mr Flufflepuff?"

You’re calling Appa Mr. Flufflepuff? Flufflepuff. Really? How... how fucking old are you again? 16? You were 13 when you met Zuko three years ago so, yeah 16. You must be mentally retarded.

I climbed off Mr Flufflepuff and gave him an apple from the inside of the bag I brought with me.

"Mr Flufflepuff, where have you taken me?" I frowned and tutted, pretending to be angry, but laughed when he just opened his mouth for another apple.

Appa’s just carrying her for the food no doubt.

"Well," I continued, not sure whether I was talking to myself or Mr Flufflepuff, "We're obviously not on Kyoshi any more! I never should have fallen asleep on you. But you look very comfortable!"

So many questions raised, why did you decide to fall asleep on a giant fluffy monster with a saddle? Didn’t you realise it must’ve belonged to someone if it had one of those? Did you not know it was the Avatar’s? How exactly did you not realise the Avatar was on Kyoshi along with practically everyone else on that island? Are you some kind of shut-in? Why did Kyoshi Island let you stay there for any period of time if they could guess you were Fire Nation? Why are you such an uninteresting and boring as shit character? Why the fuck am I reading this crap again!? Why doesn’t this fucking story explain anything at all!?!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kx-97uRkzRg

I tried to laugh about it with Mr Flufflepuff, but that was the truth. I really shouldn't have stayed with him,

Should’ve thought about that before you decided to go Rip Van Winkle on his back.

because now I'm far from Kyoshi. But then again, I had no real plans. I could just try starting a new life in the Earth Kingdom City in the distance.

Good head there and never EVER come back. Let Aang and the Water Sibs continue on their journey without you. It would be better for all involved.

That's a better idea then Kyoshi!

I got up to get Mr Flufflepuff another apple. He was going to eat all my food soon. He munched on the apple, while I unpacked some food I brought with me.

You’re gonna feed all your supplies to the giant monster? Wow, you are a really stupid woman you know that? Then again you did admit to not having any real plans outside of dick around and wandering aimlessly.

Where am I?

I'm in hell, the place you should be instead.

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"I can't believe it," said Katara, "After all that, he was really just your old friend Bumi,"

Sokka, Katara, Aang and Momo were walking back to Appa, ready to continue their journey, but they found the fire nation girl had woken up.

Oh godamnit! Guys whatever you do, don’t bring her along! She’s a load!

You’re gonna bring her along aren’t ya? Damn it!

She looked startled to see them.

"Hello!" said Aang, "I'm Aang, and this is Momo, and Katara!"

Yeah just leave Sokka out why don’t ya Aang. Jerk.

Also surprisingly welcomingly considering she snuck aboard your Bison.

"Okay, now you can go back to your little fire nation friends and leave us alone," Sokka crossed his arms and frowned.

Thank you Sokka, go on girly, they have far more interesting things to do then to waste time dragging you around.

The girl said a small "Oh" and picked up her bag to leave.

"No, wait!" said Aang, "If you have nowhere to go, you could come with us!"

"What?"

"WHAT?"

DAMN IT! Aang stop! You have no idea what you’re doing! I’ve spent three chapters with this bitch! She’s fucking boring as shit!

"Really?" The girl smiled at Aang

"What are you THINKING, Aang?" exclaimed Sokka, "She's a FIRE BENDER, she'll BURN US ALL TO CRISP!"

Well even if she was she’d probably suck at it, don’t worry.

"Actually..."

"Then she could teach me! You know I need a teacher!"

There are better, cooler firebenders that could teach you, trust me.

"Does she want to teach you?" asked Katara, looking at the girl.

"But I'm not a fire bender," she said.

"See?" said Aang, "She's harmless!

And useless so there’s no point to keeping her. She ain’t a pet she’s a dull self-insert with no personality other than Zuko-lust.

Please, can she stay?"

"No!"

Katara looked Aang, who was making huge puppy eyes at her, and then at Sokka, who had crossed his arms and was looking angry, and then at the fire nation girl, who smiled and waved.

"I think she can stay," said Katara, sighing, "But only because you think so,"

Yes cause if the first season of Avatar was missing anything it was annoying 16 year old who served no purpose, offered nothing to the team and was more boring than a sack of sun-dried raisins.

"YES! Let's go! Stop being angry, Sokka!"

Why is Aang so eager to drag this bitch along? She can’t teach him firebending, he already has a crush on Katara and she stowed away on their flying monster! She’s useless in a fight and she’s not an engaging character I’m interested in. This is contrived and stupid!

"What are you doing? Get off Appa, and get in the saddle!"

"I'm not sitting in the same saddle as an evil fire nation worker!"

"But Aang can't drive if you sit there!"

"Don't think of Appa as some machine!"

"I can't drive if you sit here!"

You really have no concept of how to write funny dialogue do you?


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A/N: There it is Thank you for reading Please review if you're reading, I'd love to know what you think of the story and what you think I should do next

I think it’s crap and the only way to improve it would be to have the dumb bitch fall to an untimely death.

I think I'll get the next one out tonight, to make up for the wait

Take you time, I really don’t care.

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Chapter 5

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A/N: Second Chapter this day! To make up for not updating so long!

I feel rather proud of myself

Why is a mystery to me.

It's not much of a chapter though. Gosh, it's not much of a story!

That’s an understatement.

But I'm here to improve my writing with the help of you readers!

Well you can start by going back to school and learning how to write properly.

I realized there's not much Zuko in this at all xD

That’s the least of your problems.

But there will be, there will be It's technically only Chapter 3

Thank you for the reviews, and for following this story It means more to me than you know

I hate to crush your pride in this drivel, but I will.


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Arisu sat in the saddle, patting Momo and watching the oceans go by as they flew.

"What's your name?" asked Katara, not sure whether to trust her or not.

THEN WHY THE FUCK DID YOU LET HER COME!? What cause Aang wanted her to come along? God you people are idiots.

"Arisu," she smiled, catching Momo before he fell overboard, "Careful, Momo!"

Cause Momo would so die if he fell off of Appa in the air- oh wait no he wouldn’t cause Momo can fucking fly! God I hate you!

Katara laughed, "I'm Katara,"

"That's such a pretty name," said Arisu, smiling.

"Thank you!"

Sokka glared at them from across the saddle.

I don’t really blame him, this is so inane.

"So WHAT, Katara, you're just going to be FRIENDS WITH HER? Next you're going to start doing each other's hair! She's FIRE NATION! Don't you remember? The fire nation killed our mother!"

Oh great, Sokka is a total jerk for no reason. The standard poor writer of an Avatar fic always does this, Sokka is an asshole and everything he says is wrong. Hey, dumbass, if you remember the Episode “Jet”, Sokka showed he could distinguish between friend and foe, he wasn’t and never was a complete jerk off.

Arisu gasped, and Katara sighed, before looking up and frowning at Sokka.

"What did Arisu do to hurt you? SHE didn't kill mom! She's not even a fire bender! She's being nice!"

Considering how Katara acted toward Zuko throughout season 3 I think this is the pot calling the kettle black, what you say?

Sokka just pouted and turned around.

"I-I'm sorry about your mother..." said Arisu, looking at her hands. She couldn't think what she would do without her mother. Her mother was like a beacon of light in the huge dreary house she lived in.

That was because she put a glow-worm in her hair and wrapped herself in Christmas lights.

"It's okay," Katara looked away, "It was years ago in a fire nation raid..."

Arisu gasped. "A RAID?

Ants: RAID! AHHHHHH!

(Giant spray can squashes ants.)

Why would they start a raid?"

Katara looked at Arisu. "Because of the war, why else?"

Arisu looked confused at Katara. "What war? There's a WAR?"

"For the last hundred of years!" exclaimed Katara.

You’re kidding, she hasn’t heard about the war? Come on where did she think her dad was all this time? Why did she think Zuko was banished?!

Both Aang, who had overheard, and Sokka, who was eavesdropping stared at Arisu.

"Wait, you don't happen to have been trapped in an iceberg for a hundred years?" Aang looked up from his Appa string thingies (those things you use to steer horses and stuff! Gosh, I forgot what they're called!)

They’re called reigns you dumb whore! Reigns! God you’re stupid. Get a dictionary!

"What, no!" said Arisu, "I've never been outside my house!"

Yes you have! You were out of it three years ago when you talked to Zuko the first time! And no doubt your dad talked about it at the table when you were all having dinner! There is no way you could possibly not know about this damn war! Why is this story so stupid?

"The fire nation started it and have been taking over small villages and towns. They wiped all of the Air Nomads!" exclaimed Aang, not too sure whether or not to mention that he was an air bender, and the avatar.

Knowing Arisu at this point she probably doesn’t even know what an Air Nomad is.

"Oh, no wonder you hate the fire nation! I'm so sorry!" Arisu gasped.

It can't be! She thought, A war? And the fire nation started it? No way!



But she just nodded and looked sympathetic

Meaning she’s faking it. Bitch.

when Katara told her stories of the fire nation tyranny. She still didn't believe it, of course. She'd have to see for herself. But it made a lot of sense.

The fire nation started a century old war? The fire nation attacked villages? The fire nation killed their mother? It can't be all our fault!

Arisu: Airbender Holocaust Denier!

On the inside, she started becoming angry with these people for saying all these things. Who were they to accuse the fire nation of such evil!

Yeah! Heil the Fire Lord! Down with the filthy Air-Jeuden and Lesser Races!

"See, Sokka?" said Katara, smiling at Arisu "Arisu's innocent. She's never been outside her house, and her parents told her nothing.

Why I have no idea, considering Zhao is always one to gloat about how victorious he is over the lesser elements.

She's not involved!"

Arisu smiled back gratefully, but on the inside, she was angry.

Yeah you said that already. We know she’s a two faced bitch.

The fire nation did no such things.

She’s such an endearing character, two faced, boring as shit with no personality, lies to her parents, is ignorant of everything and what’s more she’s part of the Fire Lord Youth. Such a wonderful character. (Sarcasm vomit) Wow, overload there.

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A/N: Thank you for making the effort to read through this chapter!

Oh it was an effort believe you me.

Please review

Note to self: Must include more Zuko.

That ain’t gonna help squat lady.

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As can be seen rather clearly, Avatar fanfiction is mostly this, especially back in the old days. It was dull, boring, full of crappy original characters made purely so they could get in Zuko’s pants and full of really poorly t5hought out story ideas that made one want to tear his eyes out.

That was very painful for me, very much so. There are some people who should just never write at all. Period.

This post has been edited by Lizard-Man: Dec 9 2010, 12:08 PM

[T_K_17]

Nice review, man. I really should watch this series before the shitty fanfiction kills my interest in it.

[TigerEyes]

Nice review, man.  I really should watch this series before the shitty fanfiction kills my interest in it.

Good idea. The series really is too good for this crap.

Nice mock, Lizard-Man! Your jokes were hilarious, and I thought it was great that even the author started getting bored of her story... XD

This post has been edited by TigerEyes: Jul 15 2010, 11:27 AM

[Lizard-Man]

Well back to horror that is crappy Avatar fiction with the continuation of this horrible, horrible Zuko/OC story. Will it stop being boring? Doubtful.

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A/N: Another Chapter! I'm quite proud of myself for updating so quickly

Are you also proud of the no doubt tons of spelling mistakes this rushed piece of shit will have too?

But I have to get these out, and I can't wait to actually put some Zuko in this!

Yeah I can’t wait for you to make him a boring as fuck love interest making goo goo eyes at your crappy OC every two seconds either.

Oh! And I was thinking of splitting the story up into a couple of stories, because Avatar is just such a long series

Fuck you, as if we needed more of your shit clogging the bandwith.

Thank you for the nice reviews

There are nice reviews? Why?

And a little mention to Izzie-94 whose commented on every chapter

Izzie needs to get a life or at least a better pastime.

I appreciate all of you who are reading and giving my story a chance!

Disclaimer: Avatar belongs to Nickelodeon...I think

Enough with the fucking emoticons already!


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The clearing they camped in seemed quite peaceful.

What better place to rest at than Landshark Creek right next door to Grizzly Cave and Rattlesnake rock?

They were on a little plateau made of rock,

As opposed to Plateu’s made of cheese or soda cans.

and beside them, a little stream moved by. Katara folded clothes while Aang lay on a tree.

Thrilling.

"You're so hard working!" Arisu remarked, watching as Katara folded and packed the clothing, "Do you want me to help?"

Yeah, go drown yourself, that would mean one less mouth to feed.

"No, it's fine," Katara said, smiling, "You really don't want to go anywhere near Sokka's laundry."

And yet you complained about Toph not wanting to carry it. Consistency people?

"Arisu, how did your dress turn blue?" asked Aang.

Its a mood dress, they were pretty popular in the sixties.

Aang was right, Arisu's beautiful silk dress had turned from a deep red to a dark shiny blue.

Why? No reason, and to be honest quite pointless. I assume it’s so no one guesses she’s Fire Nation, but as we’ll see the reasoning they come up with is stupid.


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FLASHBACK

An entire flash back just to explain why her dress is a different color, wow, that’s incredibly stupid. Just put it at the start of the chapter dumbass.

They just landed in the clearing and Katara had went down the stream to do the laundry.

If she had done it earlier then how come she was complaining Sokka’s clothes stunk? Are they really that bad.”?

"I'll find somewhere to land Appa," said Aang, who took off into the sky with the bison.

But you just landed him, why look for another place? This isn’t like dropping the kids off at the front of the theatre and circling around for a spot while they get the tickets.

"And leave me alone with someone from the FIRE NATION?" Sokka yelled, making arm gestures at Arisu.

Sokka you have a club and she is an idiot bitch who can’t do jack, I think you can take her.

Arisu sighed, a loud gust of air, which eventually turned into loud coughs.

Yay she’s caught whooping cough! So much for your retarded as fuck homeopathy treatments!

Sokka looked alarmed. "Are you alright?" he said, rushing to her side, as the coughs started to reside.

Sokka: I am suddenly concerned over a girl who is nothing but a complete and total load!

Wow, subtle author, very subtle.

"I'm- COUGH COUGH – alright," finally, she stopped, and smiled at Sokka, but he just turned around and pouted.

"Not that I care or anything, its just that if you were sick you could make Katara and Aang sick or something,"

Look on the bright side, then you’d have an episode to yourself.

It was a small comment that Sokka was just using as a cover up, Arisu knew that, but it was true. Her eyes widened, and she started to panic on the inside. What could she do?

So she’s stupid, a clumsy, sleeps like a log, can’t firebend and now a few coughs from kicked up dust apparently make her think she’s sick. God she’s paranoid.

"Well, you should change into something else," said Sokka,

Even if she was sick, how is that gonna help keep the others from catching it?

still not turning to face her, "We don't want anyone knowing you're fire nation."

Actually they don’t want anyone to know you’re with them period, they have a rep to keep.

"Oh!" Arisu brightened up, momentarily distracted, "I can turn the dress inside out! Their lining is blue!"

Since when would a silk dress, already bad travelling clothes mind you, have blue lining? Also how very convenient is that, that your dress just so happens to blue turned inside out. I think people are gonna notice it’s inside out, what with the tag and the seams sticking out.

"Go on then," said Sokka, turning around and sitting on a rock, "Do whatever,"

Arisu smiled. "Not in front of you, silly,"

Sokka: Yeah, it’s probably best if I avoid having to see your ugly as fuck body. We don’t have much eye bleech.

She got off the plateau and started changing behind a large rock.

"Of course not," said Sokka, blushing.

Sokka don’t you fucking dare start to like this bitch or even think of developing a crush on her or I will kill you! I will not let your dignity get sucked away like your sister’s and Aang’s.

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"Great, you're back! What's for dinner?"

Hippo testicles, want some?

Sokka was walking back to the clearing, carrying a small bag.

”Who wants pigs head!”

"We've got a few options," he said, as Aang and Katara gathered around him. Arisu watched from a distance.

Kinda like the viewer at home.

"First, round nuts, and some kind of oval shaped nuts? And some rock shaped nuts, which might just be rocks,"

Also some stuff from Arby’s, but it’s really not that different.

Sokka threw a couple of nuts to Momo, who picked them up and looked at them with interest.

"Dig in!" Sokka smiled.

"Seriously, what else you got?" asked Katara, looking at the nuts.

Twelve week old Cheetos, seriously we’re scraping the bottom of the barrel here.

Sokka looked inside his bag.

But they were all distracted from food when they heard loud crashes and booms.

Yes, the Haru episode, indicated by the fact the dialogue was repeated verbatim from that scene. Can we expect something interesting to happen at last?


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They all lay on Appa as he tore through the starlit skies slowly.

Are you surprised at all?

"Arisu?" Katara said, not sure whether she was awake or not. Arisu was awake, but Aang wasn't, and neither was Sokka, who was snoring away.

Yes that was such important information, we REALLY needed to know the others were sleeping.

"Thank you, for coming with me to the ship,"

It had been a long day, an emotionally tiring one for Arisu. They met a earth bender named Haru who lived in a village taken over by the fire nation, and tried to help break him out of prison when the soldiers discovered he could earth bend.

Reading about that episode would’ve been more fun than HALF the crap we’ve had to read about so far.

She'd seen the fire nation wreak havoc on people with her own eyes, and it was so confusing! She didn't know what to believe any more.

She excused it away by saying “Oh they were giving those people a job on that rig, that’s all. The whipping was just standard motivational practice.”

"Me? I didn't do anything! I can't help much, not being a bender and all..."

Which again begs the question what good you are to this team? Haru, Pipsqueak and The Duke didn’t do jack when they joined up with the group for a bit but at least technically they could fight!

Katara smiled, although Arisu couldn't see in the darkness. "But you came with me, and that's what matters to me,"

She came with you and offered no skills other than emotional support. Big help she was. Did she stand to the side and offer encouraging advice?

Arisu smiled too. "It's no problem,"

The two soon drifted off to sleep, and Arisu dreamt of something she hadn't meant to think about at all.

Oh boy, thats what I wanted to read about, Arisu’s shitty dreams, not people fighting with elemental powers! Wow, it’s like you’ve sucked all the interesting stuff out of the cartoon and replaced it with shit. Amazing!


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"Come on Arisu," said Mother, knocking at my bedroom door, "We're going to the palace in 5 minutes!

”And the contractors need to start tearing down your room for the bar room!”

Are you done changing?"

”Come on ya dumb whore, we don’t have time for this, just put on something that shows off your boobs and hurry up.”

"Nearly!" I called back, "Just a moment,"

Mother wanted me to wear a nice dress for dinner, but I didn't want to go at all.

She just wanted to see if her pre-order of Starcraft had come in.

I wasn't looking forward to have dinner with a Fiance I didn't want to marry. But at least I got to go outside.

Where she no doubt saw the recruitment posters to join the war effort and buy war bonds, how was she unaware of the war again?

I finished changing and walked outside, smiling at Mother.

While no doubt secretly wanting to kill everyone in the building.

"I'm sorry you have to do this Arisu..." she said, "He can't be that bad, right?"

Well this is before his phase of running up to the top of mountains and shouting at the heavens to strike him down. So yeah, not that bad.


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"How wonderful to see you, Akira, Arisu!" Lady Ursa was bright and friendly

And also should be dead since when Zuko was 13 years old and that was when he gotten himself banished, just re-checked that by the way, and his mother had been dead since he was like eight or ten none of this makes sense. Thanks for fucking with continuity.

...unlike her son.

Too busy listening to Linkin Park to care no doubt, normally I’d complain. This situation though it’s appropriate cause they’re gonna saddle him with this boring as fuck chick.

It was after dinner and we were all seated on cushions in a lovely warm room with a fire burning in the middle.

Cool, you can roast marshmallows for dessert!

Father and the Fire Lord were talking in another room. Gosh, to think I was that close the leader of the whole of the fire nation!

She was disappointed she didn’t get him to sign her copy of “Mein Kampf” which she had left at home.

Lady Ursa and Mother exchanged knowing smiles.

"Zuko, you should take Arisu for a walk around the garden, to make up for how rude you were the other day!" suggested Lady Ursa.

Isn’t this their first meeting? How was he rude to her before when this was the first time they met? And come on it’s not like she didn’t deserve it.

She and Mother started giggling quietly when Zuko grabbed my hand and dragged me out of the room,

Ursa: Isn’t it adorable how we’re forcing our children into a relationship against their will?

through the corridors and into the garden, with me blushing the whole time.

He finally stopped at a bench near a fountain and motioned for me to sit down next to him.

He was careful to hide the landmine and readied himself to make his escape.

We sat in silence for what seemed like hours, but it was probably only seconds.

I have the same feeling when reading these fanfics.

"You...have...a nice garden," I smiled up at him,

”I hate sand.” He responded.

because he was awfully tall for a 13 year old, and I was awfully short.

Zuko wasn’t much for midgets.

"Thanks, I...uhh...like your dress,"

Wow, George Lucas levels of romance dialogue here. I’d even dare say that it’s worse.

I laughed, because I was outside the confinements of my house, because the stars in the sky were twinkling happily at me, because Zuko was being friendlier than he was when I met him yesterday,

You could’ve been a bit clearer about when this was taking place. And why has he suddenly warmed up to you for no reason? You have no personality beyond being boring?

and because he just told me he liked my dress.

Cause that was apparently laugh out loud hilarious... for some reason.

And he laughed too.

So you’re the reason Zuko has a crap sense of humour then huh?


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A/N: Thank you for reading this chapter

Please update, I would love to hear from you

You will when you stop using these fucking emoticons.

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A/N: Hello

Hereee's Another Chapterrr! This one's much longer

Great more squalid shit to sift through Oh well, it’s only four pages. Twice the length of her usual shit.

Thank you for the reviews! I appreciate that people are taking the time to read and review

There is no Zuko in this one

You know you keep teasing him for some reason as if we’re all awaiting the raping his character will undergo with baited breath.

But there would probably be much more Zuko-filled creamy goodness

Ewwwwwww.

in the sequel Which would be like based on Season 2

Oh please let that fall through cause she gets bored please!

Okay, we've all had enough of listening to Jenni ramble on Or...reading


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Arisu was in her bedroom, and Akira was outside, waiting anxiously for the doctor to finish. Zhao was on his ship, sailing away on some other fire nation mission.

Something called “Operation: Burn’em all!” or something.

But that didn't matter. Arisu had been sick for the last couple of days, and the doctor was here to find out what was wrong.

Doctor Feng opened the door and closed it behind him.

Thrilling.

"Is she alright? What's wrong?" Akira asked, her face covered with concern.

And tan lotion.

The doctor sighed. "I did a full check up. With the symptoms you've described, she has a disease of the blood. It's not contagious, however there is no cure. The symptoms such as coughing, dizziness, fever and headaches will start every now and then, but at other times she'll appear to be fine and she can continue with normal life..."

Wait, are you saying she has what Hyatt from Excel Sage had? Cause coughing up blood till the world drowns ain’t gonna be normal.

Or does she have what Tsar Nicholas’ son had where his blood wouldn’t clot? Cause that’s even worse, she’s practically a walking tissue paper. So now not only is she an annoying OC she is also unable to fight anyone and can serve no useful purpose to Aang and the team? Again, why should we take her along now instead of admitting her to hospital or something?

Akira tried to take in everything the doctor said. …...Normal life?


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"Those clouds look so soft, don't they? Like you could just jump down and you'd land in a big, soft cottony heap,"

"Maybe you should give it a try!"

"You're hilarious,"

"I'll try it!" said Aang, taking his staff and jumping into a nearby cloud.

You know when you repeat dialogue from episodes, it just makes me want to watch the episodes, cause those were always far more exciting.

"Aang?" yelled Arisu, as Katara and Sokka watched him from over the edge of Appa's saddle.

Bitch you know he’s an airbender, he’ll be fine. Shut up.

"Turns out clouds are made of water," said Aang, who was dripping wet.

And suddenly he’s back up on Appa. Great lack of consistency there.

"Hey, what is that?" said Katara, looking at a patch of black land.

"It's like a scar..."

Well we’ll take your word for it cause there ain’t no description in this damn story.

They landed Appa and walked through the ash filled lands. What looked like hundreds of dead trees surrounded them.

They had stumbled onto the set of the History Channel’s Axe Men.

"Listen..." said Sokka, "It's so quiet...There's no life anywhere,"

On the bright side we can open up a strip mall.

Arisu looked around. To her, it only looked like a burned down trees,

Don’t say anything! Some annoying PSA mascot is gonna come out of nowhere to educate you about why you should care.

but it obviously made Aang, Sokka and Katara unhappy.

They were members of Earth First after all.

"Aang, are you okay?" asked Katara.

Sokka knelt down, and spotted footprints.

"Fire Nation!" he exclaimed, "Those evil savages make me sick, they have no respect for.."

Katara shushed him. "What, I'm not allowed to be angry?"

You’re stuck in this story so yeah, of course you are.

Aang sat down and sighed, picking up handfuls of burnt soil.

"How could anyone do this? How could I let this happen?"

Well at least you’re taking it better than these folks.

Slowly, Arisu began to understand, This whole area used to be a wider forest, filled with hundreds of trees and animals.

Wow... you are so slow a snail sitting on a rock moves faster than ya. You sure you aren’t ass retarded?

And...the fire nation did this too?

Yeah, that’s what Sokka was screaming about wasn’t he? Are them old gears clogged up or something?


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"Hey, Aang, are you ready to be cheered up?" Aang sat where he was before, looking sad. Sokka sat a few metres away from him, also looking sad. Arisu sat between them, not knowing who she should be looking sad next to.

That sentence made no sense... then again reading this story makes no sense.

"No," replied Aang,

Suddenly, Katara threw an acorn at Aang's head. "HEY! How was that cheering me up?"

It didn’t, Katara just loves your pain.

Sokka laughed. "It cheered me up!" Katara threw an acorn at him too.

"Ow! Yeah, I probably deserved that..." said Sokka, rubbing his head.

Serves ya right for entertaining the idea Arisu ain’t all that bad.

"These acorns are everywhere, Aang," explained Katara, "Every one of these will be a tall oak tree one day, and the forest will grow back. All the birds and animals that lived here once will come back."

In about 40 years... sucks kinda.

"Thanks, Katara,"

Arisu smiled at them, feeling glad that Aang was happier. But their happiness was cut short when a figure headed towards them from the distance.

It’s Clint Eastwood! He’s come to make this story interesting at last!

"Hey, umm...Whose that?"Arisu exclaimed.

A one shot character that is actually better developed then you are.

They all turned around, seeing an elderly man with a walking stick.

"Hey, who are you?" asked Sokka.

"When I saw the sky bison, I thought it was impossible," he turned towards Aang, "But those markings, are you the Avatar, child?"

Aang nodded.

"My village desperately needs your help!" he said.

”We’re out of vegemite!”

Everyone turned to follow him, but Arisu stayed in her spot.

"Wait...what's an Avatar?"

Are you fucking kidding me?

Okay, the thing about her not knowing about the war, that was bad enough. This is just... dear fucking god. There are no words. Look if you know about bending you know about the Avatar. It’s a universal fact. You should’ve known about it because Zuko was banished and sentenced to find the Avatar! There is no reason you shouldn’t know this no matter how sheltered you are!

It’s official you are an idiot. You are the most brain dead moron in the history of morons. Fuck this story, and fuck you.


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"Are you serious?" exclaimed Sokka, "You didn't know?"

Thank you Sokka for voicing my complaints more simply.

They were walking to the village, and everyone was trying to explain to Arisu what the avatar was.

Shouldn’t one ask the question of how the fuck she couldn’t know about the Avatar when it’s standard basic knowledge for everyone in this world?

"The avatar is the master of all four elements!" said Katara.

"Wow, really?" Arisu beamed at Aang, "I didn't know you could do that, how smart!"

How is that smart? It’s not smart, it’s not a knowledge thing it’s an ability thing! You can say it’s cool or amazing but you can’t say it’s smart. That like saying Wolverine or Spider-Man powers are smart.

Aang started turning red. "well..uhh..not really..."

"It takes time to master each element, like a normal bender mastering their own element, and the Avatar has to do it four times..." explained Katara.

"Okay," said Sokka, "Let me explain. Let's say the world is a dead fish, and all the little flies are like the people, and the Avatar is like king of the flies..."

Sokka... you’re not helping the dumb bitch. Just stop.

"What? No, Sokka, that's not it!" exclaimed Aang.

"Wow, really?" Arisu beamed at Aang again, "So you're like the king of everyone?

Oh great now she’s even more fucking stupid. Thanks Sokka.

I didn't know! Maybe I should have dressed better..."

You’re wearing an inside out silk dress and it’s the only thing you own, how should you be dressed?


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Arisu and Katara sat together, watching the forest and waiting for Aang and Sokka to return.

Oh you’re kidding, you skipped the damn fight scene with the forest spirit! You suck.

"They'll both be back soon," said Arisu, putting a hand on Katara's shoulder.

"I know," she said.

The elderly man approached them. "You shouldn't worry, I'm sure they''ll be back,"
"I know," she said.

That so needed to be repeated twice by two different characters. Why is the author so inept?

"You should both get some rest," he said, putting his blanket over Katara, and offering another to Arisu. She smiled gratefully and said a small thank you.

"Everything's going to be okay," said Katara.

"You're brother's in good hands," he continued, "I'd be shocked if the avatar returned without him,"

The sun rose, and Arisu yawned. She didn't realise how late it had gotten. She never got to stay up late back home.

Zhao pushed her out of the living room to watch porn and beat her mom most of the time.

"The sun is rising," said the man, "Perhaps he will return soon,"

The man and Katara turned towards the sun, and Arisu smiled at them both. The man was being very nice to them, and Arisu had began to admire nice people, because they were often so selfless and giving, and from what Arisu knew, that was rare.

Consider how ignorant of the world you are I wouldn’t be so quick to claim you know how rare something like human kindness is.


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They continued to sit at the wall of the village together when the man left.

Arisu tried to think of something to talk about.

This no doubt took hours to accomplish.

"So that's where you're going? The North Pole?To learn WaterBending? Asked Arisu, in an attempt to break the silence.

"Yes," replied Katara, "I'm surprised you never asked,"

If she never asked when did she learn about this?

"I just thought you travelled, I never knew you needed somewhere to go to travel,"

Um... the whole point of travelling is to go somewhere, even if you’re nomadic you have a destination. You’re tyrying to find somewhere to stay for a bit and eat. Even if you’re just walking around the block with your dog you have a destination in mind, you have a path to follow. You ain’t Plato, don’t try and be all philosophical.

"I guess you don't..." said Katara,

Weren’t you listening, the point of travelling is to go somewhere. Stop trying to be deep, it’s not working.

"But what were you doing on Kyoshi, so far away from the fire nation?"

"I'm surprised you never asked," said Arisu, glad to have something to talk about, to distract Katara from worrying about Aang and Sokka.

It doesn’t distract from how crappy this story is though.

So she told Katara everything. Well, almost everything. Not about her being sick. But about being engaged to Zuko, and running away from home, and from her controlling father, and about how glad she was the find new friends.

Katara realised how boring this person truly was and desperately tried to stay awake throughout the thing.

"Wait, Zuko?" Katara's eyes widened in shock, "The jerk that chases us? He burned down a village!"

Arisu froze. They met Zuko? They knew him? He burned down a village?

Yeah, surprised you slept through that by the way. You must’ve took a big suppository sleeping pill up your tube.

If she had known Katara a couple of days ago, maybe she would be angry at her for accusing her Fiance of such things,

You know ya keep calling him that, but technically once Zuko got banished I’d imagine the whole arranged marriage thing became null and void.

and start yelling and stamping her feet and generally throwing a tantrum.

Considering her intelligence is that of a two year old child not far off the mark.

But no matter how much she...loved Zuko,

For reasons unclear and nonsensical.

she couldn't help but know it could be true.

It was probably the burned down forest they saw. Maybe it was knowing that Zuko got angry easily, and that she hadn't seen him for three years.

I’m sure Zuko is very grateful for that.

Or maybe it was the burned down forest.

You mentioned that twice now.

And the fire nation soldiers that took over the small village that Haru lived in. Or maybe it was her experience with her father.

But Arisu believed Katara. And she understood why Sokka didn't like her.

Now if only you could understand why no one else likes you.

"A forced marriage, though?" said Katara, "I'm sorry about that!"

”Especially with Zuko,” Katara grimaced “I mean can you imagine get paired up with Zuko? What a horrible fate.”

"He can't be that bad," said Arisu, repeating the same words her mother often said to her. He can't be that bad.

He ain’t really, although it takes awhile to grow on ya.


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"It's no use, Arisu, I can't see them anywhere," said Katara, as she and Arisu flew on Appa in an attempt to look for Aang and Sokka.

Maybe if you push Arisu off the side they’ll re-appear.

"Yeah, neither can I," agreed Arisu, "I saw a Sokka shaped tree, but that was probably my imagination..."



"Our best hope is to go back to the village and wait." said Katara, turning Appa around.

"So his name is Appa?" said Arisu,

You just realised this now? Really, were you dropped on your head when you were born?

to no one in particular, "It suits him more than Mr FlufflePuff,"

It official, I’m reading a story starring the most rock stupid bitch I’ve ever read or heard about and that is including Miss South Carolina and Bella Swan.


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Arisu was sitting inside what seemed to be the town hall, when she heard Katara exclaim outside. She walked out, and was extremely relieved when she saw Aang and Katara hugging outside.

"Welcome back, Aang," said Arisu, smiling, "And welcome back to you too, Momo,"

Wow you offer so much more to this series. I always said to myself when I watched the winter solstice episode, “you know what this episode is missing?” I asked “It’s missing a dumb as rocks whore to say hello to Momo when Aang returned.” Now everything seems more complete thanks to you. Great job you worthless hack of a writer.

Aang smiled back, but his smile sunk when Katara asked, "Where's Sokka?"

"I'm not sure..."

It’s like he never existed, as if he were Arisu’s intelligence.


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Katara and Arisu watched from the window as Aang talked to the spirit. Arisu watched him worriedly, expecting the giant monster to crush him any moment. She'd never been this worried since...finding out about Zuko's banishment.

Which apparently didn’t mention jack about either the war or the Avatar by the way.

She watched confusedly as Aang showed the spirit the acorn Katara gave him. What was that supposed to do?

What you can’t hear him from two feet away talking about how the environment is gonna grow back? Maybe you aren’t stupid, maybe you’re just deaf.

To her surprise, the spirit turned into a black and white fluffy bear. Everyone inside the building rushed out, as the spirit left, and the captured villagers emerged from a bunch of bamboo shoots.

Katara rushed out to hug Sokka. Arisu smiled at Aang and hugged him, to his – and her surprise.

Hooray! You were totally useless and didn’t add anything to yet another one of their adventures! Yay!

"You did it, Fly King!" she smiled happily, and Aang smiled too.

And then he punched her for calling him something so completely and utterly idiotic.

"Thank you, great Avatar!" said an important looking villager, "Whatever can we do to repay you?"

"You can give us some, food, and money," said Sokka.

Katara nudged Sokka in the ribs. "Sokka!" "What? We need stuff!"

Arisu smiled.



"It would be an honour to help you prepare for your journey," the man bowed down, and left.

Arisu smiled wider.



He was one of those kind people.

"I'm so proud of you, Aang, you figured out what to do all on your own!" exclaimed Katara, looking very proud.

You win a gold star.

"Actually," said Aang, "I did have a little help, and there's something else,"

"What is it?" asked Arisu.

This weird Japanese Ghost chick told him something about seven days.

"I think I found a way to contact Roku's spirit," explained Aang.

"That's great!" exclaimed Katara and Arisu.

"Creepy, but great," remarked Sokka.

Wanna bust out the proton packs Sokka? Cause we can use them on Arisu for target practice before we get there.

"There's a temple on a present shaped island," said Aang, looking faraway, "And if I go there on the solstice, I'd be able to speak with him!"

"But the solstice is tomorrow!" gasped Katara.

"Yeah..." said Aang, "And there's one more problem. The island is in the fire nation."

Katara and Sokka gasped. Arisu was speechless. Going BACK to the fire nation?

Personally I’d rather go back to the future.


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A/N: Denden dennnnn

It’s Dum dum Dumm! You fucking idiot!

Thank you for reading! Please review and I'll update soon

Too soon for anyone no doubt.

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This post has been edited by Lizard-Man: Aug 20 2011, 11:47 PM

[Lizard-Man]

A/N: Thank you for the reviews ^_^

I'm going to start writing in Arisu's POV, it might be a bit easier to follow

Oh great, just change the format all of a sudden in the middle of the frickin story, that’s smart. God, never become an author... ever.

I split this episode up into two chapters, so I'll be posting the next one in...a couple of minutes. LOL

And you didn’t just wait until you finished the chapter to post the whole thing when it will only take a few minutes more to finish the whole thing because...?

Thank you if you're still reading this story The plot isn't exactly thrilling to read,

NOOOOOO! Really? I didn’t notice.

so I appreciate you're sticking with me here

Got nothing better to do... well actually yes I do have better things to do but whatever.


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"Let's go Appa, come on!"

I watched from a distance as Aang tried to pull Appa away from the village. I didn't want him to have to go to the fire nation by himself! From what I've heard recently, he'd most likely get hurt.

With you in his way that is assured so stay here. Zuko will be around in a few hours and you can smooch him or whatever.

"Look, I'm sorry, but Katara, Sokka and Arisu aren't coming to the fire nation with us!" Aang yelled at Appa.

"I'd never forgive myself if they got hurt..." He said quietly,

Aang: Except maybe Arisu, I can accept her getting hurt.

"SO GET YOUR BIG BUTT OF THE GROUND AND LET'S GO!"

Aang tried once more to get the ten tonne bison to move, but to no avail.

"Please don't go Aang," said Katara. She, Sokka and some other villagers emerged from a building.

"The world can't afford to lose you to the fire nation... and neither can I!"

Good lord reading that dialogue from the episode... it’s just so damn clear they were gonna jump each others bones eventually why did Zutarians keep pretending it wasn’t gonna happen?

"She's right, Aang!" I added, from where I was sitting next Appa.

Shut up Arisu, the grown ups are talking.

Aang thought for a moment. "But I have to talk to Avatar Roku to find out what my vision means! I need to get to the fire nation temple before the sun sets on the solstice...That's today!"

Aang leapt onto Appa, and began to move, but Katara and Sokka jumped in front of him, and I stood up to follow them.

"We're not letting you go in to the fire nation, Aang," said Katara sternly.

You have tennis practice tomorrow and you can’t be out this late past your bed time.

"At least...not without your friends," Sokka smiled, "We got your back,"

Momo jumped onto Aang's shoulder and Appa licked Sokka. "EW!"

"Hey, I'm coming too!" I shouted, climbing up Appa from the tail.

No! No! Bad Arisu! Bad! Stay! Stay!

"Thanks, Arisu," said Aang, smiling.

"You have to fly fast to make it before sundown," said one of the villagers, giving Aang a parcel.

"Thank you for your..."

"GO!"

”Get that annoying OC out of here already!

Aang shook the reigns and Appa took off, heading towards the fire nation.


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"Aang, we got trouble!" yelled Katara, turning around to point at a fire nation ship.

"Yeah!" shouted Sokka, "And it's gaining fast!"

"What is it?" I asked.

I really want it to be fire breathing dragons with chainsaws for hands being ridden by Cowboys and Aliens, but I know this story would never do something that epic.

"Zuko's ship!" replied Katara.

"Zuko? You mean...he's in that ship?" I asked,

Yes, why don’t you jump off of Appa and down to him. I’m sur ehe’ll be more than happy to have sex with you.

looking down to see a fire nation vessel. Katara was right. He really did follow Aang everywhere!

Yeah he’s creepy like that.

And to think he was so close to me right now! But if she was right, then he also tried to kill them. I wasn't sure whether to be happy or sad.

"You know Zuko?" asked Aang.

"Are you kidding?" I smiled, "We're engaged!"

Yeah that’s debatable given current circumstances.

Sokka and Aang had similar reactions. Both wide eyed and mouths opened in shock.

"Is NO ONE happy about this marriage?" I exclaimed, pouting.

You weren’t happy about it when you first told about it! And it’s not gonna happen! He was banished! He lost his throne! Zhao hates him! Are you fucking stu- oh wait.

"Good for you," remarked Sokka, sarcastically, "Marrying the world's biggest jerk!"

"Actually, I can't marry him," I said to myself quietly, "Because he's down there, and I'm up here,"

Yes that’s the only reason keeping you two apart. God I have sarcasm build up here.

Before anyone could say anything, Katara shouted "FIREBALL!"

Sure enough, a huge flaming ball of fire was heading towards us, but luckily Aang and Appa dodged it.

"Wow, Aang, well done!" I beamed at him.

Shut up Arisu, you’re worse than Wesley.

But it wasn't enough to keep the horrible smell of the missile away, and I started to cough again.

Oh good, now she’s gonna start hocking up blood. Maybe we can get rid of her now.

"You have to get out of Zuko's range, before he throws another half-stinker at us!" yelled Katara.

Hot stinker... it was hot stinker. That was what the line was. What the hell is a half stinker? Does it smell sorta pleseant and sorta bad?

"Can't you make Appa go any faster?" asked Sokka.

The coughs got louder, and I started feeling dizzy.

"Yeah, but there's just one little problem,"

The dizziness was too much, and I blacked out.

Too much vodka huh? Light weight.

"Arisu?"

"Arisu?"

"Wait, what's wrong with Arisu?"


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"You did it buddy!" Aang said to Appa, "Nice flying"

Aang landed Appa in a rocky clearing, and Appa rolled over, nearly crushing Arisu.

Nearly doing all of humanity a great favour.

"Aah! Appa! Wait! Arisu's still there!" Aang rushed to help Arisu out from under Appa.

And he is concerned why I ask?

"Aww, you must be tired," said Katara, patting Appa on the belly.

"Nope, I'm good, refreshed ready to fight some firebenders!" said Sokka, stretching.

"I was talking to Appa," said Katara, coldly.

"Well, I was talking to Momo,"

When you can’t be funny rely on the better jokes of a far superior work of fiction.

"What's wrong with Arisu?" asked Aang, concernedly, laying her near Appa, who was now fast asleep.

"Maybe she's tired," said Sokka, crossing his arms. Though underneath it all, he was probably worried too.

Again I ask the question of why?

"I just hope she'll be okay if we leave her here..." said Katara.

So she’ll miss the majority of the episode most likely... again.

Okay, obviously you can’t write action scenes for shit. So you’re trying to use whatever excuse you can get to take Arisu out of a battle or fight and if you can’t find a way you’ll just omit it from the story to hide just how useless and pointless her inclusion in this group is. God you sicken me.


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I woke up on a big fluffy cloud. Wait, WHAT? De ja vu...

Wasn’t funny the first time either.

I must have fainted. Sooner or later I was going to have to tell them about my sickness.

Hopefully once they learn they’ll drop you like a sack of potatoes and leave you like the load you are.

'Maybe I should have stayed home, there were doctors and medicine there!'

I agree, you should have. It would’ve saved us a lot of trouble.

said one half of my brain. The other half said that I'm supposed to be here,and everything would work out soon.

No it won’t work out and no you’re no suppose to be here cause all you’re doing is dragging down a far better story.

We were in a clearing with blackened rocks around us, and Appa was sleeping peacefully. This must be the island that Aang was talking about.

I felt very proud of myself for figuring this out,

Arisu: Duh huh, I are smart. Duh huh ha ha.

but I had a decision to make. Do I stay here and wait, or do I find the others and help?

Either way you’re a total load, so whatever.


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I ran around the temple through countless corridors and rooms, but it was no use, I was just going in circles.

She realised this after passing the same phallic looking statue 300 times.

I turned around, and decided I would just leave and wait, but as I was walking, I heard loud noises coming from upstairs, it sounded like a fight.

So if it was upstairs, all I had to do was climb the wall and go through one of the windows right?

Or you could take the stairs like a normal person cause, you know, you ain’t Spider-Man.

But how was I going to climb up a wall?

Appa!

If you take Appa you won’t be climbing you’ll be flying. Get your verbs right.

I ran out of the temple, and down the long winding path, stopping only to start coughing.

I enjoy watching her pain. It’s only fun thing in this story so far.

Come on, lungs, don't fail me now! I thought, starting to walk while coughing. Eventually, I found Appa, and gently tried to wake him up.

Via a rock and whacking it upside his head of course.

"Come on, Appa," I said, quietly, between coughs, "Before we're too late.."


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"Thanks, Appa!" I smiled at him, before climbing through the window that I assumed everyone was in.

Instead, it was empty. Oops, wrong one.

Thrilling.

I looked out the window, hoping Appa was still there. And luckily, he was.

This chapter oozes excitement, I was worried that Appa had left for all of one quarter of a second.

"Come on, Appa!" I said, hopping onto him, "Next window!"

Appa flew up to another row of windows. The ones at the very top of the temple. I climbed through one of them, and froze. I don't know what I was expecting to see, but it definitely wasn't that.

Arisu: Wow, two dogs doing it... with a Dolphin!

Sokka and Katara were chained to a pillar, Zuko was chained to another, and there were fire nation soldiers everywhere. It's the first time I've seen Zuko in years, why did he have to be chained to a pillar?

Obviously you’re not into that kind of stuff. You lose appeal every second you talk.

A couple of people in red cloaks stood in a corner, and...Father was here.

"Father?"

Everyone turned around to stare at me. "Uhh, sorry, bad timing?"

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aYIryh07hbY


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A/N: YAY! Thank you for reading More will be up soon! And please review to let me know what you think

I think it’s the biggest waste of time since staring at paint dry. In fact that would probably be more fun than this.

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"Oh, Arisu," Father smirked, "How nice to see you,"

"This crazy man is your dad?" exclaimed Sokka, who was immediately shushed by one of the soldiers.

Well the queer one of the group anyway.

Zuko continued to stare at me incredulously, and I could feel myself go red.

This no time to be getting wet ya dumb bitch.

"Your mother's been so worried about you," continued Father, who was still smirking, "I suppose you'd be wanting to go home?"

I suppose you’d want to learn better grammar?

I started to feel guilty. I didn't want to make Mother worry about me, but I didn't want to stay home either. Travelling with my new friends offered so much freedom, so much choice.

Like whether or not to lay around all day and be burden to everyone or, well that’s about it.

"No," I frowned at him, "I would appreciate it if you untied my friends."

Oh wow, that’s REALLY gonna convince him to let them go.

"No," He replied, sarcastically in the same tone, "So you're making friends with Water Tribe peasants now? Go away, Arisu, you're getting in my way,"

Oh but she’s really good at that. Hell it’s only real skill.

"So is that why you kept me locked up in the house all the time?" I asked, finally coming to the realisation, "Because I was getting in your way? Because I wasn't a FIRE BENDER, or a BOY?"

No I think it was because you apparently get sick at random intervals and you’re duller than a new pencil.

All these things I'd known before – but pushed to the back of my brain –

Well what passed of r a brain.

started coming back, and I realised the reason he kept me in the house all the time.

"It was for your own good," said Father, coldly, getting impatient.

As well as the rest of the world’s as it would seem. And we appreciate your efforts Zhao we really do.

"BECAUSE YOU THOUGHT I WAS USELESS!" I screamed,

What you aren’t?

getting angry, "And that all I could do was cook and sew!"

I amazed you can actually retain any kind of knowledge with your IQ level.

"That's what women do," replied Father.

”Now make me a sandwich bitch!”

"You're a horrible father!"

She threw a chair at him at this point and the crowd started chanting “Jerry! Jerry!”

"Well if it makes you feel better," he said, "I'm NOT your father,"

Luke: No, no that’s not true, that’s impossi- wait a minute.

He motioned for the guards to get me get me out of the way. And one of them came up to tie me to a pillar.

"What?"

"I'm always away at sea, always have been," he continued, "It always made me wonder what was wrong when the doctor announced you were a Waterbender,"

How the hell could he have known that without you bending water?

"I'm a WHAT?"

"I have no time for you," he said, turning away.

Yes drop this bombshell and don’t properly explain anything.

I was so shocked, that I didn't say a word, not even when the doors opened and an old man came out instead of Aang, not even when he started tearing the temple apart, or even when bursts of lava came out of nowhere.

You know, even with the shock of finding out my father was lying to me about my parentage all this time and that I could in fact bend water the very fact that a spirit of an Avatar had come out of the door and started breaking the damn building apart would probably catch my attention more.

I can just imagine her standing there looking like an idiot while the floor opens up around her and swallows her. It’s a rather pleasant image.

I didn't say anything until Aang appeared, and the four of us jumped onto Appa, and even then, all I said was, "I'm fine," when Katara asked me if I were okay.

I'm a...waterbender?

Even though you’ve exhibited no signs whatsoever that you could be one and this entire twist comes right the fuck out of nowhere.


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Zuko barely made it out of the temple when it was falling apart, and when he got back on his ship, he didn't say a word to anyone.

In other words business as usual.

He walked straight to his bedroom, ignoring 'Sir, are you alright?', 'Where do we go now?' and 'Zuko, dinner is ready! The cook prepared the most delicious roast duck!'.

Zuko: God, nag, nag, nag. You’re worse than the stupid bitch who was apparently gonna be my wife.

He closed the door behind him, changed into more comfortable clothes and laid in his bed.

Oh come on Zuko! How can you have your pudding if you don’t eat your meat!?! Roast duck man! Fine, more for me.

It has been three years since they saw each other. Why did he have to be tied to a stupid pillar?

Oh don’t try to bookend this, you’re not that good an author.


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A/N: Thanks for reading! This one was a bit short, but because I'm crazy,

That’s not how I’d describe you.

I decided to split the episode into two parts anyway

Are you in special ed or something?

Please review

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Well that another craptacular set of chapters, we’ve learned some things about the character of Arisu today besides the ridiculous plot twist. We’ve learned she’s dumber than a sack of hammers, boring as sandpaper and she routinely blacks out for no other reason than the fact she got what the last Tsar of Russia’s son had. She is probably the weakest most useless character in the history of existence and yet the main characters of the series let her hang around for no real reason.

This author is incompetent, there’s really nothing more to add. Nothing. Hopefully she won’t update again because so far these are all the chapters she has up right now and I don’t want to read more of her horrible writing.

This post has been edited by Lizard-Man: Aug 31 2010, 12:46 AM

[Al_Cone]

Air Juden is now a meme.