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 Shmeckie
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 America's Sweetheart  Group: Moderators Posts: 14,674 Joined: 25-July 05 Member No.: 18 Gender: Male  |
 May 3 2012, 03:08 PM Ladies and gentlemen... Boys and girls... Children of all ages... IT'S HERE! http://www.cloudscratcher.com The first ten pages are online for your viewing pleasure. Not this Friday, but every Friday after that a batch of new pages will be added! The other pages on the site will be coming in following updates, as well! Until then, enjoy the first 10 pages of chapter 1! No more delays, folks! CLOUDSCRATCHER IS HERE! Tell your friends! In the coming months, I'll be doing what I can to advertise, as well! --------------------  Why does everything in my life involve buttfucking?! ~Screaming Soulcatcher |
  
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 Soren Highwind
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 Hello!  Group: Members Posts: 3,051 Joined: 15-July 10 From: The middle of nowhere Member No.: 357 Gender: Male |
May 3 2012, 03:21 PM
Bookmarked. Looking forward to more!
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Max-Vader
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 Killer Queen Group: Members Posts: 8,115 Joined: 23-August 09 From: The Fortress of Pornitude Member No.: 303 Gender: Male |
May 3 2012, 03:22 PM
Love it.
I like that there are different types of clouds - makes things interesting. So many possibilities for future aerial battles... --------------------  TigerEyes: "No means yes and yes means anal." |
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Paragon
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 Just floating through space Group: Members Posts: 672 Joined: 22-February 12 From: America Member No.: 612 Gender: Female |
May 3 2012, 03:31 PM
Hoo, boy, this is one webcomic (besides Homestuck) I'm gonna follow!
Not enough stuff out there with good old fashioned aerial battles, in my opinion. Loving the art style, too! -------------------- -Mocks:
---Forbiden Fruit the Tempation of Edward Cullen (Complete): 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8 ---Passion Night: A Harry Potter Fanfic (Complete): 1 ---Chamber of Commerce, a HP/Eva crossover (Complete): 1, 2, 3 ---What Hurts the Most, a Hannah Montana fanfic (Complete): 1, 2, 3 ---Homestuck High (Hiatus): 1, 2, 3, 4 ---May and Caroline: A Pokemon Fanfic (in name only) (Complete): 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10 ---A Guide to Lemon Writing: by Naruto's Brat (Complete): 1, 2, 3, 4, 5 ---Fallout: Equestria (Group Mock): Chapter 17 (Part 1 of 3), (2 of 3), (Final) ---End of the Road: by Naruto's Brat (Complete): 1, 2, 3 ---- Twi and Me: by Hotsauce (Complete): 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8 ---Dragons, Dragons, Dragons: a Fire Emblem Fanfic (Co-mock, in-progress): 1, 2, 3, 4 ----The Sleepover, A My Little Pony Fanfic (New, in-progress): 1 |
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#5
Viashino_wizard
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 That's a Jimmybean! Group: Members Posts: 7,079 Joined: 21-July 08 From: Teufort Member No.: 222 Gender: Male |
May 3 2012, 03:40 PM
Aha, at last!
The pages look really nice. If I had to nitpick, the colored "tails" of the planes on page 6 are too dark. They're almost the same color as the planes themselves, which looks weird. Congratulations on finally getting this started! -------------------- QUOTE (TigerEyes) Change is mandatory. It's progress that's optional. "Stories about ordinary people doing extraordinary things are very popular but I'm a fan of extraordinary people trying to do ordinary things" -Kelly Turnbull FOLLOW GRUNDY TWEETER, OR ELSE Let's Play Pokemon Blue Version: Hardcore (Canceled) |
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xoxjoanxox
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 Fedoras everywhere. Group: Members Posts: 3,397 Joined: 5-September 10 From: your pants. Member No.: 384 Gender: Female |
May 3 2012, 03:40 PM
I couldn't help but laugh when that one guy sunk into the red cloud. "So soft!"
Why does the second panel of this page have no background though? Felt a little jarring. Can't wait to see the next pages.  --------------------  ~Morning. |
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Yaoi Huntress Earth
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 A very wise and proud wolf. Group: Moderators Posts: 7,841 Joined: 30-November 06 From: MO Member No.: 125 Gender: Female |
May 3 2012, 04:10 PM
You got a great start. The grayscale characters on the logo don't quite mesh with the colored parts. Maybe some color on them could help.
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#8
Shmeckie
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America's Sweetheart Group: Moderators Posts: 14,674 Joined: 25-July 05 Member No.: 18 Gender: Male |
May 3 2012, 04:26 PM
They're sepia-toned. Like 30's era photographs.
QUOTE (Viashino_wizard @ May 3 2012, 07:40 PM)  Aha, at last! The pages look really nice. If I had to nitpick, the colored "tails" of the planes on page 6 are too dark. They're almost the same color as the planes themselves, which looks weird. Congratulations on finally getting this started! They are the same color. -------------------- Why does everything in my life involve buttfucking?! ~Screaming Soulcatcher |
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Caim
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 Paragon of Manliness Group: Members Posts: 1,192 Joined: 5-March 08 Member No.: 194 Gender: Male |
May 3 2012, 05:19 PM
Nice. Looking forward to seeing where this goes.
-------------------- "There's a recipe to a good hero, Hawke, it's like alchemy. Take one part down to earth, one part selfless nobility, two parts crazy fool, and season liberally with wild falsehoods. Let that percolate through a good audience for a while, and when you're done, you've got your hero".
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#10
Matto
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 Chomp. Group: Members Posts: 971 Joined: 16-April 11 From: Tim Hortons Land (AKA Canada) Member No.: 470 Gender: Male |
May 3 2012, 05:45 PM
Nice job Shmecks!
The red cloud gag was hilarious! -------------------- oh hey guys i work for a website called PixlBit.
Pixlbit Writings Bitching about NGP Vaginas, Slide Pad Love, Of Arwings and Star Foxes, Ca$hcom PixlBit Reviews Star Fox, Donkey Kong '94, Dead or Alive: Dimensions, Link's Awakening DX, Okamiden, Kirby's Adventure, Star Fox 64 3D Mario Mania: #1, #2, #3 |
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Tonfa
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 ¿Tiene un problema, cabrón? Group: Members Posts: 2,814 Joined: 1-March 11 From: Maryland, USA Member No.: 445 Gender: Male |
May 3 2012, 06:32 PM
And on that day, the world was changed forever...
Also, not to "me too" all over the launch party, but as I (sort of) mentioned in the "Happenings of the Day" thread, I was helping Shmeckie get the actual site up and loaded and running for the vast majority of the day, so I guess I'm the de facto "webmaster" for Cloudscratcher. All the coding and functionality and what not is kind of my area, so if there's anything that looks off or doesn't work or broken let me know and I'll fix it up as best I can. On that note, quit your job, grab a meatball sub, and enjoy cycling through the wonderful pages of the most important thing you will read all year. -------------------- QUOTE (Shmeckie @ Sep 25 2011, 09:32 PM) If James Hetfield does a guest spot in My Little Pony I will eat my underwear. Live over Skype. "La forme est bien, je veux juste que le résultat soit ... très chouette. Faut que ce soit environ 20% plus chouette." Winner of the Cosplay Caption Contest #125, #130! |
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TigerEyes
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 City Hunter! Group: Moderators Posts: 3,195 Joined: 25-July 05 From: California: Super-cool to the homeless! Member No.: 23 Gender: Female |
May 3 2012, 06:40 PM
Yay, it's here~! Lookin' great so far, guys!
-------------------- "He only profits from praise who values criticism." - Heinrich Heine
"A man should never be ashamed to own he has been in the wrong, which is but saying, in other words, that he is wiser today than he was yesterday." - Alexander Pope |
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Viashino_wizard
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That's a Jimmybean! Group: Members Posts: 7,079 Joined: 21-July 08 From: Teufort Member No.: 222 Gender: Male |
May 3 2012, 06:46 PM QUOTE (Shmeckie @ May 3 2012, 05:26 PM) They are the same color. That was my point. -------------------- QUOTE (TigerEyes) Change is mandatory. It's progress that's optional. "Stories about ordinary people doing extraordinary things are very popular but I'm a fan of extraordinary people trying to do ordinary things" -Kelly Turnbull FOLLOW GRUNDY TWEETER, OR ELSE Let's Play Pokemon Blue Version: Hardcore (Canceled) |
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Protto
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 Oooh, pick me, PICK ME! Group: Members Posts: 1,201 Joined: 10-July 10 From: the bottom of my heart. Member No.: 353 Gender: Male |
May 3 2012, 09:36 PM
FUCK YEAH IT'S FINALLY HERE! Everything's lookin' great, Shmeckie, though I do have a few nitpicks. Maybe it's just me, but some of the dialogue seems a tad bit awkward:
QUOTE (Jacques) Look, Burt, they've got two fighters tailing me! I guess they find me to be the bigger threat, eh? QUOTE (Burt) Heh, oh yeah? We'll see who's the bigger threat! I sort of expected Jacques to be more condescending and say something like, "Look, Burt, they've got two fighters tailing me. I guess they know who the real threat is." And then Burt would have a good-natured comeback like, "Don't flatter yourself. These West Bravo idiots wouldn't know a real threat from their own mother, [insert lighthearted insult here]!"or something to that effect. QUOTE (Burt) You should know to watch out for the red clouds! They're solid cloud, after all! Again, it seems to me it'd flow better if he'd said, "You avoid the solid red clouds, remember?" But other than that, yeah, next Friday can't come fast enough! QUOTE (Tonfa) All the coding and functionality and what not is kind of my area, so if there's anything that looks off or doesn't work or broken let me know and I'll fix it up as best I can. When clicking on the "Home" icon while on the home page, it 404's for some reason. --------------------  |
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Shmeckie
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America's Sweetheart Group: Moderators Posts: 14,674 Joined: 25-July 05 Member No.: 18 Gender: Male |
May 3 2012, 09:56 PM QUOTE (Protto @ May 4 2012, 01:36 AM) I sort of expected Jacques to be more condescending and say something like, "Look, Burt, they've got two fighters tailing me. I guess they know who the real threat is." And then Burt would have a good-natured comeback like, "Don't flatter yourself. These West Bravo idiots wouldn't know a real threat from their own mother, [insert lighthearted insult here]!"or something to that effect. Well, that first line is what he said, just worded differently, and Burt's not antagonistic enough to have a comeback like that. He's the "nice guy" to contrast against Jacques' "dick amongst the protagonists" aspect. Notice the worst thing he says to the West Bravo pilots is "how long've you guys been flyin'?!" Jacques is the one who would call someone an idiot. Burt's not the kind of guy to deliver much of a comeback. QUOTE Again, it seems to me it'd flow better if he'd said, "You avoid the solid red clouds, remember?" Solid Cloud is an actual term. The various colored clouds all have names, generally [one word adjective] Cloud. Solid Cloud, Rising Cloud, Sludge Cloud, and various other crazy colored clouds you'll all see in the future! QUOTE When clicking on the "Home" icon while on the home page, it 404's for some reason. On it. This post has been edited by Shmeckie: May 3 2012, 11:24 PM -------------------- Why does everything in my life involve buttfucking?! ~Screaming Soulcatcher |
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Tonfa
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¿Tiene un problema, cabrón? Group: Members Posts: 2,814 Joined: 1-March 11 From: Maryland, USA Member No.: 445 Gender: Male |
May 4 2012, 07:39 AM QUOTE (Protto @ May 4 2012, 01:36 AM) When clicking on the "Home" icon while on the home page, it 404's for some reason. Fixed it. -------------------- QUOTE (Shmeckie @ Sep 25 2011, 09:32 PM) If James Hetfield does a guest spot in My Little Pony I will eat my underwear. Live over Skype. "La forme est bien, je veux juste que le résultat soit ... très chouette. Faut que ce soit environ 20% plus chouette." Winner of the Cosplay Caption Contest #125, #130! |
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JakAttack
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 Picker, Grinner, Lover, Sinner. Group: Members Posts: 859 Joined: 30-November 10 From: the creative minds that brought you "Spaceballs"... Member No.: 412 Gender: Male |
May 4 2012, 11:50 AM
Hey, I actually get to follow a webcomic now. I am happy.
If there were one criticism I would give it, I would say the red cloud scene should have been more "show, don't tell". I knew what the red clouds were without Burt's comment, but the comment did clarify that it was specifically red clouds that were solid, so I can't complain about it much. -------------------- You've heard of the Sierra Madre Casino. We all have, the legend, the curses. Some foolishness about it lying in the middle of a City of Dead. A city of Ghosts. Beneath a blood-red cloud...a bright, shining monument reaching out, luring treasure hunters to their doom. An illusion. A promise that you can change your fortunes. Begin again.
Finding it, though, that's not the hard part. It's letting go. QUOTE (Ryan King @ from "Go On") A player I don't care about on a team I really don't care about dropped a ball last night and I couldn't sleep. It's easy to care about things that matter - war, hunger, pestilence...is that a thing? Pestilence. Pestilence...pestilence. I see it as a triumph of the human spirit to be able to care so completely about something frivelous. |
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DeanTheAdequate
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 Drunken Mage Group: Members Posts: 458 Joined: 3-October 11 From: Catonsville, MD Member No.: 536 Gender: Male |
May 6 2012, 09:24 AM
Fun adventure for all ages (So far).
What? Webcomics sometimes become a train no one can stop and then, ya know. In any case, good luck! -------------------- The forgotten member of the "Tribe of Spoon"
Winner of CCC #107- I've decided to let it all go to my head, then my pancreas, then a short trip to the gonads for release. Winner of CCC #129- Took me a while to push this rock back up the hill and... whoops. Winner of CCC #136- Whoo-Hoo! Whiskey and hookers on me! Seriously, drape them upon my slumbering mass. Winner of CCC #137- Two in a row! Do you believe in Miracles?! No seriously, the hell was up with that Jackie Chan flick?  |
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Shmeckie
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America's Sweetheart Group: Moderators Posts: 14,674 Joined: 25-July 05 Member No.: 18 Gender: Male |
May 6 2012, 04:08 PM
I'm sticking to the principle that, content-wise, the comic will never go beyond what I saw in cartoons as a kid in the 90's.
-------------------- Why does everything in my life involve buttfucking?! ~Screaming Soulcatcher |
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JakAttack
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Picker, Grinner, Lover, Sinner. Group: Members Posts: 859 Joined: 30-November 10 From: the creative minds that brought you "Spaceballs"... Member No.: 412 Gender: Male |
May 6 2012, 05:32 PM
Damn, I was counting on some Burt X Jacques action.
-------------------- You've heard of the Sierra Madre Casino. We all have, the legend, the curses. Some foolishness about it lying in the middle of a City of Dead. A city of Ghosts. Beneath a blood-red cloud...a bright, shining monument reaching out, luring treasure hunters to their doom. An illusion. A promise that you can change your fortunes. Begin again.
Finding it, though, that's not the hard part. It's letting go. QUOTE (Ryan King @ from "Go On") A player I don't care about on a team I really don't care about dropped a ball last night and I couldn't sleep. It's easy to care about things that matter - war, hunger, pestilence...is that a thing? Pestilence. Pestilence...pestilence. I see it as a triumph of the human spirit to be able to care so completely about something frivelous. |
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