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post Nov 15 2016, 05:30 AM
With how the last chapter left off, youíd expect the team to finally get their heads on straight and try to save their friend in this capture-the-flag game masquerading as a story. But youíd be wrong, because the author changes direction more often than a metronome. Enjoy.

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Chapter 32: Francis the Snivy Died? Part 1 of 2

From martyr complex to actual martyrdom? Ha! I wish.

Blacksterops1025: Welcome to Chapter 32 of the story. In this chapter, we have the plan for team Angeles and Team Charm to save Francis the Snivy. Here we go, and without further delay..

Team Angeles: Blacksterops1025 does not own anything

Alerts in chapter

Crying Alert level 1- Get your tissues just in case


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(Location- Cabin 200)

Team Angeles and team Charm are now working together on a plan to save Francis the Snivy. The two teams talk to each other.

"Lets launch Operation "Save a Special Snivy" Leo the Treeko from team Charm said

The military could learn a thing or two from these guys. Iím sure using Operation ďShoot the Bad GuysĒ will be so much better to keep their missions classified.

"I agree" Suyapa said

The team pulls out pens and papers to draw out the plan. The team is happy about the plan.

"First, we have to get to Ensenada, Mexico" Ike the Treeko said as Suyapa drew a boat going to Ensenada, Mexico

"Second, we go downtown and gather information" Leo the Riolu said as Suyapa drew the team going downtown

"Third, we defeat this unknown pokemon" Kyle the Buizel said

"Fourth, we did it dance" Leo said as everyone laughed

As if them laughing while they believe their friend is being tortured right now isnít enough, itís really bad planning, when the second step is to gather intelligence vital to the second half of the mission.

The team was happy about the plan, but Gengar is about to spread a rumor that breaks Suyapa's heart. Suyapa turns on the TV to see Gengar in the Media Center in LA

Is there any other reason to turn a TV on other than to receive exposition?

(Location- Media Center in Los Angeles)

Gengar arrived at the Media Center to address the media. He has no idea that Suyapa is watching him on TV

(Media Like Fashion)

This just in! Idiot author writes another incomprehensible mess. Weíll keep you updated as the ďstoryĒ develops.

Media (Channel 313): Good Morning everyone. We are about to hear from Gengar. He will talk about his battle with Francis the Azelf.

Gengar: Well, why don't we say that Francis the Snivy died. Thank you,Ö

Once more the corporate media profits by allowing the proven murderer to walk freely around. What Gengar expects to achieve from such a flimsy lie and avoiding the actual topic of discussion, I have no idea.

(Cabin 200)

The team has just heard Gengar saying that Francis the Snivy died, but Suyapa says otherwise.

"LIAR!" Suyapa said

"Protest time?" Leo asked

"Not yet" Suyapa

Protest time? Protest?! Does this author not know a fucking revenge plot when itís staring him right in the face?!

The team still can't believe that Francis the Snivy died. The press conference continuesÖ

(Media Center in LA)

Question 1 from Media 23: How did Francis the Snivy die?

Gengar: Easy, just knock him out

Comment from Media 12: That makes no sense! If that happened, then he should be unconscious

Gengar: I said he died, not become unconscious. GET YOUR FACTS RIGHT!

Comment from Media Center: I heard enough of this! Let's get out of here!

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What even was the point of that? Gengar goes on television, canít tell a convincing lie, the news crew ignores him Ė WHY?!

(Cabin 200)

Suyapa couldn't take it anymore. She wanted a protest. The team tells the navigator to go back to LA as fast as possible.

Congratulations, guys! Youíve just become hijackers.

(Los Angeles)

The team has arrived back at the guild to prepare for a protest. They also turn on the news.

"We have breaking news from Los Angeles where there are rumors that Francis the Snivy died in Ensenada, Mexico. The rumor came from Gengar. He feels confident with what he said, but a lot of sources say otherwise. More on this story, after the LA Gamers Game"

So instead of actually investigating whether or not Gengar was lying, they hold a protest? Why hasnít Orion just told them that Francis is at the hospital? What crazy world is this?!

The team has to wait until after the basketball game for more information. The team continues to get ready for a protest.

(The next day)

Team Angeles is now hours away from starting an nationwide protest to tell Gengar a truth.

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(Florida)

The residents are preparing to protest against Gengar

(Miami)

The residents are preparing to protest against Gengar

(Colorado)

The residents are preparing to protest

The only people who has a right to protest is anyone reading this shit.

The protest has started in all states. The residents stand behind Team Angeles.

"We want Gengar gone!" The protesters said as they marched through the streets

"Francis is good! Gengar is bad!" More protesters said

Iím sorry, but isnít Team Angeles supposed to get rid of Gengar by saving Francis? The guy who Gengar is still holding hostage, I mean.

The news media is following the protest.

"We are now following the protest for closure in the rumored death of Francis the Snivy. This protest is to prove that Francis the Snivy is alive, and not dead like Gengar said. The real question is: Did Francis the Snivy really die? Find out in the future chapters of "Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: The Mystery of Francis"

And now we can safely say that the author doesnít know how protests work either. Itís a wonder he can figure out how to post his stories, honestly. Letís move on to the next chapter right away.


Chapter 33: Francis the Snivy Died? Part 2 of 2

Blacksterops1025: Welcome to chapter 33 of the story. In this chapter, more rumors from Gengar fly around, and Did Francis the Snivy really die?

Even if he did, thereís like a dozen people with his name ready to take his place. But the answer is still fucking no.

Here we go, and without further delayÖ

Team Angeles: Blacksterops1025 does not own anything you are reading in the story

Alerts in chapter 33

Tissue Alert level 2- Please bring your tissues before reading

Soccer Alert level 4- Big match; Chelsea VS Barcelona to move to the finals preview (Put the tissues away for the moment)

Just once, author, I would like you to cover up the fact, that you are a complete and utter imbecile.

(Location- Los Angeles- Team Angeles Base)

The team is now ready to protest against Gengar, after he said that Francis the Snivy died in Mexico. Suyapa doesn't buy the rumor. The team heads to City Hall to call for a local protest. After talking to the officials, the team starts protesting, what they don't know is that this protest is now nationwide. The news media is now broadcasting the protests live as it happens.

What the hell are they trying to achieve by protesting? Do they really think ďMurder-truckĒ Gengar cares for their opinions?

(Media 490 in Las Vegas)

"We are now bringing a nationwide protest to you live from Sky 490 in LA. This protest as you all know is for what Gengar said about Francis the Snivy. If you can recall, Gengar stated that Francis the Snivy died in Mexico, but Suyapa, who happens to be Francis the Snivy's best friend, doesn't buy it"

This news report brought to you by Old News Media, redundantly stating what you already know.

(Media 89 in Huston)

"Protesters in Huston are now crossing into city hall to demand Gengar to take the rumor about Francis the Snivy dying in Mexico back. The protesters hopes that Gengar receives their messages"

How is it that this author can deliver social commentary on internet arguments, when all he does is write contrived nonsense?

(Media 009 in Spokane, Washington)

"If you taught Francis the Snivy being knocked unconscious was bad enough, sorry, you are wrong. It turns out that Gengar is saying that Francis the Snivy died in Mexico a couple of days ago, but residents demand a protest against Gengar for the rumor.

Suyapa was amazed at the attention that this now high profile case was getting. She loved all the support that Team Angeles was getting. They all said one thing: "We want a protest against Gengar for what he has done to a superstar leader". The media in LA even sobbed when they reported on the local protest.

How about anyone of these people inform the fucking police, so that they can make an attempt at catching Gengar, now that Francisí friends arenít doing it?

(Media 2 in Los Angeles)

"We are now following a protest for team Angeles for Gengar to take the rumor about Francis the Snivy dying in Mexico back. We take you live to the ground were Frank the Chimchar is reporting for us"

"Yes Stacy. I am on the protesting floor (sobs) where team Angeles is protesting (Sobs) for Gengar to admit (Sobs) he lied about Francis the Snivy (Sobs) dying in Mexico. I remember Francis the Snivy (Sobs) as a nice and loving pokemon. He is one of a (Sobs) kind. I hope this rumor is false (Sobs). Live on the ground, Frank the Chimchar for Media 2 LA"

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For fuckís sake, Frank Ė itís just a rumor! A rumor created by the BAD GUY. Why are you all so stupid?

Frank the Chimchar was crying so hard that team Angeles had to come over to help out. Suyapa tells Frank to pray for peace. Frank agrees with Suyapa. The team tries to have Frank protest with them, but Frank says that he will do it with the media group. Team Angeles agrees.

(Gengar's house in Long Beach)

Gengar was watching the events of the protest unfold. He did not like what he heard from the media. He wanted to make sure his rumor is true. He gathers his team and tries to persuade the media that "Francis the Snivy deserves to die, not to live" .

Well, Iím convinced. Been that for a while, in fact.

He also wants to tell team Angeles "Francis the Azelf is next"

(Protesting floor)

The protesters continue to protest for 3 hours until 6PM. Team Angeles decides to spend the night in the base.

Blacksterops1025: The saga continues tonight!

Just remember to be in bed on time, author. We wouldnít want your parents to get mad.

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I canít get over this. A fucking protest?! Itís incredible what this author thinks counts for acceptable reality in fiction. Itís bad enough that this story was written by an idiot, but now heís just fumbling through the narrative Ė where will it fucking go from here?


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post Nov 19 2016, 04:26 AM
This is possibly the most mystifying fanfiction I've read (out of an entire 10, to be fair). It manages to make no sense at every turn and gets more inane with every passing chapter.
I think I might actually be sad when it abruptly ends.
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post Nov 24 2016, 10:06 AM
I agree, King Dairy. It certainly will leave a void. But being only just halfway through this story, itís a void Iím already looking forward to.

We left off with Gengar starting rumors about having killed Francis. We know our luck isnít that good, so letís find out what kind of madness inducing explanation the author has in store for us. Enjoy.


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Chapter 34: The Truth is Revealed!

Blacksterops1025: Welcome to chapter 34, and the final chapter for this week. In this chapter, the truth is revealed. Did Francis the Snivy die after all?

Who the hell are you even trying to fool, author? Not even the characters in this story are that gullible.

Find out in this chapter. Here we go, and without further delayÖ

Team Angeles: Blacksterops1025 does not own anything!

Alerts in chapter 34

Blood Alert level 5- Rose the Snivy gets severely injured

Weapon Alert 5- Pokemon injured, however, no deaths

Disappoint me in advance, why donít you.

(Location- Media Center in LA)

Team Angeles is now at the media center in downtown Los Angeles. They are now telling their side of the story about the rumor.

Because hearing their stance on the subject for the umpteenth time isnít going to be boring or anything.

(Media like fashion)

Media 23: Do you believe that the rumor is true?

Suyapa: No.

Media 14: Do you think Gengar is lying to the media?

Orion: Yes he is.

Channel 12 news: Gengar has just started his protest against you guys. Any thoughts on that?

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What does this author think a protest actually is? What does he think it accomplishes? How the fuck does he think a counter protest to the first protest is the next logical step?!

Suyapa: He knows we will be out to get him for what he has done to team Angeles. He shall be punished!

The media room cheers

Channel 5 news: Should Francis the Azelf drain Gengar's willpower today?

If it will stop the story from draining mine, yes, please!

Leo: Yes! Francis the Azelf should do that as soon as possible before Gengar can attack us again.

Channel 100 news: Suyapa, you are the one who counts on Francis the Snivy to be the hero. Why do you trust him?

Suyapa: I trust him because he is one of my best friends ever. Whenever I am about to get attacked, he rushes to take the hit to save me. Even if I see him unconscious, I thank him for saving me from the bottom of my heart.

This is the mind of the Martyr Complex, people. Friendship and adoration in return for their self-sacrifice. In a way, itís ass-backwards to what real friendships are like. I have friends, and Iíd gladly take a bullet for them if need be. But theyíre not my friends because Iím willing to do this; Iím willing to do this because theyíre my friends. The other way around is just sociopathy.

Channel 33 game news: You guys have a soccer season coming up. Is this rumor going to affect your game plan?

Rouge the Bat: Yes, in terms of rotation. Francis the Snivy is our starter. I am just a midfielder.

Rouge the Bat is still around? Geez, whatís it been, like twelve Ė fourteen chapters?

Channel 45 News: Sonic the Hedgehog is coming to team Angeles in the future. Any plans on letting him play?

Suyapa: Sweet! A new teammate can always play and battle.

I would ask why the news crew would know this before the team itself, but the news media are apparently omniscient in this world.

Channel 1 News (The News Alert System): A news alert has been called out for this area. Gengar is on the lose. If you see this pokemon, evacuate now! He is carrying extremely dangerous weapons! Evacuate now!

Everyone in the media room evacuated outside to find Gengar carrying the weapons. Gengar has already shot 12 pokemon.

In other words, the ďextremely dangerous weaponsĒ are just guns. Guns which, as weíve been told in the chapter alerts, will kill no one. The only reason that Iím at the edge of my seat, is that Iím about to fall out of it asleep.

All the pokemon had severe injuries. Team Angeles is running to their base. Everyone makes it, but Rose was trapped by Gengar. Gengar shoots Rose on her right leg. Rose started screaming in pain.

Any other reaction would have been stupid, but not below this authorís ability to write.

Suyapa heard the shots from inside the base and investigates. Gengar escapes before Suyapa can see him. Suyapa see's Rose on the floor bleeding. Kat rushed outside to examine Rose. Kat did not like what she examined.

"She has an injured leg" Kat said

Master of deduction right here; whatever could have tipped you off?

"Let's get her to nurse Karla" Suyapa said

The team rushes Rose to nurse Karla. Nurse Karla added to the teams fears.

"I'm sorry. Rose is injured badly. First, her right leg is not in the normal position, also, her left leg is also injured" Nurse Karla said

Well, Gengar didnít do that. Which means it was either the fools who rushed Rose to the hospital by themselves, or the dumbass hospital staff that keep being rather incompetent at their jobs.

The team was upset about Rose's injures. The team also hears the news they wanted to for a very long time.

"This is media 12 with news on Francis the SnivyÖ" The news woman said

The team waits in anticipation. Gengar appears on screen holding a body of a Snivy, but another picture of a Snivy appears on the right. The team hopes that the picture on the right is correct.

I wasnít aware that news reports needed suspense.

"The rumor isÖ.FALSE! The Snivy on the left is Francis the Snivy's clone, while the one on the right is the real Francis the Snivy!" The news woman yells

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Clone?! Fucking when? Fucking how? Fucking WHY?! I have so many questions, but asking them will probably be pointless, as this clone will never be addressed again. The author uses so many red herrings; he could start selling fucking sushi.

The team is celebrating. The team also noticed that Francis the Snivy learned the move Substitute. The team is very happy. Gengar is now immobilized thanks to Francis the Azelf's curse.

Even for this author, that seems like an awfully rushed conclusion.

Blacksterops1025: Team Angeles soccer season starts next Friday!

But pain season is still ongoing. Next chapter, letís go.


Chapter 35: The New Enemy is Revealed!

Blacksterops1025: Welcome to chapter 35 of this story. The next 17 chapters will takes us to the end of part 2 of the story.

Iíd rather trust the weather forecast for the next twenty years, than assume you have any fucking idea of how you structure your story, author.

In this chapter, team Angeles is celebrating their victory after defeating Gengar. They have no idea that a new enemy and a new teammate is coming. The team also gets a special visit from a chapter 1 character. Here we go, and without further delayÖ

They didnít defeat Gengar at all, new teammates are practically worthless, and the first chapter character can only be Tory the Ninetales due to process of elimination. Please tell me the curse spewing fox will bring some actual plot with him; Iím tired of seeing villains play keep away with Francisí unconscious ass.

Team Angeles: Blacksterops1025 does not own anything!

Alerts in Chapter 35

Crying Alert level 3- Francis the Serperior's friend lost her soul to Darkrai (This is a hint of what is to come for team Angeles)

You want us to feel sorry for a friend of another Francis clan member, neither of whom has appeared in this story before? You couldnít be this much of a bleeding heart without having actual holes in it.

Game Review alert level 2- Today's Game review is for Resident Evil: Operation Raccoon City

Author, in continuing my long line of questions into your literary understanding, I have to ask Ė what do you think an Ďalertí is? What do you even think numbers mean, for that matter? Can you even convince me, that you are able to understand any two fucking words written in sequence by your own hand?!

(Location- Team Guild in Los Angeles- 9PM)

The team is now in the base after defeating Gengar. Suyapa is planning a all night party.

"I request a all night party" Suyapa said

"I agree" Rose said

"Let's invite team Charm" Francis the Buizel said

The team calls team Charm and they answer. Team Charm said that they are on their way to party all night. As the call ended, Francis the Snivy revives.

Convenient timing. Speaking of which, let me just start the clock, and see if he can set a new record for time spent not in immediate danger, pain, or forcible narcosis.

"I will see you there" Leo said

"Ok" Suyapa said

"Hey all, Francis the Snivy revived yo!" Francis the Buizel said

"Oh yes he did" Francis the Azelf said (He is back from Ensenada, Mexico)

About time too. Far be it for the main character to actually be a part of the story.

The team checks on Francis the Snivy and takes his temperature.

"Let's take his temp" Rose said

"Ok" Suyapa said

"His temp is 98.9 degrees, which is normal" Kat said

For humans, yes. For a small critter thatís part of a chlorophyll genepool, though? Not so sure.

The team see's Leo and his teammates at the door. The team opens the door and let's team Charm in.

Here is team Charm:

Ike

Starr

Kyle

Leo

Tim

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I would call them all faceless, hollow shells without character, but that would imply there was something there that could contain an ounce of substance in the first place.

The team greets team Charm and tells them that a all night party is planned for the evening. There was also a Serperior. The team finds out that the name of the Serperior is Francis. Francis the Snivy & Serperior greets each other.

"How are you my older grass brother" Francis the Snivy said

"I'm good my friend, and my younger brother" Francis the Serperior said

I guess by having no limbs to injure, Serperiors just fall out of the villainsí target demographic.

What makes you come here?" Francis the Snivy asked

"I want toÖ" Francis the Serperior said before he started crying

I thought he said he was fine, whereís this coming from?

The team hears crying from the door way. Francis the Snivy lets his older brother in to tell his story.

CRYING ALERT IN EFFECT UNTIL THE START OF THE GAME REVIEW

Itís in all caps, so you know he really means it.

Francis the Serperior tells his sad story to both team Angeles and team Charm.

"The reason I came here is to tell you about my sad story. This includes news about the future of Los Angeles. My story begins in the semi-finals of the Soul Games, which is a traditional tournament created by Darkrai. Darkrai is not to be taken lightly, because the Soul Games is a completion for Darkrai to gain power from the souls he takes from the losing team.

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I wasnít aware that Outworld was staking their claim on this realm. How soon can we get Francis to compete?

Here is my experience with that kind of action by Darkrai. My team ( Team LA Wonderers) lost the game by 2 goals to team Kings of LA. Darkrai took 9 of my teammate's souls with him. This included one of Francis the Snivy's first sisterÖ.

Please, author, make me groan any harder, and my neighbors will have me evicted for noise complaints. How fucking big is your pretend family, you sad, sad creature?

Blacksterops1025: Who is Francis the Snivy's sister? Find out after the game review.

GAME REVIEW TIME!

CRYING ALERT WILL BE REISSUED AFTER THE GAME REVIEW


With how you usually handle these, itís best to leave it on, author.

Game: Resident Evil: Operation Raccoon City

General Information:


If you ever played Resident Evil games, then you expect zombies, weapons, and more. This game has that, and you get to control the umbrella operation's personal. Is this game worth your money? Find out nowÖ

Nothing is worth my money. I buy everything with coupons.

Game play:

When I previewed the game, I taught that there would be a case for your weapons, items, and more. When I played it, it had a area for them, but it felt like "Call of Duty". On the directional pad, you have a spot for herbs, grenades, and a special ability. There is also another problem, you only have a limit of 1 herb type, 1 anti viral spray (I will explain this in the presentation segment), 5 of each grenade type, and the special ability.

Thatís not gameplay, thatís interface description. What the fuck do you actually do in the game, you nut?

Presentation:

The game did have zombies, but also had spec ops characters to contend with. I just taught this was like Resident Evil 5, but it wasn't close. The new twist this time around was the zombies giving the player a infection. This infection would give the player a limited time to recover, before the player becomes a zombie. To fix this, you need an anti viral spray (which has a purple color to it). The weapons were ok tough. This game also had a exp system. You can use EXP to purchase abilities for you character.

Wouldnít that be like exercising first and distributing the gained muscle mass afterwards?

The verdict:

The game does have problems, but it is still a ok game. I would recommend this to those who follow the series

Score Breakdown:

Graphics: 7/10

Controls: 10/10

Playability: 6/10

Enjoyment: 8/10

Final Total: 31/40- 77% (An ok game)

I suppose the last .5% from your calculation left along with the equally sized amount of sense this story had.

AND NOW, BACK TO "POKEMON MYSTERY DUNGEON: THE MYSTERY OF FRANCIS"

CRYING ALERT IN EFFECT UNTIL TORY THE NINETALES ENTERS


Itís as if there should be a live studio audience here, but instead of applause the director wants tears.

The team is about to find out what happened to Francis the Snivy's sister. Francis the Serperior continues his speech.

Bold= Added words

Hey, donít you go infringing on my job!

"The reason I came here is to tell you about my sad story. This includes news about the future of Los Angeles. My story begins in the semi-finals of the Soul Games, which is a traditional tournament created by Darkrai. Darkrai is not to be taken lightly, because the Soul Games is a completion for Darkrai to gain power from the souls he takes from the losing team. Here is my experience with that kind of action by Darkrai. My team ( Team LA Wonderers) lost the game by 2 goals to team Kings of LA. Darkrai took 9 of my teammate's souls with him. This included Francis the Snivy's sister. She was one of the best players on the team. She actually saved my life by ramming me out of the way from the seal. She was Francis the Pipulp( I put him as a character for part 3)" Francis the Serperior concluded.

Author, at this point I donít know who I should contact first Ė your obviously inbred homeschool teachers or a cryptozoologist. Your continued existence in the face of your idiocy is a defiance of natural laws.

The team was now sad about Francis the Snivy's sister losing her soul to Darkrai. The team asks some questions.

"What happens to those who lose their souls to Darkrai?" Suyapa asked

"Darkrai actually drains all the energy from the pokemon's soul, then he adds that energy to his own life force" Francis the Serperior answered

So howís that different from Azelf draining the willpower from people?

"It Leo from team Charm, and my question is: Is there any way to save Francis the Pipulp?" Leo said

"Yes, Defeat Darkrai!" Francis the Serperior answered

The team was shocked to hear that.

Who would have thought, that forcibly wrestling the soul away from the person who stole it was the answer? I swear, the only thing these dense fuckwits wouldnít be shocked by would be actual voltage.

Francis the Serperior tells the team that he wants to join. The team accepts the offer. The team hears a knock on the door.

"I will get it" Francis the Snivy said

Francis the Snivy saw a Ninetales from the window. He allows the Ninetales in. Francis the Snivy remembers meeting a Ninetales a long time ago..

Flashback from chapter 1

Normally I would be against a flashback, but with this being thirty-four chapters and four months back, Iíll let it slide. But only once.

The day for Francis starts out with his best friend , Suyapa. They both head to a forest area to camp out for a day. Suyapa is wearing shorts with a shirt that said " Comboblade Rules" printed on it. She also had green shoes, and red socks. Francis was wearing shorts, a blue shirt with the number 11 printed on it. He also had green shoes with blue socks.

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Hold on, wait, no! This isnít a flashback. This is the first chapter Ė copied in itís entirety! How many times can you let a man down, author?! Screw this; Iím cutting this part out.

[Ö]


Flashback ends

Francis the Snivy talks to the Ninetales.

"Tory? Is that you?" Francis the Snivy asked

"Yes, it is me Francis" Tory said

"It's been a while" Francis the Snivy said

Yet not nearly long enough, now that Iíve revoked by previous pardon. Also, so much for the whole amnesia deal. What was the plot of this story again?

"Yes it has been" Tory said

The team walks over to see the duo talking. Suyapa can't believe that Tory has dropped by. Tory tells the team that he will tell the story about the first meeting in the next chapter of "POKEMON MYSTERY DUNGEON: THE MYSTERY OF FRANCIS"

Why copy-paste an entire chapter into the story for a flashback, if this asshole is just going to do a retelling next time?!

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Ever since I first came across this author, Iíve found something new to be offended by in every chapter of his stories. I guess the illiteracy roulette would eventually have ended up at a full chapter flashback, but that doesnít lessen the monumental incompetence on display. And we still have thirty chapters left, so thereís likely plenty more where that came from.


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post Dec 5 2016, 04:08 AM
Boy, time flies when youíve got work to do outside your hobbies. Catching a cold on top doesnít help things. But Iím here now, so letís get on with the mocking.
Where did we leave off again? Oh, right, Tory the Ninetaless, the curse caster of chapter one, is here and wants to help Francis. And itís supposed to be prefaced with a retelling of how they met each other. In other news, the author has changed his profile name, again. His name is now FreyaDev, a nickname he seems to take from his newest OC. Who or what that person is about, I donít know, I donít care, I have enough on my plate as it is. Enjoy.


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Chapter 36: The Soul Games are About to Start!

Blacksterops1015: Welcome to chapter 36 of this story. In this chapter, Tory tells team Angeles about the first meeting with Francis and Suyapa when they were humans (Hint: There is more to this than chapter 1).

I would thank you, but this is also your acknowledgement that you know what the fuck you did last chapter Ė and youíre not sorry for it.

The team also finds out that the soul games are about to begin. I also have a side story on Suyapa the Pikachu latter as well. Here we go, and without further delayÖ

Team Angeles: Blacklsterops1025 does not own anything!

(Location- Team Guild- 6AM the next day)

As if time and space ever mattered in this madness.

The team is waking up to a wonderful day. The sun is shining brightly with the temp at 83 degrees. Tory the Ninetales was making breakfast, while Francis the Snivy was watching his dragon brother, and his water brother playing a game of FIFA 12.

I never really trusted these kinds of games that use year numbers in their titles. Not even Hollywood remakes the last yearís movie for a cash grab, so why should game developers?

After 5 minutes, it was breakfast, and story time. The team went to the table to eat, and talk with Tory.

(Breakfast table)

While the team was eating, Tory told the story about the life of Francis and Suyapa when they were still humans.

Being an avid stalker, Tory knew everything about them, you see.

"I am about to tell you all about Francis and Suyapa before I was forced to use the Ninetales curse on them" Tory began

The team gathered around Francis the Snivy, and Suyapa the Pikachu to listen to the story.

But not around Tory, the one telling the story, because a certain someone couldnít stop being the center of attention.

"It began on one March morning. I was a Ninetales that was looking for my first friend. I did not have any friends back then, until Francis showed up.

Author, if you replaced all instances of your name in this story with ĎJesusí, at some point Iím sure youíll be quoting religious testimony.

He was very handsome, and seemed very happy on that day. I don't know if he was happy because he has the game "NBA 2K12" or if got an "A" on a test.

Seriously, author, you need to branch out your repertoire. Try some originality, instead of just sticking with the same handful of tired retreads youíve been over before. You could do with some different games, too.

Francis then walked up to me in a sad expression as he find out that I was upset. I needed a friend, and he said that I am too cute to pass up, so he said I can be his friend.

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Ever since that day, we have been friends. Then, on that day where they turned into pokemon, our friendship was tested. I never wanted to do the curse on both of them, after an unknown force pushed Francis and Suyapa to grab one of my tails. I know what the curse is. It is the "1,000" year thing. I was shocked to find that out, but the ninetales clan forced me to curse both of them, and if I refused, I can't be in the clan, and Francis would not have me as a pokemon.

So, instead of sticking it to your peer-pressuring family, you violate your first and best friendís bodily autonomy. You failed the friendship test, is what youíre saying.

Suyapa was a beautiful girl when I saw her with Francis on the day of the curse. I am very lucky to meet both of them. I just wished I had not to curse them both. Now, I come here to help you all. I would like to join Francis, Suyapa, and all of you to defeat Darkrai once and for all" Tory concluded.

The team accepts Tory's offer to join the team. Tory became happy and excited to join. Suyapa stated that it's the start of the soccer season and the soul games. Tory turns on the news to find unconscious pokemon on screen.

Meh. Probably a re-run. Change the channel.

"Welcome to GAMERS 19 NEWS on Thursday March 30th. We have the 1 year anniversary of the start of the soul games, along with why is this a bad time for Los Angeles. We also have the LA Gamers taking on the LA Loves in basketball"

(GOOD MORNING LA appears on the screen before the news begins)

My, these unconscious Pokťmon sure are lively.

"Today is the one year anniversary of the annual soul games in soccer. This is one of the most evil tournaments to ever compete in. If you want an example of why this tournament is evil, here is an example of the game between Team LA Wonderers and Kings of LA" the news woman said as a replay of a soccer game came on the screen.

"This is one of the most evil tournaments that the soccer world has had. Darkrai is the creator the tournament. Team LA Wonderers and Kings of LA were going after Darkrai, when Kings of LA won the game. Team LA wonderers lost 9 teammates to Darkrai. The Seal of Darkrai as it is called, took the souls of the losing team.

Consider that in an alternate universe, Sauron hosted a tennis tournament between men and elves, and thatís how he lost The One Ring. Thatís how absurd this story is; why the fuck would anyone participate?!

One of team LA Wonderers players by the name of Francis the Serperior was saved by Francis the Pipulp. Francis the Pipulp rammed her teammate out of the way of the seal. Francis the Pipulp's soul was taken by Darkrai. Now, we have more information on the courageous Pipulp who saved Francis the Serperior. She happens to be the only sister of team Angeles captain, Francis the Snivy. A year after that fateful day, Francis the Serperior joins team Angeles to save his teammates souls, and reunite Francis the Snivy, and Francis the Pipulp" The news reporter concluded

And we learned absolutely nothing new. How fucking wonderful.

(Guild)

The team has just finished watching the news, when a letter arrived. It was for the soul games. Francis the Snivy read the letter, since it was for him.

"If you ever want to see your dear sister again, attend my soul games. If you decline, I shall seal ya away!" The letter concluded

ďP.S. No, seriously, youíve got to come. Blackmail and hostage taking is the only way I can get participants Ė I donít even have a cool prize for the winner or anything. I donít even know why Iím doing this!Ē

The team is going to the soul games now. What they don't know is that if Team Angeles wins the tournament, Francis the Snivy will have to face DarkraiÖ.ALONE!

Blacksterops1025: Suyapa the Pikachu's side story is tonight!

But weíre not done yet. We still have one more chapter to cram through my filter before this post is done. Letís do it.


Chapter 37: Practice Session and New Teammates

Blacksterops1025: Welcome to chapter 37 of the story. In this chapter, Darkrai makes his presence felt by attacking Francis the Snivy before the game starts. Will Francis the Snivy faint before the game starts?

Will it actually matter? No. The answer is, has, and always will be no. I have never seen a protagonist more inconsequential to the story, despite it being all about him.

We also have a new teammate. He happens to be Francis the Snivy's brother named Roy the Umbreon.

At least heís not named Francis like the rest of the failure family.

Here we go, and without further delayÖ

Team Angeles: Blacksterops1025 dosent own anything!

(Location- Team Guild)

The team has just found a letter that was for the team.

No, it was for Francis. You explicitly stated so. What even, author?

They know that the soul games are about to start. The team then see's a shadow flying overhead. The shadow was heading for Francis the Snivy. The shadow attacks with Shadow Ball. The ball missed Francis, but the ball turns around, and hits Francis the Snivy from behind.

For all I know, Francis remained stationary throughout the attack, so I canít really act surprised.

Francis faints, and now the seal comes toward Francis. The seal almost hits Francis, but it was deflected by a psychic attack from an Umbreon. The shadow reveals itself as Darkrai. The team tries to help Francis recover, but Darkrai uses Life Drain to stop the team from getting closer to Francis. The Umbreon tells the team to head inside the base.

Sure, letís abandon the unconscious protagonist in the clutches of the villain. I donít know what possibly could go wrong here.

(Inside the Guild)

The Umbreon tells the team that he is Roy the Umbreon, and one of Francis the Snivy's brothers. He then tells the team that he wants to join.

"Team Angeles, I want to join the team" Roy said

"Yes you can" A hedgehog said

"Who's there?" Suyapa asked

"It's Sonic the hedgehog" Sonic said

Oh, shit! We got a CODE BLUE, everybody! I repeat, CODE BLUE! This is not a drill!

"Yo, you are da fast one" Francis the Buizel said

"I bet you are going to join the team too" Suyapa said

"Yes" Sonic said

"Welcome to team Angeles" Rouge the bat said

You donít even need to ask to join anymore; you can just demand a position on the team? Why does anyone even want to join them?

"Thank you" Both Roy and Sonic said

The team hears the game alarm. The team goes to the team computer room to find out that the soul games are starting tomorrow. The team heads to the soccer training area to get ready

(3rd floor of guild)

The team walks into the practice field for soccer games. Francis the Snivy revives in time to be able to practice.

You mean Darkrai just up and left after the team abandoned Francis? Did the author seriously forget that the antagonist was standing on their fucking doorstep?

The team works on passing, crossing, and other offensive drills. The team also worked on defensive drills. Here is practice 1:

(1st half)

Francis the Axew passes to Kat. Kat moves toward center. Rose is open on the right side. Kat lob passes to Rose. Rose passes to Francis the Snivy. Francis the Snivy shoots it and scores!

"Good extra pass Rose" Francis said

"Thank you" Rose said

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We are getting a play-by-play of fucking sports practice. I can barely believe anyone would want to read this, let alone write it. How boring can this story get?

Rouge the bat passes to Sonic. Sonic sees Suyapa open. Sonic passes to Suyapa. Suyapa shoots the ball, but got the ball blocked by Francis the Axew. Francis the Axew passes to Francis the Snivy. He goes toward center. He shoots and scores!

"That was a great defensive play" Francis the Snivy says to his dragon brother

"Thanks man" Francis the Axew said

And on top, now itís also pathetic, as all Iím seeing is the author congratulating himself for minor fictional accomplishments.

(Skip to end of game- Location- Team Guild- Team Room)

The team is now in the team room getting ready for the soul games. They find out that they are going up against team Charm, which they befriended. As long as team Angeles wins, the team can save team Charm by defeating Darkrai.

I have another idea. Now, this might be complicated for you, author, but try to follow along. How about instead of beating the snot out of each other, they team up with team Charm, and then they all battle Darkrai together? Or does ďmaking senseĒ just not fly with you?

Blacksterops1025: Here are the rules for the games

1) 45 minute halves (2 of them)

2) Teams will face off in a 2 leg style tournament

Quadrupeds will be banned from playing?

3) The first games score will carry over to the second as an Aggregate score

4) The winner will be decided in the second leg with the most on Aggregate

5) Any players with yellow or red cards, will carry over

6) If team Angeles wins the tournament, Francis the Snivy will have to defeat Darkrai and save everyoneÖ..ALONE!

Why the fuck is that part of the rules? What if team Charm wins, what fucking then?

TEAM ANGELES TEAM CHARM: NEXT FRIDAY

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SoÖ Sonic is here now. Thatís a thing. Also, weíre about to see the protagonists compete in a soccer tournament, where the losers have their souls ripped out. Sounds like the plot of a sports anime, if you ask me. Or maybe Iím thinking of The Hurricanes. Man, I actually watched that show? Iím getting old.


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post Dec 5 2016, 11:22 AM
I love the hurricanes! I used to watch whenever I could.

Then we moved and changed cable companies.

Stupid cable companies.


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post Dec 10 2016, 12:33 PM
The story marches on and so must we. There’s a sports tournament to get through before the protagonists can face off against Darkrai – even though ambushing him whenever he shows up to devour souls would be the smarter alternative. But, you know, smart isn’t this story’s thing. Enjoy.

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Chapter 38: Leg 1: Team Angeles AT Team Charm

Blacksterops1025: Welcome to chapter 38 of the story. In this chapter, we have game 1 of the soul games. I will also make the story "Francis the Snivy's Abused Life" latter tonight.

I checked for the story, and I assume it’s now titled Francis Abused. It involves a human Francis being attacked by his father for winning the ‘student of the week’ award at his school, and ends with him making out with his sister. Yet the most offensive thing in it is still his martyr complex.

Here we go, and without further delay…

Team Angeles: Blacksterops1025 does not own anything

(Location- Gamers Field in Los Angeles)

Team Angeles is about to play in game against team Charm to go on in the Soul games tournament.

Is anyone else competing in this tournament at all?

"Are you guys ready for the battle of your lives?" Francis the Snivy asked the team

"Let's do this" Orion said

"Paws down on dat" Francis the Buizel said

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If I never hear you speak again, Francis #2, it will be too soon.

The team is seconds away from the start of the tournament.

(20 seconds latter)

Team Charm and Team Angeles enters the field to start the battle of their lives. The line ups are announced.

Team Angeles:

(Front 3)

Francis the Snivy

Kat the Snivy

Rose the Snivy

(Middle 4)

Suyapa the Pikachu

Orion

Kavi the Servine

Francis the Axew

(Back 3)

Francis the Buizel

Ivanna the Serperior

Ania the Snivy

Goal Keeper for Team Angeles: Rouge the Bat


I’ll resist the joke of Rouge having experience with catching balls to her face. It just feels too easy with this setup.

(Subs)

Sonic

Francis the Azelf

Edge the Bisharp

Spark the Pikachu

Francis the Riolu

Katie the Servine

Tory the Ninetales

Roy the Umbreon


Do you really need so many bench warmers that you could replace almost the entire team? I mean, just one for every character named Francis should be enough.

Team Charm

(Front 4)

Leo

Carlos

Katrina

Joey

(Middle 2)

Luna

Kyle

(Sub-middle 2)

Karla

Berea

(Back 2)

Karl

Pascual (Spanish)

Goal Keeper: Anthony


The author doesn’t bother to tell us what Pokťmon they are, but we must be aware that one of them is Spanish. Priorities.

(1st half kickoff- Middle circle- Luna VS Suyapa)

Commentator mode in effect


Commentator 1: Here we go with the start of the Soul games on Channel 19 sports. This is Roy the Riolu and Rene the Emolga with today's commentary for Team Angeles VS Team Charm. We have begun.

So instead of following the action on the field, you must emulate the same experience as if we were getting a radio broadcast of the match. How many pages are left in your book of bad ideas, author?

Rene: We have Suyapa looking for an open pass. She see’s Orion in the corner. Suyapa passes to Orion. Orion spots Francis the Snivy inside the box. He passes to Francis the Snivy with a lob pass. Francis the Snivy goes for goal. He hits and scores the opening goal of the Soul Games.

(Team Angeles Goal- Francis the Snivy: 45 seconds in- 1st goal of the tournament)

(Assist to- Orion the Arcanine- 1st assist of the game)

Reaction from Roy: That was amazing how Orion got to find Francis the Snivy in the box. Francis finishes with the first goal of the tournament.

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I don’t watch sports, but I’m pretty sure there’s not this much back-patting involved. You don’t have to put your characters on pedestals for every minor accomplishment, author.

Rene: Luna passes to Carlos for team Charm. He passes the ball to Pascual. She passes to Leo. Francis the Snivy is defending Leo with hand checking. Leo tries to dribble around Francis the Snivy, but Francis spots the ball and takes it away from Leo. Leo uses Waterfall. The field is now wet, and Francis the Snivy takes 20 points of damage. Francis passes to Orion. He goes for a goal from 32 yards. He Scores!

(Team Angeles Goal- Orion the Arcanine: 4 minutes and 34 seconds in-1st goal of the tournament)

Again with this time wasting bullshit. Three passes, an interception, and a goal shot should not take the same time it takes to boil an egg.

(Assist to- Francis the Snivy- 1st assist of the tournament)

Reaction from Roy: Orion scores goal number two for team Angeles. He gets the help from Francis the Snivy. Francis and Orion now have a 1 and 1 scene (1 goal and 1 Assist).

Rene: Luna passes the ball to Leo. He passes to Karla. Karla looks for someone who is open. She tries a goal from 35 yards. Rouge the bat grabs the ball and gives it to Suyapa, who uses Quick Attack to speed forward. She tries a shot from 12 yards. She hits the post, but Francis the Snivy is there to put it in for team Angeles!

I guess I shouldn’t complain too much. I mean, Francis is finally doing something. And that something is carrying his entire fucking team – this guy flip-flops between savior and sucker whenever it’s convenient to his image!

(Team Angeles Goal- Francis the Snivy: 8 minutes and 39 seconds in- 2nd goal of the season)

(Score 3-0)

Reaction from Roy: Suyapa is the fastest one of the field. She does it by using Quick Attack to get forward. She may have missed her shot, but the defense of team Charm was weak, so weak that Francis the Snivy got the ball and put it at the back of the neck for his second goal of the tournament.

(Skip to second half)

I’ll take your mercy whenever you offer it, but I will never beg.

Game reset:

Score

Team Angeles: 4

Team Charm: 0

Top scorers:

Francis the Snivy: 3 goals, 1 assist

Orion: 1 goal, 1 assist

Subs left:

Team Angeles: 3

Team Charm: 3


Blah blah blah, nobody fucking cares, just get it over with.

(2nd half)

Rene: Here will go for the second half of game 1 of the soul games. Its Leo and Luna in the circle. Leo passes to Luna. Luna passes to Pascual. Pascual passes to Leo. Leo lob passes to Karlos. He passes to Karla, who gets intercepted by Suyapa.

Do they even know where the ball is supposed to go?

Roy: Suyapa steals the ball from Karla. Suyapa passes to Francis the Snivy. Leo hits Francis the Snivy from behind. The referee calls for a free kick.

Rene: Francis the Snivy passes to Orion. Orion passes to Kavi. Kavi passes to Orion. Orion shoots the ball from 30 yards, and Scores!

(Team Angeles Goal- Orion the Arcanine: 60 minutes in- 2nd goal of the tournament)

And the crowd goes wild. Actually, is there a crowd at all? Nothing has established that they are not playing for an empty stadium.

(Assist to- Kavi the Servine- 1st assist of his tournament)

Reaction from Roy: Team Angeles is just getting what they want in this game. Kavi finds Orion open, and Orion takes advantage.

Oh, the innuendo – much like logic it flies way above the author’s head.

(Score: 4 to 0)

(Skip to 90th minute)

Rene: This is it. Team Angeles has won game 1 of the tournament. All team Angeles have to do now is win in their second leg with team Charm, to move on. This is it for channel 19 sports, and we will see on team Angeles off day, tomorrow on "Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: The Mystery of Francis"

Blacksterops1025: The next story starts latter tonight

But we’re continuing this until we’re two for two. Here come’s another chapter.


Chapter 39: Off Day 1: Francis is PokeNapped

Aw, crap, not this shit again.

Blacksterops1025: This is Chapter 39 of Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: The Mystery f Francis. In this chapter, team Angeles takes a day off from the tournament, however, Darkrai appears and poke naps Francis the Snivy (which is against the rules).

Because even when the bad guy is the arbiter of the fucking rules, he still doesn’t want to follow them.

Here we go, and without further delay…

Team Angeles: Blackserops1025 does not own anything you are reading.

(Location- Team Angeles Base in Los Angeles)

The team is enjoying their off day from the tournament in the team base watching the other teams play. According to the tournament standings, they will either face team Meanies or Team Lins (Team Meanies has a 7 goal lead). Team Angeles wants team Lins to win so that team Angeles does not have to face against Francis the Snivy's second unit rivals (Serperior, Zubat, Ninetales, and Koffing).

Come on, Meanies, is your need to hurt Francis really worth risking your souls?

The game is currently in the second half (78th minute) with the score at 7-4 (Team Meanies leading on Aggregate).

Here is the commentary from that game:

Yay, another play-by-play of a game I’m even less, and thus negatively, invested in. You sure know how to treat me, author.

(Location of game- Kinglins Park in Louisiana- Team Lins home court)

Commentator 1: Its Lin with the ball. He passes to Roxanne. Roxanne passes to Omar. Omar goes for goal, and gets the goal. It's now 0-1.

Commentator 2: Team Meanies defense has fallen apart in the last few minutes, allowing team Lins to take advantage.

How convenient. It makes this segment almost have tension.

Commentator 1: The score in this game is 0-1 (7-5 on Aggregate). Serperior passes to Hector. Hector passes to Serperior. Kat kicks the ball away from team Meanies to take it away. Kat passes to Lin. Lin goes for goal, and scores!

Commentator 2: That was a nice take away from Kat. She is so smart when she has the ball. Lin is a good finisher, and he finishes it with a cherry on top.

Riveting commentary. These descriptions leaves me thoroughly impressed by the skill of these athletes. Excuse, I have to put a few coins in my sarcasm jar. But don’t worry, it’s completely unrelated. Oops, there goes another one.

Commentator 1: The score is 0-2( 7-6 on Aggregate).

(Location- team Angeles team Guild)

The team is happy about a comeback from team Lins. The team watches until a window breaks in the guild. The footsteps of a pokemon can be heard from the hallway. The shadow throws a "fainting powder inside the room where team Angeles was watching the game. The team has no idea that Darkrai is about to uses Francis the Snivy's life energy as his own.

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And you make it really hard for us to share in their surprise, when you tell us every fucking thing that’s going to happen in advance.

Francis the Buizel was the only one not to faint from the powder. Francis the Buizel tries to attack the shadow, but the shadow uses a move called "Feed Me" (I made up this move) to feed off from Francis the Buizel's energy.

Off the top of my head, I can list Leech Life, Absorb, and the entire Drain series. Did you really need to make up a new move?

Francis the Buizel faints, leaving the now unconscious Francis the Snivy defenseless. The shadow takes Francis the Snivy away from the guild.

(10 minutes latter)

Team Angeles has revived, but they are about to figure out that Francis the Snivy is missing.

"Francis da Snive is missing yo" Francis the Buizel said

I swear, ‘F-dog’, keep talking and there won’t be a ditch too shallow to hide your corpse.

"You got to be kidding" Suyapa said

"The team turns on the team Lins game. They listen for the commentator's news on a shadow, as well as the final score.

Who needs to investigate the break-in and kidnapping in their own building, when you can just as easily turn to exposition news – telling you everything we already know?

(Location- Kinglins park in Louisiana)

Commentator 1: We are going to get to the final score for this game, but before that, a shadow of a pokemon was seen carrying an unconscious purple- yellow colored Snivy. According to a lot of sources, this Snivy is Francis the Snivy, the leader of team Angeles in Los Angeles, CA. We also believe that this shadow is the shadow of the pokemon that made this tournament, Darkrai. I think everyone wants to know the final score. The final score is 10 to 9. Team Lins losses their souls to Darkrai. Team Meanies faces the winner of Team Angeles VS Team Charm, where Team Angeles leads on Aggregate 4 to is all we have for now.

“We could give less of a fuck about what happens to that Snivy; this is what gets viewers to tune in!”

(Location- Team Angeles base)

The team was mad that Team Meanies won the game, and the fact that Francis the Snivy was poke napped by Darkrai. They also question why.

"Why would Darkrai do this? Why is Francis the Snivy the chosen? Why? " The team asks in silence.

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I have been asking that question through more than three stories now; it’s about fucking time!

The team will have to wait until May 5th during leg 2 on Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: The Mystery of Francis"

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Another kidnapping was inevitable; it was only a matter of when and by whom. I don’t understand why, though. It’s not like Francis wasn’t going to come to Darkrai eventually, and supposedly would have to face off against him alone. So even by the story’s narrative, this is pointless.

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post Dec 18 2016, 12:52 PM
You would think the plot would get going, now that Francis has been taken hostage by the penultimate villain in this story. But, no. No, it doesnít. Enjoy.

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Chapter 40: Leg 2:Francis in Danger, Soccer Game

Blacksterops1025: Welcome to chapter 40 of Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: The Mystery of Francis. In this chapter, we have the second leg of Team Angeles VS Team Charm. Team Angeles leads by 4 to 0 on aggregate, but the main focus of this chapter is that Darkrai has poke napped Francis the Snivy.

Iím glad you can stay on track, author. Granted, the track runs more circles than a NASCAR race, but you stick to it.

Here we go, and without further delayÖ

Team Angeles: Blacksterops1025 does not own anything

(Location- Team Angeles team base)

Team Angeles is trying to get ready for the 2nd leg of the match with team Charm, but their progress is halted by the disappearance of Francis the Snivy. The team is now in the dressing room getting ready to take on Team Charm.

Their progress is halted, yet they are carrying on as if nothing has happened. When will the author learn that Francis is inconsequential to his own story?

(Soccer field)

Team Angeles is on the field to begin the game with a 4-0 lead on aggregate. The team lines up with changes to the line up
Line ups

Team Angeles:

(Front 3)

Francis the Riolu

Kat the Snivy

Rose the Snivy


Is this why you named all of Francisí siblings after him, author? So that even when heís not here, you can still have yourself play along in the sports games?

(Middle 4)

Suyapa the Pikachu

Orion

Kavi the Servine

Francis the Axew

(Back 3)

Francis the Buizel

Ivanna the Serperior

Ania the Snivy

Goal Keeper for Team Angeles: Rouge the Bat

(Subs)

Sonic


If heís just going to sit on the bench, then why drag him into this story in the first place?

Francis the Azelf

Edge the Bisharp

Spark the Pikachu

Katie the Servine

Tory the Ninetales

Roy the Umbreon

(Team Charm)


With that kind of name, you would think weíd at least be told what they look like.

(Front 4)

Leo

Carlos

Katrina

Joey

(Middle 2)

Luna

Kyle

(Sub-middle 2)

Karla

Berea

(Back 2)

Karl

Pascual (Spanish)

Goal Keeper: Anthony


I canít help but feel these names come from somewhere; like thereís some inane and obscure logic that Iím not seeing. I donít know, this author is making me paranoid.

(1st half)

Rene: Here we go in the first half of the second leg of this game. Suyapa has the ball for team Angeles. She finds Orion. She passes to Orion. Orion scores!

(Team Angeles Goal- Orion: 30 seconds in- 2nd goal of the tournament)

(Assist to- Suyapa- 1st assist of the tournament)

Maybe you could give me an assist, author. Explain to me the point of keeping track of these.

Roy: Suyapa is so good finding her teammates. She finds Orion open, and she delivers it, and Orion finishes.

Rene: With that goal, team Angeles leads 1-0 (5-0 on Aggregate). Karla passes to Karl. Karl finds Pascual. Pascual looks at her right side to see Berea open. She passes to Berea. Berea shoots, but Suyapa blocks the ball.

Roy: Suyapa passes to Francis the Riolu. He passes to Orion. Orion goes for goal, and scores!

I think Orion has been consistently the best player on Francisí team since I started reading these stories. Heís getting my vote for new protagonist.

(Team Angeles Goal- Orion: 7 minutes and 7 seconds in- 3rd goal (ties with Francis the Snivy)

(Assist to- Francis the Riolu- 1st assist in tournament)

Rene: That was amazing. Orion is a good finisher, and he has matched Francis the Snivy for goals scored in this tournament.

ďKind of weird that heís not here right now, isnít it, Roy? Itís almost like heís somewhere else; somewhere more interesting to see than this game, even. Maybe, just maybe, Team Angeles shouldnít be playing right now, and instead find their missing friend. But I guess thatís not important to them. Oh well.Ē

Roy: With Orion's goal, the score is 2-0 (6-0 on Aggregate)Ö.

(Location- Unknown area)

Francis the Snivy has just revived 13 hours after he was taken away from the guild by Darkrai (the shadow). He knows he is not inside the guild, but inside a castle of some sorts. The shadow all of a sudden attacks Francis the Snivy with Shadow Ball. Francis took major damage (89 damage points out of 100). Francis is already about to faintÖ

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So, Iím guessing the main focus of this chapter is going to be how Francis has been kidnapped, but not about how anyone is trying to rescue him. Because no one is Ė even after thirteen fucking hours. Why the fuck does he even exist?

(At the soccer game)

Score: 4-0 (8-0 on aggregate)

Time: 90th minute (added time: 2 minutes)

Team Angeles has officially won the game.

Yet again proving that Francis is superfluous to the team. If he isnít even vital to their sports games, why have them be a part of the story?

Darkrai was supposed to steal all of team Charms souls, but what was about to happen, will change team Angeles. Darkrai appears on the monitor.

"Hello players of the Soul Games. I am Darkrai, the one with a precious Snivy with me" Darkrai said as the crowd booed him.

I could see the point of this behavior, if the author was a wrestling fan instead of a soccer maniac.

"Team Angeles, you better listen up. Your friend is now mine!.." Darkrai said as he turned off the transmission.

The crowd continues to boo Darkrai. Team Angeles fears was about to come true.

That would assume they had any to begin with, and with how they been ignoring the ďmain focus of the chapterĒ so far, I donít think they do.

(Location- Darkrai's castle in Los Angeles)

As Darkrai turned off the transmission, he grabs Francis the Snivy by the legs. Darkrai uses Sky Attack on Francis. Darkrai flies upward while holding on to Francis. Darkrai slams Francis on the floor making him faint, but the pain is far from overÖ

I guess this is the masochistic equivalent of a stroke job. Were it someone elseís pain the author was getting off on, I could at least hate him for it. This? I want to feel pity, but I donít think itís deserved.

Blacksterops1025: On May 5th, what will happen? Stay tuned!

The phrase ďstay tunedĒ implies that you want the audience to not switch to a different entertainment venue in the time between now and whenever the next part is. At least Iím not as selfish with the attention Iím given, because another mocked chapter is coming right now.


Chapter 41: Francis Losing His Memories? Part 1of 2

Blacksterops1025: Welcome to chapter 41 of the story "Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: The Mystery of Francis" In this chapter, Francis the Snivy is in danger, and Yuneri the Snivy goes romantic.

Action! Romance! This story has it all and yet none of it!

Here we go, and without further delay,

Team Angeles: Blacksterops1025 does not own anything

New Language Alert level 2- French words translated

Parlez-vous dumbass?

(Location- Darkrai's Castle in East L.A)

Last statement before cut off from last chapter: Darkrai has just made Francis the Snivy faint in the last chapter

(Current situation)

Darkrai is now starring at Francis the Snivy's unconscious body while laughing. Darkrai goes back to interrupting team Angeles's victory against Team Charm by doing a transmission.

Another one this soon? This doesnít make him seem intimidating, it makes him look forgetful.

(Location- Team Angeles soccer field)

Team Angeles is now celebrating their victory over team charm. They are now about to leave, when Darkrai's transmission stops them.

"Good job winning your match team Angeles!" Darkrai yelled

The crowd boos Darkrai.

Weíve been here, author. Could you kindly move the fuck on?

"I have some good news for you. You get to face team Meanies (-Gengar). The bad news, well, everyone might want to close their eyes!" Darkrai yelled as he grabbed Francis the Snivy, and attacked him with "Memory Wipe" (The 3rd move I made up). Darkrai held Francis the Snivy up and held his head while injecting something into his head. This injection made Darkrai laugh at what he has done to one of the nicest pokemon in Los Angeles.

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You wish to evoke emotion, author. You want me to feel bad for Francis. You want me to sympathize; to be horrified; to whimper and weep for his hopeless situation. Yet all I want is to have my memories wiped as well.

"You all say what I did there people. Well here is a lesson for all of you. Team Angeles, you have 3.5 days to save Francis the Snivy. If you fail at this challenge, well, let's say that I shall erase her memory!" Darkrai yelled

Okay, how was that not done just now? What the hell did ďMemory WipeĒ do, if it DIDNíT wipe the bastardís memory?!!

Team Angeles knows that Darkrai means "his memory" not "her memory".

I have never seen faster backpedaling on something that could have been fixed with the fucking backspace key. [/b][/color]

The team gets worried. Yuneri was very concerned.

"I want to save Francis the Snivy so that he can see me and Francis the Buizel marry each other" Yuneri said

How wonderfully selfish of you.

"What's dat you say?" Francis the Buizel asked

"Oh, nothing. I'm just concerned that Francis the Snivy might have his memory wiped clean" Yuneri said

"Ya sure? I taught I heard that yo want to marry moi (me in French)" Francis the Buizel said

"I see" Yuneri said

"Les frites et les raisins combinen Yuneri? (Those French fries and Grapes costÖ?)" Francis the Buizel said

Iím sorry, what? Well, If youíre already ordering, then Iíll have small milkshake and a side order of what the fuck are you smoking right now!?

"No! I said that we must save Francis.." Yuneri said until Francis is Buizel interrupted her

"Porquoi (why?)" Francis the Buizel asked

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Why? WHY?! The storyís protagonist has been kidnapped, his physical assault broadcasted to an entire sports stadium, complete with the villain delivering the utmost clichť of monologues to bait Francis' friends into rushing to his rescue, and still Francis #2 has the audacity to ask WHY they should rescue his fucking brother?! I donít know if the story has suddenly become self-aware, or if the author has started huffing glue. This shit is unbelievable!

"That's because his memory will be wiped clean (wow Yuneri, you got some French skills)" Yuneri said

" Je deteste Darkrai (I hate Darkrai)" Francis the Buizel said

" Me too" Yuneri said

"Ok" Francis the Buizel said

Are you done? Is the madness leaving? Can the story continue?

The team knows that latter on that Francis the Buizel and Yuneri the Snivy will put on the "romance dance".

Ew.

MeanwhileÖ

(Location- Darkrai's Castle in East L.A)

Darkrai is now enjoying his moment with the unconscious Francis the Snivy. Darkrai "throws a party" for his accomplishment.

"I should throw myself a little party" Darkrai said

IÖ I mean, sure. Knock yourself out, dude.

Darkrai calls for les rassins, les frites, un coca, et un gueateau (grapes, French fries, soda, and a cake). The guards deliver his "treats" to him.

"Merci (thank you)" Darkrai said

"No problem" the guards said

What is this? What am I reading? How many of his parentsí pills did the author swallow?

Darkrai enjoys his treats as he watches Francis the Snivy. Darkrai is planning to seal Francis the Snivy away in the Angeles National Forest after Francis has his memory wiped cleanÖ.

Blacksterops1025: What is planned for after May 5th? Find out soon on my profile! Don't miss Out!

Team Angeles says: WE LOVE LOS ANGELES!

Not as much as I enjoy ragging on bad fanfics. Thereís space enough here for another chapter, so letís get to it.


Chapter 42: Francis Losing His Memories? Part 2of 2

Blacksterops1025: Welcome to chapter 42 of the story "Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: The Mystery of Francis" In today's chapter, team Angeles is on their way to save Francis the Snivy, and Yuneri the Snivy and Francis the Buizel get it started (They start the romance events).

Frankly, given who is writing this story, Iím expecting less chemistry than between actual Barbie dolls.

Here we go, and without further delayÖ

Team Angeles: Blacksterops1025 does not own anything!

Alerts in this chapter:

Blood warning level 4- Francis the Snivy is injured and blood is flowing from at least 4 parts of his body

I see your four unnamed body parts and raise you a pair of eyes and two rows of grinded down teeth.

New Language Alert level 2- French words translated

Romance Alert level 5- Yuneri the Snivy and Francis the Buizel get it on!

No, theyíre not. I havenít looked ahead, but I know theyíre not. Because that would imply the author knows what he is writing here, much less that he knows what sex is.

(Location- Darkrai's castle)

Last line before the bell: Darkrai enjoys his treats as he watches Francis the Snivy. Darkrai is planning to seal Francis the Snivy away in the Angeles National Forest after Francis has his memory wiped clean.

(Current situation)

Darkrai has just finished his "victory party" when he noticed that Francis the Snivy revives in front of him. Darkrai attacks Francis to keep him unconscious longer. Darkrai then does his "magic" to start erasing Francis the Snivy's memories.

You are making it very hard for me to not devolve into third grade immaturity with these joke setups, author.

(Location- Team Angeles base- Yuneri the Snivy's bedroom)

Yuneri the Snivy and Francis the Buizel are talking about the mission ahead. They don't know that it is already off to a cheep start.

"How should we do dis mission" Francis the Buizel asked

"Why don't vous (you Ė in a formal manner) tell moi (me)" Yuneri the Snivy said

"J'aime vous (I like you)" Francis the Buizel said

"Really?" Yuneri the Snivy asked

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For heavenís sake, will you just go save your friend already?!

"Oui Madame (Yes Madame)" Francis the Buizel said

"J'ai adore vous (I adore you)" Yuneri the Snivy said

"Should we do this little moment of ours?" Francis the Buizel asked

"Yes we shall" Yuneri the Snivy said

Take your perversion to the daycare, you fiends.

The duo got closer to each other, close enough to kiss each other. Kat saw this action and cheered them on.

"You two look good together" Kat said

"Thank you" Francis the Buizel and Yuneri the Snivy said together

"We must save Francis the Snivy before all of his memories are wiped clean!" Everyone yelled

What is this now, the third time in this story this is the agenda? Maybe itís the author who needs his memory saved.

(Living room area)

Francis the Riolu and Roy the Umbreon were playing a game of "FIFA 12" when they heard everyone yell about the mission at hand. The duo of footballers (soccer players term outside the United States) abort their game to save the one they love, Francis the Snivy.

Oh yes, I can really feel their love, what with them playing videogames while Francis is being held hostage. Iím sounding like a broken record by now, arenít I?

(Darkrai's Castle)

Darkrai has just erased about 3.9% of Francis the Snivy's memories, when he finds out that team Angeles is on their way to rescue Francis the Snivy. Darkrai gets ready to defend his work of horror. Darkrai wants to make sure that Francis the Snivy's memories are wiped clean.

But why?! What worth is it to him? What does Francis even remember that he would risk losing; the guy is already an amnesiac!

Team Angeles wants to save Francis the Snivy. Which side will win? The only way to find out, is to read and vote. The saga begins tomorrow on "Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: The Mystery of Francis"

Weíre on chapter forty-two or your fourth story with this character, and youíre saying the ďsagaĒ begins next time? How many times must you violate the written medium in front of our eyes?

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Good grief. Just when you think youíve hit rock bottom, the author drops you through another trapdoor into the next pit of madness. Every. Fucking. Time. It just never ends.


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post Jan 5 2017, 08:19 AM
The new year is underway, the educational system is still a burden on my free time, and the planet keeps spinning; nothing new. Iím tempted to say the same thing about this fanfic, and yet it still finds ways to ramp up the crazy. Enjoy.

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Chapter 43: The Francis VS Darkrai Saga Begins

Blacksterop1025: Welcome to chapter 43 of this story. In this chapter, Team Angeles is on their way to save Francis the Snivy. Here we go, and without further delayÖ

Weíve had plenty of that already, so, please.

Team Angeles: Blacksterops1025 does not own anything

(Location- team Angeles team base)

Last line before the bell: Darkrai has just erased about 3.9% of Francis the Snivy's memories, when he finds out that team Angeles is on their way to rescue Francis the Snivy.

I wonder what those 3.9% consists of. Childhood memories? Trivia knowledge? I mean, its obviously too big to be his literary skills.

Darkrai gets ready to defend his work of horror. Darkrai wants to make sure that Francis the Snivy's memories are wiped clean. Team Angeles wants to save Francis the Snivy. Which side will win?

Implying there is somehow a benefit of being victorious in this world, where everything goes back to status quo within the span of a paragraph.

(current situation)

Team Angeles is now ready to save Francis the Snivy from Darkrai. The team is planning their trip to Darkrai's castle.

"According to the news sources, Francis the Snivy is trapped inside Darkrai's Castle" Kat said

Gee, in hindsight it seems a bit silly to go compete in a tournament to meet Darkrai, when you could have just gone to his fucking home.

"Ok" Suyapa said

"Where is Darkrai's Castle?" Rose asked

"East L.A" an unknown voice said

The team sees a Serperior. The team finds out that this Serperior is Francis the Serperior, Francis the Snivy's older brother. Francis the Serperior joins team Angeles to find Francis the Snivy.

Wonderful! There are currently five people on the team sharing the authorís first name, and none of them is the titular main character Ė also named after him. This story has more self-insertion than a clone gangbang.

(Location- Darkrai's castle in East L.A)

Darkrai has just erased 4.9% of Francis the Snivy's memories. Darkrai is enjoying what he has done. Darkrai goes outside of East L.A to find team Angeles.

Why? He baited Team Angeles to come to him, how fucking impatient is he?

(Location-LA Live in Downtown L.A)

Team Angeles is now in downtown Los Angeles to try to find Darkrai. They spot the convention center. The team goes inside to look for clues.

Let me guess, they find a note randomly on the ground, right?

(Location-Convention Center)

The team is inside the convention center to look for clues on how to find Darkrai. The team finds a note on the floor.

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This is fucking unbelievable. Itís like the fourth time this author has pulled this shit on me. I mean, to a three-year-old, the logic would sort of make sense. Investigators pick up random shit off the ground all the time, and they use it to figure out where to go next. But to not understand the investigative process, or that these clues has to come from somewhere that makes sense, is goddamn mindboggling.

"Look at this, I found a note" Suyapa said

"I see a penguin pokemon's paw print" Kat said

"To a team in Los Angeles, Please defeat Darkrai and save me from his harm. Francis the Snivy is my brother, and I am his sister. From, Francis the Pipulp" Suyapa read

Why the fuck do you need saving, when even without being in possession of a soul you can leave clues in places you somehow foresee the team would go. This is what Iím fucking talking about; nothing of this makes sense!

"Wow, I did not know that Francis the Snivy has a sister" Suyapa said

"I think you know that since Francis the Serperior told the story" Rose said

"Yes" Suyapa said

I donít know what I should be worried about most. The fact that Suyapa is starting to lose her memory, or that the author is trying to be funny.

The team exits the convention center to find the sky turning dark. The team spots a shadow in the sky. The shadow flies toward team Angeles and attacks Yuneri the Snivy. Yuneri dodges the attack. The team realized that the shadow is Darkrai.

Not now, Darkrai. Team Angeles is gathering clues in order to find you.

Darkrai plans to injure the entire team with a move. Darkrai used Shadow Ball.

The team is now in the line of dangerous fire as they run inside the convention center. The team makes it inside, only to find that Darkrai teleported inside with them.

If he can teleport, why does he bother to fly anywhere?

Darkrai unleashes a Shadow Ball attack that is 30 feet wide and 59 feet tall. The attack hits the team hard. Everyone fainted, except for Yuneri the Snivy and Darkrai.

Funny how these kind of attacks never come out, when thereís a tiny Snivy nearby willing to throw himself in front of them.

Yuneri knows that she is not safe from Darkrai. Yuneri tries to run, but an unknown force stops her (hint: It is not Azelf). Darkrai attacks Yuneri with Shadow Ball. Yuneri was for sure to be hit, until Francis the Buizel revives and takes the attack (Romance Magic!).

No matter what you call it, author, itís still something you pull out of your ass.

Yuneri taught she was done for until her lover came to save her (Francis the Buizel faints for taking the attack).

Blacksterops1025: This is just the beginning of a long Saga with Darkrai. What will happen? Next week, stay tuned!

Since weíre gluttons for punishment though, weíll just move right along with the next chapter.


Chapter 44: Francis the Azelf returns, Romance?

Blacksterops1025: Welcome to chapter 44 of this story. In this chapter, we have romance with Suyapa and Francis the Snivy. In tomorrow's edition, we have a saving Heroine. Yuneri the Snivy faints! Why you ask?

I didnít, but at least you assume Iím capable of questioning your decisions.

Wait for tomorrow's edition. Here we go, and without further delayÖ

Team Angeles: Blacksterops1025 does not own anything in any of the chapters you are reading.

(Location-Team Angeles team base)
Last line before the bell:

Do you actually have a bell? Because I wouldnít put it past you, author.

The team is now in the line of dangerous fire as they run inside the convention center. The team makes it inside, only to find that Darkrai teleported inside with them. Darkrai unleashes a Shadow Ball attack that is 30 feet wide and 59 feet tall. The attack hits the team hard.

Oh my gosh, is the convention center okay?

Everyone fainted, except for Yuneri the Snivy and Darkrai. Yuneri knows that she is not safe from Darkrai. Yuneri tries to run, but an unknown force stops her (hint: It is not Azelf). Darkrai attacks Yuneri with Shadow Ball. Yuneri was for sure to be hit, until Francis the Buizel revives and takes the attack (Romance Magic!).

Certain people would probably call it misogyny, but to each their own.

Yuneri taught she was done for, until her lover came to save her (Francis the Buizel faints for taking the attack).

(Current situation)

Yuneri the Snivy is currently battling Darkrai alone (The rest of team Angeles was unconscious and unable to battle). Darkrai starts laughing his head off.

Trust me, Darkrai, this gets less funny every time you see it. And Iíve seen it a lot.

"HAHA! You think your friend will remember ya now? Well, think again! I erasedÖ" Darkrai said until Yuneri interrupted him

"None of his memories" Yuneri said as she launched a Leaf Blade attack.

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Is Yuneri just cocksure or is Darkrai really such an impotent antagonist, that he has to lie about his villainous achievements?

Yuneri runs toward Darkrai. As she runs, she jumps up, and extends her blue tail like a blade to strike Darkrai. Darkrai took 30 points of Damage. Darkrai gets mad.

"You think you are so tough, why not try this attack that will "put you to sleep" for 20 minutes" Darkrai said as he used a move all too familiar to team Angeles.

We traded out Gengar the pokť-murderer for this?

"Stare Dare!" Darkrai yelled as he stared into Yuneri's eyes. Yuneri fights the stare. Darkrai was sure to attack Yuneri, until Suyapa the Pikachu appeared on the monitor in the Convention center. Darkrai cannot believe where Suyapa is at.

Neither can I, since I assumed she was unconscious at this point. If she woke up, why wouldnít she just join the fight?

(Darkrai's castle- transmission room)

Suyapa the Pikachu is now about to do a transmission.

"Darkrai! You have hurt my best friend for far too long! Don't you dare put your hands on Yuneri, because if you do, we will find you and we have a secret pokemon that can destroy you!" Suyapa yelled in the transmission

I canít tell if this is an actual desperate lie, or if the author is setting up for his next asspull.

(Convention Center)

Darkrai did not care if he touched Yuneri. He wanted to avenge Gengar by taking out one member of team Angeles.

Fucking finally, some actual motivation for the villain. Which is revenge for defeat of the previous villain, whose motivation is still unaccounted for. Still missing that first domino push, but itís something, I guess.

Darkrai wants take out Yuneri and Francis the Snivy. Darkrai does his magic.

"StareÖDare!" Darkrai yelled

If you have to voice your attacks, how about speaking softly enough so your opponent canít hear you? Does the number of decibels increase its effect or something?

Darkrai stares into Yuneri's eyes again. Yuneri fell for the attack. Darkrai was about to control Yuneri's body, until the unexpected happened.

"Yuneri, NOOOO!" a voice yelled

The unknown voce got closer. When the attack ended, Darkrai did not strike at Yuneri, he struck at Francis the Azelf. Yuneri was very thankful for this event.

"Thank you sir" Yuneri said

"No problem my new friend" Francis the Azelf said

Author, if weíve seen the character before, then the voice isnít unknown to us. Also, how could these two not have met each other yet?

"Francis the Snivy is in danger!" Yuneri said

When isnít he?

"We will bring Darkrai to his castle to face the one who he hurt the most. I shall do my own version of Stare Dare" Francis the Azelf said

Francis the Azelf does his magic by putting his two tails on his head. His jewel lights up red as Darkrai stares at him and falls for the Azelf's spell. Francis the Azelf then controls Darkrai's body, and tells him the following:

"You dare touched my brother Francis the Snivy. You dared to touch beautiful Yuneri the Snivy over here. You dared to touch me.

How Stare Dare he?!

Well I tell what, you shall face the one you hurt the most, and if you lose to him, I shall drain all your willpower, until you are an empty shell! I shall even ask Francis the Uxie to erase your memories as well, since you wanted to erase Francis the Snivy's memories to get revenge for Gengar!"

You mean the whole thing about Francis facing off against Darkrai alone is now being endorsed by his friends? Please tell me they at least hamstring the villain before they throw them both into the gladiatorial pit.

Yuneri is enjoying what Francis the Azelf said.

(Darkrai's castle)

Suyapa is about to free Francis the Snivy from getting his memories erased. Suyapa deactivates the machine, and unlocks the cage to free Francis the Snivy. What was about to happen next, was a big surprise.

So it probably doesnít make a lick of sense.

"Francis, ya alright?" Suyapa asked

"Yes, I am" Francis the Snivy said

" Do you remember me?" Suyapa asked

To be fair, more than half the shit Suyapa does in this story is when Francis is unconscious or elsewhere; she should probably ask this even without the amnesia threat.

"I believe your name isÖ..umÖ.Suyapa" Francis the Snivy said before he fainted from the pain that Darkrai gave him

(Flashback from chapter 40)

As Darkrai turned off the transmission, he grabs Francis the Snivy by the legs. Darkrai uses Sky Attack on Francis. Darkrai flies upward while holding on to Francis. Darkrai slams Francis on the floor making him faint, but the pain is far from overÖ

(Flashback ends)


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Seriously? A flashback just in case weíve forgotten what happened to Francis? Did you really need your masochism fix that badly while the villain was restrained?

Suyapa then kisses Francis the Snivy while he is unconscious.

One of these days youíve got to ask for consent, Suyapa.

Blacksterops1025: Tomorrow, the five day battle!

Sounds dope. As in sleep inducing as if by narcotics. Letís go on to the next chapter and cure our collective insomnia.


Chapter 45: Team Angeles Encounters Darkrai

Bitch, I thought you had him secured!

Blacksterops1025: Welcome to chapter 45 of the story. In this chapter, we have the first of six days of Team Angeles VS Darkrai. We also have Yuneri the Snivy fainting.

For those freaks who are into that?

Why you ask?

Yes, I do. Because your fetishes are continuing to worry me.

Stay tuned. Here we go and without further delayÖ.

Team Angeles: Blacksterops1025 does not own anything

(Location- Convention Center)

Francis the Azelf has just told Darkrai to face Francis the Snivy one on one. Darkrai gives up and agrees to the conditions.

Why wouldnít he? You might as well have taken Red Skull captive and told him to go one-on-one with pre-super serum Steve Rogers.

Yuneri the Snivy gets ready to see the battle of her life. Darkrai had a message for anyone who messed with him.

"You think you are going to watch your friend win? Well, think again!" Darkrai yelled as he pressed a button.

As Darkrai pressed a button, a door opened on top of Yuneri the Snivy, and dropped a rope. Once Yuneri touched the rope, the ropes tie her up, and made sure that she won't escape. Darkrai pressed another button that allowed an unknown force to drain energy from Yuneri.

Well, to be fair, this will definitely prevent Yuneri from watching the battle. Where is Francis the Azelf and why isnít he preventing this?

Darkrai made escape impossible by pressing another button that can make the ropes squeeze Yuneri, until she faints. Yuneri tries using Leaf Blade, but her tail was too tired up to do anything. As soon as Yuneri fainted, Darkrai does something to her that will motivate Francis the Snivy to win.

Sorry, but Francis is going to need a lot more than just motivation.

"Stare Dare!" Darkrai yelled

Darkrai stares at Yuneri's unconscious body while making sure that no one will block the way. Darkrai tries to control Yuneri's body, but, Darkrai gets distracted when a Water Gun attack is fired at him.

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"Ya better not mess with my girl yo" Francis the Buizel said as he revived

"I will injure her!" Darkrai yelled as he launched a Shadow Ball attack at Yuneri

"Not if you can get through me first" Francis the Buizel yelled as he blocked the attack

" You really think you can save Yuneri? Think again!' Darkrai yelled as he pressed a button

Where the fuck do these buttons keep coming from?

Darkrai touches Yuneri's body, and drains all the life energy out of her. Darkrai's attack, and (of course) life points have doubled from 200 points of attack to 400 points of attack, and his life points are doubled from 600 points to 1,200 points. Francis the Buizel is now in danger of fainting in one hit.

Now, and any time up to this point, yes.

"I must avenge her" Francis the Buizel said

"You shall not do that!" Darkrai yelled as he opens a door that drops rocks on Francis the Buizel.

WHERE ARE WE?!

Darkrai sees Francis the Buizel running for cover. He grabs Francis the Buizel and holds him, until a rock hits Francis the Buizel. Francis the Buizel faints, and you know what happens next( Darkrai's attack goes from 400 to 800, and his life points goes from 1,200 to 2,400)

So, is this the soul stealing attack, or is it something different? Do we even care at this point?

(Location- Darkrai's castle)

Francis the Snivy and Suyapa are watching the transmission from the room. Francis the Snivy knows that this battle won't be an easy one by any means.

Then why donít you get some help? Donít tell me youíre still going to do this mano e mano.

So, what is going to happen to team Angeles? What are the rules for this battle? Will Francis the Mesprit appear? Find out starting next week on "Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: The Mystery of Francis the Snivy"

Iíd rather find out in the obituaries, honestly.

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It never ceases to amaze me, just how many times this author contorts his story just to keep the conflict going. Then again, if its picking between horrible action scenes and the awkward, infantile romance subplots, Iíd be hard pressed to choose.


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post Jan 28 2017, 04:29 PM
I guess I canít escape getting back to this mock. Itís been a while, and Iíve been rather busy this past month. But I still remember where we left off, and even if I didnít, the author is obnoxious enough to remind us at the start of every chapter. Enjoy.

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Chapter 46: Francis VS Darkrai 1 Part 1 of 3

Blacksterops1025: Welcome to chapter 46 of the story. In this chapter, Francis the Snivy has the first chance to face Darkrai.

Had I known to keep count, I might have wanted to dispute this. Forty-six chapters in I just canít be bothered.

Will Francis the Snivy be able to defeat Darkrai? Find out next here on

" Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: The Mystery of Francis"

Team Angeles: Blacksterops1025 does not own anything!

Last line before the bell:

Which is totally necessary to include. I mean, remembering stuff or going back to the previous chapter is just so hard to do.

"I must avenge her" Francis the Buizel said

"You shall not do that!" Darkrai yelled as he opens a door that drops rocks on Francis the Buizel.

Darkrai is a merciless Dungeon Master, but Iíd still play with him.

Darkrai sees Francis the Buizel running for cover. He grabs Francis the Buizel and holds him, until a rock hits Francis the Buizel. Francis the Buizel faints, and you know what happens next( Darkrai's attack goes from 400 to 800, and his life points goes from 1,200 to 2,400)

(Current Situation- Location- Darkrai's castle)

Current situation is Ďfuckedí, but thatís always a given.

Suyapa and Francis the Snivy are waiting for Darkrai to face Francis the Snivy in a battle that will determine the path of this story. The duo are urging Darkrai to hurry.

ďWill you stop mangling Francis the Buizel already? Weíre on a tight schedule here!Ē

(Los Angeles to East L.A Train Station)

Team Angeles is now at the train station ready to head to Darkrai's castle to face Darkrai as a team. What the team doesn't know is that the battle is already starting, and what is more is that Darkrai is already attacking Francis the Snivy (Darkrai teleports to his castle)

(Location- Darkrai's castle- Battle in effect)

I remember a time when stories actually had a point in scene changes. It all seems so far away now.

Current Leader: Darkrai (20 points)

Referee: None

Current Life Points

Francis the Snivy: 9,980

Darkrai: 10,000

How come weíre up at ten thousand when Darkrai draining Francis the Buizel put him at a quarter of that?

(Battle Mode)

Possession: Francis the Snivy

Suyapa is now watching the match inside a cage that Darkrai trapped her in.

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Francis uses Leaf Blade

Francis the Snivy runs forward toward Darkrai. Francis jumps up and extends his tail like a blade. Darkrai grabs Francis's tail, and uses Shadow Ball. Francis gets hit, and takes 100 life point damage.

Darkrai: 10,000 (Darkrai is on a 120 to 0 point run)

Yes, author, we can do the math. We just donít care about it.

Francis: 9,880

Darkrai uses Shadow Ball

Darkrai forms a ball with his paws. He then launches the ball at Francis. Francis dodges that, and counters with Leaf Blade. Francis strikes Darkrai and deals 40 life point damage to stop Darkrai's scoring run.

Darkrai: 9,960

Francis: 9,880

Unless something new happens, weíre going to be here for a while.

Francis uses Magical Leaf

Francis jumps up in the air to spawn leaves in different colors. He sends them straight at Darkrai. Darkrai takes 100 damage, and Francis takes the lead, and has a 140 point scoring run.

Francis: 9,880 (140 point scoring run, first lead of the battle)

Darkrai: 9,860

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Darkrai uses Curse

Darkrai casts a curse on himself, and Francis. He infects Francis with the curse by injecting him with a needle. Francis is cursed, and takes 500 life point damage each turn (except for the next possession)

Suyapa is now worried about Francis the Snivy

I canít quite decide, if thatís too late or too early for this battle.

Francis uses Leaf Blade

Francis runs forward and strikes Darkrai, and deals 300 points of damage.

Francis: 9,880 (Affected by curse, scoring run ends)

Darkrai: 9,560

Darkrai uses Shadow Ball

Darkrai forms a ball, but Francis runs toward Darkrai, and knocks the ball into Darkrai. Darkrai takes 500 points of damage.

Oh, I see. The moment there isnít a referee around then the dirty tricks come out.

Francis: 9,480 (Curse effect equals 500 life point damage, lost the lead)

Darkrai: 9,560 (Gains the lead due to curse effect)

Francis uses Magical Leaf

Francis jumps up and spawns leaves and sends them straight at Darkrai. Darkrai takes 400 points of damage

Francis: 9,480 (Gains lead for the moment)

Since you want this imaginary pendulum of nonimportance to continue swinging, sure.

Darkrai: 9,160

(Darkrai's castle- Entrance)

Team Angeles has arrived at the castle. Francis the Buizel and Yuneri the Snivy are now kissing each other, while Orion is opening the door.

Boy, he sure recovered quickly. Consequences? Lasting effects? Fuck that noise, continuity is just a vague suggestion from one chapter to the next.

Once the opened the door, they found a television showing the battle in progress. The team also spots Suyapa in a cage. The team hurries to the battle field to help Francis the Snivy, however, Darkrai is about to take the lead by a big margin, and will do something to Francis the Snivy

(Battlefield)

Darkrai uses Shadow Ball, and Stare Dare together

Innovative, but itís not quite a gunshot to the head. Gengar still has you beat, Darkrai.

Darkrai form a ball with his paws. He teleports behind Francis to force him to stare into Darkrai's eyes. Francis can't resist Darkrai's eyes. Darkrai controls Francis the Snivy's body, and his own Shadow Ball attack. Darkrai slams Francis the Snivy, and the ball into a wall (Did you know: This is considered as an offside and a red card. There was no referee).

Did you know: You can go fuck yourself.

Francis the Snivy takes 2,000 life point damage, and an additional 500 for the curse. That makes a grand life point damage total of 2,500.

Suyapa screams loud enough that team Angeles can hear her.

This is the "All caps moment":

"GET A REFEREE IN HERE! DARKRAI IS A CHEETER AND FRANCIS THE SNIVY IS INJURED!" Suyapa said

Hey, you were the ones who couldnít wait to battle Darkrai. But the moment itís not going your way, suddenly you start crying foul. Suck it up, buttercup.

"Im coming Suyapa!" Kat said

Team Angeles enters the battle field. Kat is horrified at what happened to Francis the Snivy

(Cliffhanger time)

"FRANCIS NO!..." Kat Screamed (Did you know: Suyapa leads series of cliffhanger times 2 to1. Normally, I do cliffhanger time with Suyapa)

Iíd do cliffhanger time with you, just so I could kick you off the fucking cliff.

Scores at the bell:

Darkrai: 9,160

Francis: 6,980

Blacksterops1025: Next Friday: Battle part 2

Preview: Darkrai now has a outstanding lead over Francis the Snivy. Darkrai has also injured Francis the Snivy.

No fucking shit, itís almost like getting into a fight causes injuries. How many levels of moron are we one here?

Can Francis the Snivy come back from almost 3,000 points down, or will Darkrai have darker plans for Francis the Snivy? Find out: NEXT WEEK!

I mean, you could wait a week, I suppose. But you could also just continue reading as I do the next chapter, right now.


Chapter 47: Francis VS Darkrai 1 Part 2 of 3

Blacksterops1025: Welcome to a special Thursday edition of "Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: The Mystery of Francis". Here we go, and without further delay,

Team Angeles: Blacksterops1025 does not own anything!

Last Lines before he bell:

(Battlefield)

That word alone should send images of horrors and war coursing through my mind. And yet, all it makes me elicit is incompetent, exotic-looking beanie babies, that refuse to break no matter how much theyíre stomped on.

Darkrai uses Shadow Ball, and Stare Dare together

Darkrai form a ball with his paws. He teleports behind Francis to force him to stare into Darkrai's eyes. Francis can't resist Darkrai's eyes.

I guess Francis had eyes in the back of his head, for Darkrai to pull this off.

Darkrai controls Francis the Snivy's body, and his own Shadow Ball attack. Darkrai slams Francis the Snivy, and the ball into a wall (Did you know: This is considered as an offside and a red card. There was no referee). Francis the Snivy takes 2,000 life point damage, and an additional 500 for the curse. That makes a grand life point damage total of 2,500.

But what was truly hurt was his feelings.

Suyapa screams loud enough that team Angeles can hear her.

This is the "All caps moment":

"GET A REFEREE IN HERE! DARKRAI IS A CHEETER AND FRANCIS THE SNIVY IS INJURED!" Suyapa said

This is news so old and so repetitive, that had it been chewing gum, it would have pulled out your teeth by now.

"Im coming Suyapa!" Kat said

Team Angeles enters the battle field. Kat is horrified at what happened to Francis the Snivy

(Cliffhanger time)

"FRANCIS NO!..." Kat Screamed (Did you know: Kat leads series of cliffhanger times 1 to 0? Normally, I do cliffhanger time with Suyapa)

(Battlefield- Current situation)

Scores:

Darkrai: 9,160

Francis: 6,980

Possession: Francis the Snivy

Better call an exorcist, we have a bad case of sports terms the author clearly doesnít understand.

Francis the Snivy uses Leaf Blade

Francis runs forward toward Darkrai and jumps up. Darkrai see's Francis coming, and counters with Shadow Ball. Francis uses his tail to send the attack back, and attack with Leaf Blade for 700 life point damage.

Because attacks always do rounded up damage, it makes it so much easier to punch into your calculator.

Darkrai: 8,460

Francis: 6,980

Darkrai uses Shadow Ball

Darkrai forms a purple ball with his paws, and launches it toward Francis. Francis uses his tail to send it back to score. Darkrai takes 500 life point damage.

Because the move was so nice, the author abused it twice. How creatively bankrupt can you get?

Darkrai: 7,960

Francis: 6,480 (Curse effect, 700 to 0 point run)

Francis uses Absorb

Francis runs forward and gets ready to bite Darkrai. Darkrai attacks Francis with Shadow Ball, but Francis uses his tail to send the attack back, and bites Darkrai to drain the life out of him. Darkrai takes 400 life point damage from Shadow Ball, and 1,000 LP damage from Absorb. Absorb gives life points to Francis (700)

Again with the tail tennis moves. I think youíre a fan of the wrong sport, author.

Francis: 6,980 (1,400 to 0 point run, takes lead for the moment)

Darkrai: 6,560 (Loses a big lead)

Darkrai uses Yawn

Oh, sorry, I didnít know I had been attacking my laptop screen for the past ten minutes.

Darkrai is trying to make Francis fall asleep, but Francis fights it, and strikes Darkrai with Leaf Blade. Darkrai takes 500 Life point damage

Francis: 6,480 (curse effect, still has lead)

Darkrai: 6,060

Francis uses Magical Leaf

The amount of weed jokes I could have made; all gone up in smoke. Donít worry, Iíll stop.

Francis jumps up in the air and spawns leaves of different colors. He sends the leaves straight to Darkrai. Darkrai takes 400 Life point damage

Francis: 6,480

Darkrai: 5,560

Darkrai is now breathing hard.

I wouldnít doubt that an asthma attack could finish this battle quicker.

Team Angeles is cheering Francis the Snivy on.

Oh, right, those guys are here now. And theyíre doing nothing. So nice of them to show up.

Darkrai uses Shadow Ball

Darkrai forms a purple ball and sends it straight to Francis. Francis dodges the move, but Darkrai does "magic" to attack Francis from behind. Kat calls the attack offside.

"We have an offside on Darkrai. The attack will count as 200 life point damage, instead of 400" Kat announced

Sure, just go right over to Francis as patch back on whatever pieces of him that were shaved off. How stupid do you have to be, to think that simply saying so will reduce the effect of an attack that has already hit?

Francis: 5,880 (Curse effect)

Darkrai: 5,560

Francis uses Leaf Blade

Francis runs forward to strike Darkrai, but Darkrai goes into the Shadows. Darkrai reappears behind Francis. Francis turns around and gets hit by Night Shade. Darkrai's attack is not over as he grabs Francis by his tail, and swings him toward a wall. Darkrai continues to attack Francis, until after 5 minutes, Kat calls the attack offside.

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Five minutes is a fucking long time to be dashing someone against a wall. Did she only call offside because the wall was starting to break?

"We have an offside on Darkrai. The attack will count as 5,000 life point damage, instead of 10,000" Kat announced

As the call was made, team Angeles became hot (mad) arguing with Kats call. Team Angeles wanted offside, and a technical on Darkrai.

And Iím sure Francis wants all his teeth back, but we canít all get what we want.

Darkrai: 5,560 (Gains the biggest lead in the game)

Francis: 880

Team Angeles see's Francis the Snivy barley able to stand up after the hits. The team wants Darkrai banned from the battle.

I swear, if this battle ends through Francisí friends whining, AGAIN, I will fucking lose my shit.

(Cliffhanger time series- Suyapa VS Kat)

"FRANCIS NOOO!..." Suyapa yelled (Suyapa ties series at 1 to 1)

(There is still 1 more player to yell- Sorry!)

"FRANCIS NOOO!.." Yuneri the Snivy yelled (Yuneri gets a point for the Cliffhanger series)

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Iím watching a ball of madness rolling downhill, and all it does is pick up more bullshit as it goes. When does this cornucopia of idiocy stop?

Blacksterops1025: We have part 3 of the battle on Saturday. We also have chapter 2 of "Francis the Snivy's Abused Life" on Saturday.

As much as Iíd want to stop here, Iíll take another chapter right away. Procrastinating only means prolonging the pain.


Chapter 48: Francis VS Darkrai 1 Part 3 of 3

Blacksterops1025: Welcome to chapter 48 of this story. Here we go, and without further delay..

Team Angeles: Blacksterops1025 does not own anything

Last lines before the bell:

Last lines? Thereís more than two hundred words copied in here! Have some goddamn restraint.

Darkrai uses Shadow Ball

Darkrai forms a purple ball and sends it straight to Francis. Francis dodges the move, but Darkrai does "magic" to attack Francis from behind. Kat calls the attack offside.

Having Darkrai use ďmagicĒ is just an excuse to beat him over the head with illogical, contrived sports rules that have no place in any reality.

"We have an offside on Darkrai. The attack will count as 200 life point damage, instead of 400" Kat announced

Francis: 5,880 (Curse effect)

Darkrai: 5,560

Francis uses Leaf Blade

Francis runs forward to strike Darkrai, but Darkrai goes into the Shadows. Darkrai reappears behind Francis. Francis turns around and gets hit by Night Shade. Darkrai's attack is not over as he grabs Francis by his tail, and swings him toward a wall. Darkrai continues to attack Francis, until after 5 minutes, Kat calls the attack offside.

Thatís three hundred seconds where everyone just stood there and watched. Three hundred seconds, where blood must have been running down the wall, where chipped teeth and far-flung tears must have struck the onlookers foreheads like gentle hail. Three hundred fucking seconds of pain, and the author is relishing every masochistic moment of it Ė every imagined blow, every squelch of flesh, every crunch of bone. Are you starting to get my point?

"We have an offside on Darkrai. The attack will count as 5,000 life point damage, instead of 10,000" Kat announced

As the call was made, team Angeles became hot (mad) arguing with Kats call. Team Angeles wanted offside, and a technical on Darkrai.

Darkrai: 5,560 (Gains the biggest lead in the game)

Francis: 880

Team Angeles see's Francis the Snivy barley able to stand up after the hits. The team wants Darkrai banned from the battle.

Technically, they are invading Darkraiís home right now. I think I know which side the inexistent law would be on.

(Cliffhanger time series- Suyapa VS Kat)

"FRANCIS NOOO!..." Suyapa yelled (Suyapa ties series at 1 to 1)

(There is still 1 more player to yell- Sorry!)

"FRANCIS NOOO!.." Yuneri the Snivy yelled (Yuneri gets a point for the Cliffhanger series)

Heís still standing, shut up already.

(Current Situation)

Scores:

Darkrai: 5,560

Francis: 880

Possession: Francis the Snivy

Francis the Snivy is barely able to stand up after the 5 minute of attacks he endured. Darkrai laughed at his efforts.

"HAHAHAHA, you think you can stand up after those 5 minutes? Give me a break!" Darkrai yelled

The fact that the author wants to rub it in afterwards only makes his complex more obvious.

Francis continues the battle by using Leaf Blade

Francis runs forward and jumps up. He extends his tail like a blade. He strikes Darkrai, but Darkrai grabs Francis the Snivy's tail, and uses Life Drain on Francis. Francis see's the move coming, and jumps in time. Francis counters with Absorb, and drains 500 life points out of Darkrai

Darkrai: 4,560

I think you might be doing your math wrong, or thereís something youíre not telling us, author. But if it will finish this battle quicker, please keep sucking.

Francis: 1,380 (Out of the danger zone)

Darkrai uses Shadow Ball

Darkrai forms a ball with his paws, but Francis runs forward , and knocks the ball out of the play area with his tail. Francis counters with another Absorb attack, and drains 500 more life points out of Darkrai.

Darkrai: 3,560

Francis: 1,380 (No change due to curse effect, 1,000 to 0 point run)

In certain circles, being short of a grand will get you stabbed, author. Maybe you want to double check your math from now on.

Francis uses Magical Leaf

Francis jumps up, and spawns leaves of different colors. He sends the leaves straight to Darkrai. Darkrai gets hit with 1,000 life point damage.

Darkrai: 2,560

Francis: 1,380 (2,000 to 0 point run)

Darkrai uses Life Drain

Darkrai runs toward Francis, and throws a life-draining needle, but Francis dodges the attack, and counters with Absorb, and drains 700 life point damage, and is close to taking the lead.

Darkrai: 1, 160

Francis: 0, 880(Curse effect, 3,400 to 0 point run)

Maybe you should lay off the numbers for a while, author.

Francis can take the lead, and make a big comeback.

Francis uses Leaf Blade

Francis runs forward, and jumps up. He extends his tail like a blade. He strikes Darkrai. Francis deals 700 life point damage, and makes a historic comeback.

Which was only made possible because a few words from Kat somehow prevented Francisí skull from being caved in, after itís prolonged on-and-off relationship with the wall.

Francis: 880 (4,100 to 0 point run to make a big comeback)

Darkrai: 460 (Loses a big lead for the second time)

Darkrai uses Shadow Ball

Darkrai forms a ball with his paws, but Francis runs toward Darkrai, and knocks the ball out of the play area. Francis counters with Absorb, and drains 100 life point damage.

Francis: 380 (Curse effect, 4,300 to 0 point run)

Darkrai: 260

Whatever you do later in life, author, donít go into accounting. Just saying.

Darkrai gets mad. Darkrai goes after Francis the Snivy. He grabs Francis by his legs, and whirls him toward a wall. Darkrai attacks Francis with Shadow ball. Darkrai's attack hits, but he continues to attack Francis with Shadow Ball, until Kat called it offsides.

"We have an offside on Darkrai. The attack is no longer counted" Kat announced

Pray tell, does her words also fix the wall and clean up the blood?

Francis is barley able to stand after the attack. He tries to stay conscious, but Darkrai uses Shadow Ball to make Francis faint. Kat calls Darkrai offside.

"We have an offside on Darkrai. Darkrai gets a yellow card for his series of attacks. As far as this result is concerned, Francis the Snivy is still in the game with 380 life points!" Kat announced

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Oh sure, he can totally fight. I mean, the guy is only out cold, probably slowly dying from internal injuries, comatose, half his face is likely missing, oh and did I mention heís fucking unconscious?!

(Cliffhanger Series time- Kat VS Suyapa)

"FRANCIS NOOO!..." Kat yelled out (Kat leads Cliffhanger series 2 to 1)

How genuine can this be, when she just insisted that the sleeping sack of sores is staying in the fight?

Blacksterops1025: The next chapter for this story is tomorrow, and the 2nd chapter of "Francis the Snivy's Abused Life" is latter tonight"

Late Breaking News: Chelsea has just won the UEFA Champions league!

A celebration that is now five years overdue. Oh how happy I am, that you put it in you shitty, incompetent, and pitiful piece of masochistic fluff fiction.

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This story is a pain. The convoluted madness that guided the authorís writing is ripe for psychological study, and the continued masochistic reveling of the protagonistís pain is both concerning and disgusting. And we still have quite a way to go.


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post Feb 6 2017, 05:19 AM
Here comes some more of this authorís self-aimed torture porn. Last times, Francis had Darkrai on the ropes while simultaneously dangling from them himself. Weíre building towards yet another painfully boring and contrived finish, so letís get it over with. Enjoy.

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Chapter 49: Francis Wins? New Darkrai?

Blacksterops1025: Welcome to a surprise Chapter 49 of "Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: The Mystery of Francis".

Yes, after 48 comes 49, what a surprise.

In this chapter, Kat gives Francis the Snivy life to continue in the battle with Darkrai.

Whoever heard of an impartial referee, am I right?

Francis the Snivy defeats Darkrai, butÖ..

Team Angeles: Blacksterops1025 does not own anything!

Last lines before the bell:

Francis uses Leaf Blade

Francis runs forward, and jumps up. He extends his tail like a blade. He strikes Darkrai.

Francis deals 700 life point damage, and makes a historic comeback.

The only thing historic about it is that itís in the past. Stop padding every chapter with this shit.

Francis: 880 (4,100 to 0 point run to make a big comeback)

Darkrai: 460 (Loses a big lead for the second time)

Darkrai uses Shadow Ball

Darkrai forms a ball with his paws, but Francis runs toward Darkrai, and knocks the ball out of the play area.

It disappeared into the aether, along with the rest of Francisí team.

Francis counters with Absorb, and drains 100 life point damage.

Francis: 380 (Curse effect, 4,300 to 0 point run)

Darkrai: 260

Darkrai gets mad. Darkrai goes after Francis the Snivy.

Because he had so many options to choose from, you see.

He grabs Francis by his legs, and whirls him toward a wall. Darkrai attacks Francis with Shadow ball. Darkrai's attack hits, but he continues to attack Francis with Shadow Ball, until Kat called it offside.

"We have an offside on Darkrai. The attack is no longer counted" Kat announced

In how many ways have this author used ďoffsideĒ as a term for whatever the fuck he wants to penalize?

Francis is barley able to stand after the attack. He tries to stay conscious, but Darkrai uses Shadow Ball to make Francis faint. Kat calls Darkrai offside.

"We have an offside on Darkrai. Darkrai gets a yellow card for his series of attacks. As far as this result is concerned, Francis the Snivy is still in the game with 380 life points!" Kat announced

(Cliffhanger Series time- Kat VS Suyapa)

"FRANCIS NOOO!..." Kat yelled out (Kat leads Cliffhanger series 2 to 1)

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(Current Situation)

Team Angeles has just witnessed an attack on Francis the Snivy by Darkrai. The team was happy that Kat called the attack by Darkrai offside, and gave Darkrai an technical foul. Kat gives 380 life points to Francis the Snivy to let him battle Darkrai.

"Arceus, help me lend some of my life points to a friend of mine in need" Kat chanted

A green light shines on Francis the Snivy, and fills Francis the Snivy with power. He gains 380 life points.

Huh, I guess Kat is a cleric of Arceus. Who would have thought? What the fuck am I reading?

Darkrai was upset.

"What?" Darkrai yelled

"That's right Darkrai. Da evil never wins" Francis the Buizel said

Because good guys exploit technicalities of rules, which bad guys donít even follow.

"You want to faint too, Buizel?" Darkrai asked Francis the Buizel in a evil way

"How bout you faint first" Francis the Buizel said

Darkrai goes into the Shadows. Francis the Buizel is scared about what is about to happen.

Typical. The moment that Francis is both unconscious and still counted as an active participant in battle, of course the villain will find someone else to torment.

Darkrai appears behind Francis the Buizel, and tries to attack him, but Francis the Buizel's girl stops the attack by taking it.

"YUNERI!" Team Angeles yelled

"Who is this "Yuneri" huh?" Darkrai asks in an evil way

"He is my special romantic friend" Francis the Buizel said

Gender confusion aside, I preferred it when you used the term Ďloverí, author. ĎSpecial romantic friendí is how a single father would describe the prostitute he sees once a week to his kids.

"How about I do this to your special friend" Darkrai said as he fired a Shadow Ball attack toward the unconscious Yuneri the Snivy. Francis the Snivy uses his tail to send the attack back. He has done the impossible.

Francis: 380 (Huge run to win the battle)

Darkrai: 0

Oh boy, I wonder how long this is going to last. Iíll give it three sentences, tops.

"Darkrai is unable to battle. Francis the Snivy wins. Francis the Snivy makes history after coming back from 5,000 points down to win" Kat announced

Darkrai then floated into the air while saying words that changes this story.

"You think you have won? Say hello to my twin brother, and say goodbye to your memories" Darkrai said as he disappeared

I knew it. We must always Ė and I do mean always Ė have conflict. But what the hell is this twin brother bullshit Darkrai is pulling?

"I bet Darkrai's twin is harder" Suyapa said

"Did you hear the part about erasing Francis the Snivy's memories?" Kat asked the team

"Oh boy! This is going to be hard!" Team Angeles yelled

Somehow not the words of the author, when he decided to stretch the plot out for another fifteen chapters beyond this.

The team then notices a shadow appearing on the floor. The shadow appears to be a 8 pawed Darkrai. The team also noticed a capsule with a Uxie (not Francis the Uxie) inside. The team then see's one pokemon coming from behind the Darkrai. The pokemon used Water Gun on Darkrai. The attack hits Darkrai. The pokemon then joins Orion the Arcanine.

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The author is getting creative, and itís scaring me. Because that means all bets are off.

"What's up Orion?" The pokemon asked

"Mizu, it's been a long time since I have seen you" Orion said

"Me too" Mizu said

Iím tempted to say the author outright forgot that Mizu existed. It usually doesnít take him long to bring back characters from his previous stories.

The Darkrai then yanks Francis the Snivy away from the team. The Darkrai then attacks Francis the Snivy with an unknown move. A single hit of the attack made Francis the Snivy faint on the spot.

If I had a penny for every time this has happened, Iíd put them in a sock and beat the authorís head in with it. My idiom might have slipped a bit, but you get my point.

(Cliffhanger Series time- Suyapa VS Kat)

"FRANCIS NOOO!.. Kat yelled (Kat leads series 3-1)

Blacksterops1025: The battle continues tomorrow!

No, it continues now. Hereís another chapter for you all.


Chapter 50: Francis the Snivy in Trouble!

Blacksterops1025: Welcome to chapter 50 of the story. Here we go, and without further delayÖ

Team Angeles: Blacksterops1025 does not own anything!

Last lines before the bell:

In other words, the delay the author said the story was without.

"Darkrai is unable to battle. Francis the Snivy wins. Francis the Snivy makes history after coming back from 5,000 points down to win" Kat announced

Darkrai then floated into the air while saying words that changes this story.

I guess if Francis can be unconscious and still be in the battle, so can Darkrai.

"You think you have won? Say hello to my twin brother, and say goodbye to your memories" Darkrai said as he disappeared

"I bet Darkrai's twin is harder" Suyapa said

"Did you hear the part about erasing Francis the Snivy's memories?" Kat asked the team

Because we should still be fearful of this happening, somehow, for some reason, even when he has amnesia.

"Oh boy! This is going to be hard!" Team Angeles yelled

The team then notices a shadow appearing on the floor. The shadow appears to be a 8 pawed Darkrai. The team also noticed a capsule with a Uxie (not Francis the Uxie) inside.

Iím not going to rule out the possibility that itís still named Francis, though.

The team then see's one pokemon coming from behind the Darkrai. The pokemon used Water Gun on Darkrai. The attack hits Darkrai. The pokemon then joins Orion the Arcanine.

"What's up Orion?" The pokemon asked

"Mizu, it's been a long time since I have seen you" Orion said

"Me too" Mizu said

ďIíve been searching for a mirror for ages.Ē

The Darkrai then yanks Francis the Snivy away from the team. The Darkrai then attacks Francis the Snivy with an unknown move. A single hit of the attack made Francis the Snivy faint on the spot.

(Cliffhanger Series time- Suyapa VS Kat)

"FRANCIS NOOO!.. Kat yelled (Kat leads series 3-1)

Of all the things to be competitive about. What does the author even think this accomplishes?

(Current situation)

Team Angeles has just witnessed Darktwo attacking Francis the Snivy with an unknown move.

Darkraiís twin brother is named Darktwo? And here I was afraid youíd try to be original, author.

The move made Francis the Snivy faint on the spot. The team wants to fight Darktwo 11 on 1. Kat allows the match, and revives Francis the Snivy. Kat also adds new rules.

"I have some new rules to announce. We now have power plays, which are 1 minute advantages for the team or player that is losing" Kat said

Way to show your confidence in your team, Kat.

Team Angeles agrees to the rules that Kat mentioned. Darktwo is laughing at Kat.

"HAHHAHA! Kat, so you think you can be the referee? Say hello to my little friend" Darktwo said as a Darkrai like figure appeared behind Kat. The figure grabs Kat and attacks her with an unknown move to make her faint .

For all we know, itís a rag soaked in chloroform; just give the move a fucking name.

"KAT NOOOO!" Team Angeles yelled

Team Angeles is eager to defeat Darktwo.

(ITS LINE UP TIME) ALL PLAYERS EXECPT FOR DARKTWO STARTS WITH 40,000 life points

Thatís four times what the last battle started with, what the fuck is going on here?!

Team Angeles

Starting 5

Francis the Snivy

Orion the Arcanine

Francis the Buizel

Francis the Axew

Midnight the Purloin

Author, I may not care a whole lot for your stories, but I do pay attention when it comes to the names in them. Who the fuck is Midnight!?

Subs

Mizu the Buizel

Francis the Serperior

Kavi the Servine

Tory the Ninetales

Rouge the Bat

Francis the Azelf

(Battle Begins)

Life Point totals (Starting 5)

Francis the Snivy: 40,000

Orion the Arcanine: 40,000

Francis the Buizel: 40,000

Francis the Axew: 40,000

Midnight the Purloin: 40,000

Opponent ( Darktwo): 500,000

Itís like the author just enrolled in a new math class, and heís so excited to show off how many zeroes you can fit behind a single digit.

Possession: Team Angeles (Francis the Snivy)

Francis the Snivy uses Leaf Blade

Francis the Snivy runs forward. He jumps up and extends his tail like a blade. He strikes Darktwo for 500 life point damage.

Darktwo: 499,500

Another damage sponge fight. How long can the author drag this one out?

Orion uses Flamethrower

Orion opens his mouth and aims for Darktwo. Orion misses the attack. Darktwo counters with Shadow Ball on Orion, but Francis the Snivy uses his tail to send the attack back. Darktwo takes 500 more life point damage.

Darktwo: 499,000

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These dingbats had better start doing some damage, because I donít want to fucking die waiting for Darktwo to take one thousand paper-cut sized attacks.

Team Angeles( Francis the Snivy): 40,000 (1save, 1,000 point run start)

Francis the Axew uses Dragon Rage

Francis the Axew opens his mouth and spawns a blue flame. He shoots it at Darktwo. Darktwo takes 2,000 life point damage.

Darktwo: 497,000

Better. Now I might be out of here in time for my pension to kick in.

Team Angeles (Francis the Axew): 40,000 (Scoring Leader at 2,000 points of delt damage)

Midnight uses Shadow Ball

Midnight forms a ball with his paws, and aims for Darktwo. Darktwo takes the hit, and 3,000 life point damage

Darktwo: 494,000

Team Angeles (Midnight): 40,000( New scoring leader at 3,000 points, previous leader (Francis the Axew) at 2,000 points))

Numbers, numbers, numbers! Thatís what the cool kids are into now, right?!

Darktwo uses Life Drain

Darktwo runs toward Francis the Snivy. Francis the Snivy dodges the move, and counters with Absorb and deals 1,400 life point damage.

Darktwo: 492,600

Team Angeles (Francis the Snivy):40,000(1 counter, and 1 save)

So, all in all, the moment Darktwo doesnít take out people using shadow clones, he sucks. What a villain.

Scores after 1st possession

1st: Midnight: 3,000 points

2nd: Francis the Snivy: 2,400

3rd: Francis the Axew: 2,000

4th: Orion/ Francis the Buizel: 500

Team Angeles Run: 8,400 to 0 point run


Darktwo is not happy. He sends an unknown attack toward Francis the Snivy. The unknown attack weakens Francis the Snivy in a big way.

Itís called the flu.

Francis the Snivy: 40,000 to 1 life point

Francis the Snivy is feeling pain in his arm, and his right leg. He can barley stand up. Darktwo laughs at Francis the Snivy.

"HAHHAHAHAH! I can see that you can't stand up. I stole your life points with my move called Darkrai Lench Seed (A move I made up)" Darktwo said in a evil way

My god, even when you try, author, you canít make up anything original, can you?

Kat calls the move offside, but Darktwo makes Kat faint, making sure she can't win the cliffhanger time series.

Because thatís what weíre all really invested in, right?

(Cliffhanger Time)

"FRANCIS NOOO!..." Suyapa yelled (Kat still leads series 3 to 2)

Blacksterops1025: Next week: The end of part 2 of 5.

Five parts? Of this one battle?! Iím going to need a drink.

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They say thereís more than one way to skin a cat. Thereís also more than one way to write a fanfic. By now, itís pretty clear that this author is unaware of either fact, and that heíd replace the cat with a Snivy in a heartbeat. Weíre slowly moving closer to the end of this thing, but I might need a pallet cleanser soon, if the next three chapters are going to be nothing but what weíve just seen.


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post Feb 6 2017, 07:43 PM
I can only assume this world operates by FFTA logic, given the power that referees apparently have.
Where'd the author learn to write like this? The way he constantly spoils the next sentence and tries to end every chapter on a meaningless cliffhanger is just about as baffling as everything else about this fic.
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post Feb 12 2017, 11:15 AM
You're right, KingDairy, it does remind a bit of FFTA now that you mention it. However, I doubt the author has ever played the game, or it didn't have nearly enough sports in it to warrant any noticeable interest. That aside, we continue now with "Hit Point Deduction - The Fanfic", where the author thinks that lengthening a battle beyond two chapters was an appropriate decision. Enjoy.

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Chapter 51: Francis the Snivy Faints! New Attack!

FrancisTheUnconsciousSnivy101: Welcome to chapter 51 on day 1 of my new pen name!

The first of many. I wonder why the numbers were necessary at the end. Donít tell me someone already took that moniker before he did.

In this chapter, the battle with Team Angeles and Darktwo continues, and just announced, Francis the Snivy will have no memories of Francis the Buizel at the end of this battle (chapter 52 on Sunday).

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I have never in my life seen an author who squanders literary potential as much as this one; and it happens every time itís there to waste!

We also have the start of the E3 season for those of us who play videogames. I will give you my top 5 for my best games this year.

Iím not entirely convinced you play more than five, and thatís including the obligatory FIFA and Resident Evil games you keep mentioning.

Here we go, and without further delayÖ.

Team Angeles: FrancisTheUnconsciousSnivy101 does not own anything.

Alerts in the Chapter:

Francis the Snivy Faints Alert- Level 5- Francis the Snivy fainting chance at 100%

Chance of suspense Ė Fuck all! Author, why do you even think people read a story in the first place? Why do you even want to write one?

Last lines before the bell:

Darktwo uses Life Drain

Darktwo runs toward Francis the Snivy. Francis the Snivy dodges the move, and counters with Absorb and deals 1,400 life point damage.

From these two drain moves, we can conclude that Francisí sucking is superior.

Darktwo: 492,600

Team Angeles (Francis the Snivy):40,000(1 counter, and 1 save)

Scores after 1stpossession

1st: Midnight: 3,000 points

2nd: Francis the Snivy: 2,400

3rd: Francis the Axew: 2,000

4th: Orion/ Francis the Buizel: 500

Team Angeles Run: 8,400 to 0 point run


The only place this is running is into the ground.

Darktwo is not happy. He sends an unknown attack toward Francis the Snivy. The unknown attack weakens Francis the Snivy in a big way.

Francis the Snivy: 40,000 to 1 life point

Francis the Snivy is feeling pain in his arm, and his right leg. He can barely stand up.

Hold up! What is this? It didnít say Ďbarelyí in the last chapter. It said Ďbarleyí.

Did the author start using a spellchecker all of a sudden? Improvement, even as minute as this, is incredible for this author.


Darktwo laughs at Francis the Snivy.

"HAHHAHAHAHA! I can see that you can't stand up. I stole your life points with my move called Darkrai Lench Seed (A move I made up)" Darktwo said in a evil way

As if Darktwo saying it nicely would somehow confuse us towards the characterís motivation.

Kat calls the move offside, but Darktwo makes Kat faint, making sure she can't win the cliffhanger time series.

(Cliffhanger Time)

"FRANCIS NOOO!..." Suyapa yelled (Kat still leads series 3 to 2)

(Current Situation)

Updated Team Angeles Scores

*Francis the Snivy: 1

Francis the Snivy attacked with Darkrai Lench Seed

Oh my, gee, and here I thought Francisí ridiculous drop in health was due to all the other attacks that failed to hit him Ė and not this contrived, incompetently performed asspull, that reeks not only of shit but also of imagination so starved and thin, that it would lose a shadow-casting competition against half of a fucking French fry! Fucking hell I hate this author!

Orion the Arcanine: 40,000

Francis the Buizel: 40,000

Francis the Axew: 40,000

Midnight the Purloin: 40,000

There has never even been a Purloin in these stories before; this characterís sudden appearance is a damn mystery.

Opponent ( Darktwo): 500,000

Updated Team Angeles Scorers:


1st: Midnight: 3,000 points

2nd: Francis the Snivy: 2,400

3rd: Francis the Axew: 2,000

4th: Orion/ Francis the Buizel: 500

Darktwo Run: 39,999 to 0 point run

(Battle Field)

Team Angeles has just witnessed a potentially painful attack on Francis the Snivy.

Potentially painful? Thatís like saying fire might possibly be hot.

Francis the Snivy has an injured left arm, and right leg from the attack. The team also notices that Kat (the referee) is unconscious, and the team decides to put Yuneri the Snivy as a referee. Yuneri agrees to the job, and calls the last attack by Darktwo offside.

And yet Darktwo does not get penalized for attacking the former referee. Stellar rules right there.

"The last attack used by Darktwo is ruled offside, however, because the attack is a life draining move, the attack counts" Yuneri announces as Darktwo laughed at Francis the Snivy.

What, is Yuneri not a member of the Arceus faith? Is she not high enough level to perform the spell that Kat did? This is what happens when you donít have a back-up healer on the team.

"HAHAHAHA! You are down to your last life point boy!" Darktwo yelled as he launched his next attack

(Battle continues)

Team Angeles- Subs Available

What? Why?! Why are you putting this in now, weíre in the middle of a fucking fight scene!

Mizu the Buizel

Francis the Serperior

Kavi the Servine

Tory the Ninetales

Rouge the Bat

Francis the Azelf

Reminder: Darktwo has dark moves. All his "dark" moves have the word dark before the move.

Well, then I dark hope that Darktwo can dark restrain his use of dark moves, otherwise dark reading this story might dark annoy the dark hell out of me.

His attacks have a bunch of consequences, which include the following:

Poison

Attack Drop by 20

Attack drop by 60

Burned

Faint in 1 turn

Double Damage

..And more to come

In other words, whatever overpowered bullshit the author wants to use to artificially increase the tension, which he still thinks exist in this story. This is looking more and more like a Final Fantasy battle against a Malboro.

Darktwo uses Dark Shadow Ball on Francis the Snivy

Darktwo forms a ball with his paws, but the color of the ball is black, instead of purple. He launches the attack toward Francis the Snivy. Francis the Snivy uses his tail to send the attack back, and deals 3,000 life point damage to Darktwo.

Darktwo: 497,000

Could they just drop a nuke so that Darktwo can get close to half health?

Team Angeles (Francis the Snivy, 1LP)- 2 Counters, current scoring leader

Possession: Team Angeles (Francis the Snivy)

Francis the Snivy uses Leaf Blade

Francis the Snivy runs forward, and jumps up. He extends his tail like a blade, and strikes Darktwo. He deals 3,000 life point damage, which increases the point run for team Angeles

Darktwo: 494,000 LP

I mean, the sun exploding would at least put him on even keel with Francis; Iím just saying.

Team Angeles (Francis the Snivy, 1LP)- 6,000 points combined in this possession

Orion uses Agility

Orion's body starts to glow blue to signal that his speed has gone up by 0.5 percent

Orion's speed: 40 + 20= 60

If you want to be kind to your math teacher, author, buy them a red marker to replace the one theyíre going to use up.

Francis the Buizel uses Water Gun

Francis the Buizel runs forward and opens his mouth to shoot out a steam of water toward Darktwo. He hits Darktwo, and deals 3,000 LP damage

Darktwo: 491,000

Team Angeles (Francis the Buizel, 40,000 LP)- moves up in position

Are any of the other members of Team Angeles even going to be attacked? Iím getting tired of all these zeroes. The numbers too.

Francis the Axew uses Dragon Rage

Francis the Axew spawns a blue flame from his mouth, and he aims the flame at Darktwo. He strikes Darktwo with 6,000 LP damage

Darktwo: 486,000 LP

Team Angeles (Francis the Axew, 40,000 LP)- New Record for damage delt in a single possession (6,000), becomes scoring leader

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Can anyone tell me the point of this? How even the most sports-addled, pea-brained, banner-waving dipshit could give two shits about these worthless statistics and positions?! Because the sub-human entity, that blasphemous crypto-creature of an author, who penned this apparently does!

Midnight uses Shadow Claw

Midnight runs forward and gets his paws up in the air. His paws spawns claws on them. He strikes Darktwo with 5,000 LP damage

Darktwo: 481,000 LP

Team Angeles (Midnight, 40,000 LP)- 1st 5,000 or more damage given

Scoring Leaders (After second possession)

1st: Francis the Snivy: 8,400

2nd/3rd: Francis the Axew and Midnight: 8,000

4th: Francis the Buizel: 3,500

5th: Orion: 500

Team Angeles Run: 15,000 to 0 point run

Possession: Darktwo (4 times)

A little late for fair play rules to kick in, but Iíll take it.

Darktwo uses Dark Shadow Ball on Francis the Snivy

Darktwo forms a dark colored ball from his paws, and throws it to Francis the Snivy. Francis the Snivy uses his tail to send the attack back, and deals 4,000 LP damage

Darktwo: 477,000 LP

Team Angeles (Francis the Snivy, 1 LP)- New Score of 12,400, 3 counters

Darktwo uses Dark Lench Seed on Francis the Snivy

Darktwo releases a seed that tries to attract to Francis the Snivy, but Francis jumps up to avoid the attack. As a reward for dodging the move, Francis the Snivy gets 499 LP back

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How incomprehensibly inept, how brainlessly stupid, how self-absorbedly infantile must you be in order to write this kind of tripe, and not have the very pixels themselves reach out from the screen and slap the fucking face off your skull?! This is the kind of shit that makes nothing, not a solitary word, letter, nor goddamn period of this literary facsimile of a sinking Titanic carry any weight, because it all can be undone as soon as the author feels like it. Even I barely believe it, when I say this author keeps finding new ways to insult me every chapter, yet at every turn I am proven right. Fuck this fucking fuckery!

Team Angeles (Francis the Snivy, 500LP)- Awarded 499 LP as a reward

Darktwo attacks Francis the Snivy with an unknown move

Darktwo creates a copy of himself. He and his copy surround Francis the Snivy, preventing Francis the Snivy from escaping what is about to happen to him. The two Darktwo's enter Francis the Snivy's body, and attacks him from inside. The two Darktwo does also suck the blood and life out of him. The two Darktwo's exits Francis the Snivy's body, and become one. Francis the Snivy faints on impact. Yuneri calls the move offside.

At this point, what isnít offside? Outright assault? Thatís offside. Rape and murder? Offside! The Holocaust, the Hiroshima bombing, and the September 11 attacks? OFFSIDE!!!

"We have an offside, and a technical level 3 foul (read my profile for more information on the new battle rules) on Darkrai. As a result of a technical 3 foul, Darkrai has also picked up 1 flagrant. One more flagrant means a suspension!" Kat yelled

Would that I could glimpse into the convoluted logic of the author, but there are no longer any rules descriptions on his profile page. Not that it could have helped this story any.

Kat has just revived in time to see Francis the Snivy unconscious on the floor, meaning that she has the chance to yellÖ.

"FRANCIS NOOONNN!" (No in French- hint: to spell no in French, add an extra N at the end)

Iím glad Iím not a teacher, because this is the stuff that would have made me cry myself to sleep at night.

Kat yelled (Kat wins series 4 to 2, and she is the captain of the Team Angeles basketball team in part 3).

FrancisTheUnconsciousSnivy101: Here are my top 5 games this year (to play)

1st: Resident Evil: Operation Raccoon City

2nd: NBA 2K12

3rd: Resident Evil 5

4th: Mortal Kombat

5th: Little Big Planet 2

No FIFA game? Huh, color me surprised. Still a sports game on here though, and since weíre apparently getting basketball in a coming chapter, I guess we can see why the authorís sports preferences changes between stories.

Darktwo gains 1,000 LP in the beginning of Sunday's chapter.

Announcement: "Francis the Snivy's Abused Life is delayed until Monday as part of a special memorial day story update!

You want to tie one of your fanfics to a holiday dedicated to commemorating soldiers, who lost their lives in war? I donít think thereís any better way to admit a complete lack of sensibility and self-awareness.

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Thatís one more chapter down. I would have liked to do another chapter right away, but this one felt, I donít know, more straining than usual. Iíll see about finding a distraction soon, but Iíd like to at least see this pointless battle through before switching mocks.


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post Feb 18 2017, 06:25 AM
The author is serving up another portion of lunacy, and we have to eat it all up. Iíll sprinkle it with some funny for seasoning, but the crazy is still quite spicy. Enjoy.

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Chapter 52: Francis the Snivy's Memories Erased?

FrancisTheUnconsciousSnivy101: Welcome to chapter 52 of this story. In this chapter, Francis the Snivy losses his memories of Francis the Buizel (Hint: After Francis the Snivy losses his memories of Francis the Buizel, Darktwo makes Gengar regenerate).

As much as Iím dying for the story to pick back up, the return of the Pokť-murderer can only mean the author is about to hit another self-insert mutilation streak.

As far as for those who play videogames, I have my top 10 announcements I want to hear at E3 (The first 5 will be in this chapter. The next 5 will be in the next chapter, which is coming up later this afternoon.

This afternoon? Do you think people are just glued to their screens, feverishly hitting the update button, waiting and yearning for every solitary chapter like teenage girls pining for return texts from their high school crushes? These pages upon pages of recycled masochistic boredom, which you churn out like a blind novelist with diarrhea mistaking his typewriter for a toilet? Even if you donít have a life outside of your fanfics, author, you have to at least realize that other people do!

Here we go, and without further delayÖ

Team Angeles: FrancisTheUnconsciousSnivy101 does not own anything.

Last Lines before the bell:

Team Angeles Run: 15,000 to 0 point run

Possession: Darktwo (4 times)

Darktwo uses Dark Shadow Ball on Francis the Snivy

Darktwo forms a dark colored ball from his paws, and throws it to Francis the Snivy. Francis the Snivy uses his tail to send the attack back, and deals 4,000 LP damage

Come on now, even Ganondorf had the good sense to hit the ball back a couple of times before taking the hit.

Darktwo: 477,000 LP

Team Angeles (Francis the Snivy, 1 LP)- New Score of 12,400, 3 counters

Darktwo uses Dark Lench Seed on Francis the Snivy

Darktwo releases a seed that tries to attract to Francis the Snivy, but Francis jumps up to avoid the attack. As a reward for dodging the move, Francis the Snivy gets 499 LP back

How?! Just fucking how?!

Team Angeles (Francis the Snivy, 500LP)- Awarded 499 LP as a reward

Darktwo attacks Francis the Snivy with an unknown move

Darktwo creates a copy of himself. He and his copy surround Francis the Snivy, preventing Francis the Snivy from escaping what is about to happen to him. The two Darktwo's enter Francis the Snivy's body, and attacks him from inside. The two Darktwo does also suck the blood and life out of him. The two Darktwo's exits Francis the Snivy's body, and become one. Francis the Snivy faints on impact. Yuneri calls the move offside.

Yuneri should also call the coroner, because by that description Francis should be dead. Then again, a gun shot to the brain didnít do it, and that usually kills things that are already dead.

"We have an offside, and a technical level 3 foul (read my profile for more information on the new battle rules) on Darkrai. As a result of a technical 3 foul, Darkrai has also picked up 1 flagrant. One more flagrant means a suspension!" Kat yelled

Kat has just revived in time to see Francis the Snivy unconscious on the floor, meaning that she has the chance to yellÖ.

And the author has the chance to write in all caps.

"FRANCIS NOOONNN!" Kat yelled (Kat wins series 4 to 2, and she is the captain of the Team Angeles basketball team in part 3).

(Current Situation)

Team Angeles has just witnessed an unknown attack by Darktwo. The team did not like the attack as Darktwo drained the blood and life out of Francis the Snivy. The team tells Yuneri that they are going to do a substitution.

"We need to do a sub Yuneri" Midnight said

And now it even has a speaking role; did the author just slip this character in from a side story or something?

"Sub granted, time out, Team Angeles. That is the team's first, and Francis the Snivy is unconscious and is unable to battle. Let's reset the scoreboard" Yuneri said

(Line Up- Team Angeles)

Orion the Arcanine: 40,000

Francis the Buizel: 40,000

Francis the Axew: 40,000

Midnight the Purloin: 40,000

Rouge the Bat; 40,000 (Sub in for Francis the Snivy)

This whole substitution announcement thing might be relevant, if I could see the possible strategy of picking the players being swapped. But the story never approaches anything like that, and Pokťmon battles are all about swapping combatants to exploit the opponentsí weaknesses!

Subs Available

Mizu the Buizel

Francis the Serperior

Kavi the Servine

Tory the Ninetales

Francis the Azelf

Players that fainted in past possessions/ Score

Fuck your goddamn lists, do you think weíve forgotten already?!

Francis the Snivy/ 12,400 points

(Battle Continues)

Possession: Darktwo (2 times remaining)

Darktwo uses Shadow Ball on Orion

Darktwo forms a purple ball from his paws. He aims for Orion, but Orion's speed allows him to dodge the attack and counter with a Flamethrower/ Fire Fang Combo. Orion shoots out a flame of fire while running toward Darktwo. Darktwo gets hit by the fire. Orion bites Darktwo and deals a combined total of 10,000 LP damage.

Darktwo: 467,000 LP

Only forty-seven more paragraphs like that, probably more, I guess. Kill me.

Team Angeles (Orion, 40,000 LP)- First player to hit 10,000 LP damage given in a single possession, new scoring leader

Darktwo flinched because of Orion's Fire Fang attack.

Possession: Team Angeles (Orion)

Orion uses Extreme Speed

Orion's body glows blue as his speed doubles from 60 to 120

Shouldnít there be rules against performance enhancing moves? I mean, since the author is so much into sports and all.

Francis the Buizel uses Water Gun

Francis the Buizel shoots out a water stream, and hits Darktwo. Francis the Buizel deals 5,000 LP damage

Darktwo: 462,000 LP

Francis the Axew uses Dragon Rage

Francis the Axew spawns a blue flame from his mouth. He shoots it toward Darktwo, but Darktwo runs toward Francis the Axew. Darktwo jumps to avoid the attack, and counters with Shadow Ball. The attack hits Francis the Axew from behind. Darktwo deals only 200 LP damage because of offside.

"We have an offside by Darktwo. The attack counts as 200LP damage, instead of 400 LP damage" Yuneri announced

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Is it too much to ask that you keep your bullshit consistent, author? When Francis was hit with an offside move, there was no damage reduction. Orion takes a blow, Darkraiís move is suddenly demoted to dinky damage. Could you maybe stop self-flagellating for a minute and start passing the whip around?

Francis the Axew: 39,800 LP

Darktwo: 462,000 LP- First attack landed

Midnight uses Bite

Midnight runs forward toward Darktwo. He jumps up, and bites Darktwo. He deals 5,000 LP damage

Darktwo: 457,000 LP

Francis the Snivy has revived and is ready at the score table

"Francis the Snivy is standing by the score table. Call a time out if you want him in" Yuneri announced

ďWe only just managed to get both life and blood back in him, why not have him lose it all again?Ē

"We would like a 20 second timeout" Rouge the Bat said

"Time out granted" Yuneri announced

(Time Out station)

Team Angeles is figuring out who should come in, and who is going to take a break.

We will be back to "Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: The Mystery of Francis" right after this break.

And Iíll go get an axe and re-enact the Shining right after I snap.

Well everyone, its that time of the year where gamers of all ages travel to downtown LA to see what games will be revealed at E3. Gamers like me want to predict some announcements from E3. Here is the first 5 of the announcements I want to read/hear about.

10th: Halo 4 movie

9th: New pokemon games

8th: New consoles

7th: Playstation 4

6th: New Technology to play games

5th: Pokemon Mystery Dungeon Game?

What is the rest of the countdown? Find out when chapter 53 arrives tonight.

Afternoon, tonight, whatever time the author picks and never bothers to go back and correct when heís gone past his own deadline.

And now, we return to "Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: The Mystery of Francis". Enjoy the chapter

(Before the Break)

Darktwo: 457,000 LP

Francis the Snivy has revived and is ready at the score table

No.

"Francis the Snivy is standing by the score table. Call a time out if you want him in" Yuneri announced

"We would like a 20 second timeout" Rouge the Bat said

NO!

"Time out granted" Yuneri announced

(Time Out station)

Team Angeles is figuring out who should come in, and who is going to take a break.

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This goddamn madman actually copied seven lines from before he interrupted himself, and put them in the same fucking chapter. New idiocy every chapter; it never ceases to amaze me.

"Do you guys want me in?" Francis the Snivy asked

"Yes" Francis the Axew said

"How about Kavi?" asked Francis the Buizel

"Yes!" Kavi yelled

"Kavi" Francis the Snivy said

"Yes?" Kavi answered

ďYouíre off the team, thereís only room for one martyr here.Ē

"I have a move that is powerful that does major damage" Francis the Snivy said

"Cool" Kavi said

"There is a bad side to that, my life points goes down to 1" Francis the Snivy said

"I see, but if it does major damage, then it is worth a shot" Kavi said

And if I had a rifle, Iíd gladly take it.

"Let's do it" Francis the Snivy said

Midnight and Rouge the Bat exit the battle, while Kavi and Francis the Snivy enters the battle

(Line up updated)

Orion

Francis the Snivy

Kavi the Servine

Francis the Axew

Francis the Buizel

Possession: Team Angeles (Francis the Snivy)

Francis the Snivy and Kavi the Servine uses Ultimate Leaf Blade

Francis and Kavi run forward toward Darktwo. They jump, and combine their blades o increase the damage.

Excuse me while I go and Ultimate flip off my screen. Iím going to need both hands for this.

They deal 450,000 LP damage to Darktwo, however, Francis the Snivy felt drained of energy after using the move, so drained, that he almost fainted.

Darktwo: 7,000 LP

Team Angeles (Francis the Snivy/Kavi the Servine)- First ultimate combo

Team Angeles (Francis the Snivy, 1LP) - Major recoil of 39,999LP damage, first attack over 400,000

Darktwo laughs at Francis the Snivy

Yeah, he does that a lot, doesnít he? Next youíll tell me he sounds evil too, right?

"HAHAHHAHA. You did a move that almost made ya faint huh. Well, thank you. I got something for you since you almost destroyed Gengar. I can now erase yourÖ." Darktwo was cut off by Francis the Snivy

"Membrane" Francis the Snivy said

What?

"This aint no chemistry class here. I will erase yourÖ" Darktwo said before he was cut off by Francis the Snivy again

"Worries" Francis the Snivy said

This is it, isnít it?

"This aint no emotion contest here. I will erase yourÖ." Darktwo said before being cut off again

"History" Francis the Snivy said

The death of comedy. I knew it would happen one day.

"This aint no school. Uxie, come out here and get open, or I will give you the beating of your life!" Darktwo yelled as Uxie was released from his "jail cell"

Uxie emerges from his "jail cell" to see Darktwo. He seeks Darktwo's command.

"Uxie, erase Francis the Snivy's powers" Darktwo said

"His what?" Uxie asked Darktwo

"Powers! His memories, duhhhhhh!" Darktwo yelled at Uxie

And for good measure, why not burn its corpse and piss in the ashes, punctuated by the narrative wit of a fourth grader.

"You know what Mr. "I can beat up Francis the Snivy", I can't do that! You better be nice or I won't erase Francis the Snivy's memories, or better yet, Francis the Snivy is so nicer than you. I don't think he even deserves having his memories erased. I mean come on! I only erase memories of pokemon who are mean like you, not those who are nice, like Francis the Snivy. Francis the Snivy deserves to tell me to erase your memories Darktwo! I know you commanded me to erase Francis the Snivy's memories, but you put me in a bad position to where I have to think about it. Wow Darktwo! Wow! You made me erase the memories of 699 pokemon in a row without conflict, but today is a different story. I will talk to Francis the Snivy to see he wants to have this done, but I doubt that he will say yes. If he does, you get a lucky break, and even if I erases Francis the Snivy's memories, I will still remember him as a friend that you , Darktwo, destroyed, all because of this "Soul Games" tournament that Team Angeles went through to fight you. It did not need to end up this way you know. Think about it Darktwo, because what you are about to make me do, will fore right back at you in the near future. You better think this through; in fact, I am no longer your friend Darktwo. I am Francis the Snivy's new friend forever, even if I erase his memories of his brother Francis the Buizel, or even of his life as a pokemon, or whatever memories I erase of him" Uxie concluded his speech

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Wow, I think the author just officially got tired of his own shit. And his solution is to have a tertiary character verbally reprimand Darktwo like theyíre both middle schoolers in an abusive relationship, and heís already picked his rebound partner. Iím really at a loss whether this is the author projecting some kind of in-real-life issues, but in any case, I think we just hit another apex on this crazy rollercoaster ride.

Francis the Snivy had a flashback of Tory the Ninetales when Tory officially turned him into a Snivy.

Flashback from Chapter 1

All of a sudden, Francis and Suyapa gets attacked NO NO NO MOTHER FUCKING NO! This makes it twice now. This psychological scab-picker of an author has copy-pasted most of the first chapter into the same story, twice! Away it fucking goes!

-Snip-


Flashback ends

Team Angeles is now about to find out if Francis the Snivy's memories will be erasedÖ.

You know, I wouldnít put my bets on it, and yet this author is so goddamn masochistic, and his writing style so inane and off-the-wall crazy, that it might just fucking happen.

That's all for now, but in a few hours, Uxie's decession, and the rest of my announcement countdown. That's tonight on Chapter 53 of the story. See you all from 6PM to 10PM

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That was something new. Iím not even quite sure what to call it. I donít think the author can even qualify as sane after writing this story, because it certainly makes my head spin. I just hope he doesnít find a way to top himself after this.


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post Feb 22 2017, 03:02 PM
Last chapter was dumb Ė really dumb. This one is too. I canít say much more than that. Enjoy.

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Chapter 53: Darktwo VS Uxie: The Talking Game

FrancisTheUnconsciousSnivy101: Welcome to chapter 53 (The second of 2 chapters today) of the story. This is where Uxie has to make a big decision on whether to erase Francis the Snivy's memories or not to.

The fact that there is a decision to be made is fucking idiotic; but sure, letís see if this goes anywhere.

This chapter will tell us how part 3 will begin (introduction chapters for part 3 is tomorrow). We also have the rest of the top 10 countdown of the announcements I want to hear/read about. This chapter is mostly with Darktwo and Uxie talking to each other.

So long as Francis keeps his mouth shut, I can take a bit of banter.

Here we go, and without further delayÖ

Team Angeles: FrancisTheUnconsciousSnivy101 does not own anything

Alerts in chapter

French words translated

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Iíve heard of trigger warnings, but this is getting goddamn ridiculous. How could the author think this even has a point?

Last lines before the bell:

Darktwo laughs at Francis the Snivy

"HAHAHHAHA. You did a move that almost made ya faint huh. Well, thank you. I got something for you since you almost destroyed Gengar. I can now erase yourÖ." Darktwo was cut off by Francis the Snivy

"Membrane" Francis the Snivy said

I donít know about that, but my faith in humanity is sure taking a hit.

"This aint no chemistry class here. I will erase yourÖ" Darktwo said before he was cut off by Francis the Snivy again

"Worries" Francis the Snivy said

"This aint no emotion contest here. I will erase yourÖ." Darktwo said before being cut off again

"History" Francis the Snivy said

You know, a time travel plot would be much more interesting than this, now that you mention it.

"This aint no school. Uxie, come out here and get open, or I will give you the beating of your life!" Darktwo yelled as Uxie was released from his "jail cell"

Uxie emerges from his "jail cell" to see Darktwo.

What the fuck is this ďjail cellĒ? Did Darktwo carry him around in a birdcage, or was it an actual Pokťball?

He seeks Darktwo's command.

"Uxie, erase Francis the Snivy's powers" Darktwo said

"His what?" Uxie asked Darktwo

"Powers! His memories, duhhhhhh!" Darktwo yelled at Uxie

How the hell would memories even equate to powers? I mean, I guess if Pokťmon forget their move sets, then they would be kind of powerless, but I donít think thatís what the author is going for.

"You know what Mr. "I can beat up Francis the Snivy", I can't do that! You better be nice or I won't erase Francis the Snivy's memories, or better yet, Francis the Snivy is so nicer than you. I don't think he even deserves having his memories erased. I mean come on! I only erase memories of pokemon who are mean like you, not those who are nice, like Francis the Snivy. Francis the Snivy deserves to tell me to erase your memories Darktwo! I know you commanded me to erase Francis the Snivy's memories, but you put me in a bad position to where I have to think about it. Wow Darktwo! Wow! You made me erase the memories of 699 pokemon in a row without conflict, but today is a different story. I will talk to Francis the Snivy to see he wants to have this done, but I doubt that he will say yes. If he does, you get a lucky break, and even if I erases Francis the Snivy's memories, I will still remember him as a friend that you , Darktwo, destroyed, all because of this "Soul Games" tournament that Team Angeles went through to fight you. It did not need to end up this way you know. Think about it Darktwo, because what you are about to make me do, will fore right back at you in the near future. You better think this through; in fact, I am no longer your friend Darktwo. I am Francis the Snivy's new friend forever, even if I erase his memories of his brother Francis the Buizel, or even of his life as a pokemon, or whatever memories I erase of him" Uxie concluded his speech

I could stare at this entire paragraph for hours, go through it sentence by sentence, word for word, dissect every bit of crazy that the author managed to put into written form, and I would still not be able to fully clarify the utter madness that it contains. This thing, I feel, is yet another testament to the authorís martyr complex, this time displaying how he wants other people to treat him. Clearly, heís dealing with some sort of victim mentality Ė whether real or not, he feels unjustly treated in his life. However, rather than having his self-insert confront his aggressors, to live out the fantasy of standing up for himself, he wants others to do it for him. He wants others to take pity on him, to help him where he refuses to help himself. And his only justification is that heís a nice guy who keeps sacrificing himself, and his opponents are mean bullies. This story isnít a story any longer; itís just sixty-five chapters of masochistic, self-centered whining.

(Current Situation)

Team Angeles is listening to Uxie and Darktwo as they are talking about if Francis the Snivy should have his memories erased. The conservation continues.

"You really think that Francis the Snivy is so nice? He and his team beat Gengar. Gengar wants his revenge by having you Ms "I like Francis the Snivy" erase all his memories. I think that Gengar deserves his revenge. He was one of my friends. So think about that" Darktwo said to Uxie

"Hold on a second. Just because Francis the Snivy and his team defeated Gengar, does not mean that he deserves his memories to be erased, no sir, not buying it" Uxie said

Wouldnít it be better to counter with the fact that Gengar was the initial instigator of the conflict, and only got what was coming to him? It works a lot better than outright denial.

"EXCUSE ME!" Darktwo yelled

"YOU HEARD ME!"Uxie yelled so loud that Francis the Snivy fainted from the shock

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Iím starting to think the author has a kink for humiliation too, at this point. Why else would he play off his own misery as comedy?

"Sorry Francis the Snivy" Uxie said

"It's ok. If it is needed that you need to yell, go ahead" Suyapa said

ďFrancis bleeds from orifices all the time; that blood coming out of his ears is nothing new. Donít worry about it.Ē

"Why did you apologize huh?" Darktwo asked

"I apologized because I made Francis the Snivy faint by accident" Uxie said

"OhÖso you apologized because you favorite Snivy fainted huh. I see how it is" Darktwo said

"Yes. That is what nice pokemon like me do. We apologize for accidents" Uxie said

"EXCUSE ME! YOU ARE NOT ALLOWED TO APPOLOGIZE TO FRANCIS THE SNIVY EVER AGAIN!" Darktwo yelled so loud that Uxie started crying.

Iíve seen kids' shows meant for toddlers that were less infantile than this fucking tripe.

"Darktwo!" Team Angeles yelled

"WHAT DO YOU WANT?" Darktwo asked

"We want you to stop" Suyapa said

"JE DETESTE DARKTWO (I hate Darktwo)" Uxie said

"Non, Tu amirer moi (no, you admire me)" Darktwo said

"Yeah right! Je amrier Francis le Snivy (I admire Francis the Snivy)" Uxie said

What the hell is going on?! First the conflict has devolved into yelling between kindergarten-mentality, one-note characters, and now weíre getting gratuitous French for no reason. I knew this battle was going to end nonsensically, but this is just random.

"Oh really?" Darktwo aked while launching a Shadow Ball attack toward Uxie.

"HELP!" Uxie yelled

Francis the Snivy revives to run toward the Shadow Ball attack. Uxie held his hands in a defensive X manner. Uxie was waiting for the contact to come, but it never came, because Francis the Snivy stepped in front of him to take the attack. Francis the Snivy fainted for saving Uxie.

Another convenient recovery from unconsciousness that leads to another rebound. If the author was snorting cocaine like the cool kids, this would be the equivalent of doing another line.

"Francis No!" Uxie yelled

"Hey, I think it is supposed to be Francis, Yes!" Darktwo yelled

"FRANCIS THE SNIVY FAINTED BECAUSE OF YOU! HE SAVED ME FROM YOU! JE DETESTE VOUS DARKTWO! (I hate you Darktwo)" Uxie yelled

The actual problem is that they donít have any other reason to hate Darktwo. Any and all conflict here has been because Darktwo was out to get Francis. At least Gengar had a truckload worth of corpses to his name Ė not that it changed Team Angelesí motivation any.

"YOU HAVE NO RIGHT TO SAY THAT!" Darktwo yelled

"I have the right to" Uxie said

"Yeah right!" Darktwo yelled

"I told you that Francis the Snivy should not have his memories erased!" Uxie yelled

"Prove it to me in a battle!" Darktwo yelled

"Fine, if you win, I will erase Francis the Snivy's memories. If I win, I will not erase Francis the Snivy's memories" Uxie said

Dude, if you donít want to do the thing, donít even make it an option. How are you this monumentally stupid?

"Deal" Darktwo said

"When does this battle start?" Yuneri asked

"It starts from 7 to 11PM, here on "Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: The Mystery of Francis" Uxie said

Stop pissing up against the fourth wall, will you?

Here is the rest of the countdown

4th: New Basketball game

3rd: Surprises

2nd: Pokemon Black and White 3?

1st: The Grand Theft Auto 5 release date please

The special chapter featuring Uxie VS Darktwo for the battle for Francis the Snivy's memories is tonight from 7PM to 11PM

You have a very, very, very weird understanding of how both time and the written medium works, author. If you open up your emails from weeks ago, do you think you are receiving direct messages from time travelers?

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Weíre twelve chapters away from ending this. But I need a breather. The crazy has been thick these last few chapters. Iíll find something not written by an escaped mental patient, mock it, and then return to this, when Iíve been reacquainted with normality.


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"FRANCIS THE SNIVY FAINTED BECAUSE OF YOU! HE SAVED ME FROM YOU! JE DETESTE VOUS DARKTWO! (I hate you Darktwo)" Uxie yelled


"Je dťteste toi," unless you're being needlessly formal. I say this, of course, knowing full well that he probably used Google Translate, or is taking 8th grade Intro to French.


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post Jun 1 2017, 06:46 AM
I have no apologies for putting off this mock for as long as I have. I will say that I have relished the break from this madness in written form, though. So, Darktwo wants to erase Francisí memories, but Uxie doesnít want to allow that. That should really be the end of it, seeing as its Uxie who has the memory wiping powers, but we all know logic has a snowballís chance in hell here. The insanity simply just continues from there. Enjoy.

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Chapter 54: Darktwo Vs Randal for Francis's Memories

FrancisTheUnconsciousSnivy101: Welcome to Chapter 54(Which is the final chapter of part 2 of 5).

Subsection B, division #23, filed under fuck you this is pointless.

In this chapter, Francis the Snivy's memories are on the line in this battle between Uxie and Darktwo. The Uxie's name is Randal by the way.

Youíve mistaken me for someone who cares. Donít worry, I get that a lot.

This is it, the end of the second part of 5. Francis the Snivy is hoping that Randal will win this battle. Here we go, and without further delayÖ

Team Angeles: FrancisTheUnconsciousSnivy101 does not own anything

Last lines before the bell:

"EXCUSE ME! YOU ARE NOT ALLOWED TO APPOLOGIZE TO FRANCIS THE SNIVY EVER AGAIN!" Darktwo yelled so loud that Uxie started crying.

Is Darktwo suddenly Uxieís abusive dad or something?

"Darktwo!" Team Angeles yelled

"WHAT DO YOU WANT?" Darktwo asked

"We want you to stop" Suyapa said

Then make him! Donít just stand around acting like window dressing.

"JE DETESTE DARKTWO (I hate Darktwo)" Uxie said

"Non, Tu amirer moi (no, you admire me)" Darktwo said

"Yeah right! Je amrier Francis le Snivy (I admire Francis the Snivy)" Uxie said

And I admire the authorís ability to test my patience. I also hate him for it, but thatís besides my point.

"Oh really?" Darktwo aked while launching a Shadow Ball attack toward Uxie.

"HELP!" Uxie yelled

Francis the Snivy revives to run toward the Shadow Ball attack. Uxie held his hands in a defensive X manner.

For someone so desperate to be a martyr, author, how do you not know the word Ďcrossí?

Uxie was waiting for the contact to come, but it never came, because Francis the Snivy stepped in front of him to take the attack. Francis the Snivy fainted for saving Uxie.

"Francis No!" Uxie yelled

"Hey, I think it is supposed to be Francis, Yes!" Darktwo yelled

Funny how aiming at someone else confers a 100% hit rate against Francis.

"FRANCIS THE SNIVY FAINTED BECAUSE OF YOU! HE SAVED ME FROM YOU! JE DETESTE VOUS DARKTWO! (I hate you Darktwo)" Uxie yelled

"YOU HAVE NO RIGHT TO SAY THAT!" Darktwo yelled

Because Uxie doesnít have any rights over their own feelings.

"I have the right to" Uxie said

"Yeah right!" Darktwo yelled

"I told you that Francis the Snivy should not have his memories erased!" Uxie yelled

"Prove it to me in a battle!" Darktwo yelled

Prove that Uxie said that, or that Francis shouldnít have his memories erased? How would you even prove either of those through violence?

"Fine, if you win, I will erase Francis the Snivy's memories. If I win, I will not erase Francis the Snivy's memories" Uxie said

"Deal" Darktwo said

(Current Situation)

Team Angeles is now watching the battle between Randal the Uxie, and Darktwo. Francis the Snivy is hoping for Randal to win.

And Iím hoping next time Francis will stay unconscious for more than fifteen seconds.

"This battle is official. This battle is set for 10 minutes and 30 seconds, and will feature power plays. Each player starts with 10,000LP and no player can pass 10,000 LP. The battle has a stipulation of the following. If Randal wins, then Francis the Snivy will retain all his memories, or if Randal losses, Francis the Snivy will have all his memories erased. The match is over when one player faints.

Tell me then, what is the point of a time limit?!

If however, a tie occurs, then we will do a coin toss. Here we go. Begin" Yuneri announced

Randal: 10,000

Darktwo: 10,000

Possession: Randal

Randal uses Psy Beam

Randal uses his closed eyes to spawn beams of bright light.

And Iíll use my closed blinds to enjoy the wonderful view through my window.

The lights strike Darktwo, and Randal deals 300 LP damage

Randal: 10,000 (300 Point lead)

Darktwo: 9,700LP

Darktwo uses Shadow Ball

Darktwo forms a purple ball from his paws. He sends it toward Randal. Randal counters the move with Physic .

Newtonís fourth and least known law: When a moron types on a keyboard, sometimes theyíll misspell the word Ďpsychicí.

Randal controls the Shadow Ball attack, and sends it back. Randal deals 1,000 LP damage.

Randal: 10,000 (1,300 to 0 point run, 1 counter= 1,000 points)

Darktwo: 8,700

"The next power play isÖ.Double Damage for Darkrai. The power play is now in effect for the next 1 minute" Yuneri announced

You mean Darktwo, right? Also, did he decide that, or did you do it for him?

Randal uses Psy Beam

Randal uses his closed eyes to form two beams of light. He sends them toward Darktwo, and Randal deals 2,000 LP damage. Francis the Snivy is cheering on the sidelines.

If the masochistic cretin was any kind of intelligent, heíd be running far away. Best case scenario, Uxie wins and Francis will be safe, worst case is that Darktwo wins, and then Francis has a head start.

Randal: 10,000 (3,300 to 0 point run)

Darktwo: 6,700

PP(Power Play): No time remaining

Darktwo uses Yawn

Allow me to join in.

Darkrai tries to make Randal drowsy, but Randal counters with Psychic. Randal controls Darktwo's body, and slams him down for a record 5,000 LP damage

Randal: 10,000 LP (8,300 to 0 point run, 2 counters, going for a perfect game)

Darktwo: 1,700 LP

Wow, itís going rather well. Which begs the question, how is fate going to spit in the protagonistsí eyes this time?

Randal uses Tackle

Randal runs forward to tackle Darktwo, but Darktwo grabs Randal by the throat. Darktwo squeezes Randal until he faints.

Oh, for fuckís sake, that wasnít even a valid attack move!

Darktwo celebrates his victory, until Yuneri calls Darktwo offside.

"We have an offsideÖ" Yuneri said before Darktwo grabbed Yuneri by her arm to send her flying. Yuneri hits a wall, and faints on impact.

And just like that, Iím happy again. That ambiguous offside rule has been abused for far too long.

Darktwo laughs at team Angeles.

"HAHHAHAHA! It looks like Uxie (Randal) will erase Francis the Snivy's memories" Darktwo said

Sure, fine, heíll get right on that after recovering from 10,000 LP worth of strangulation damage.

"NOT ON MY WATCH!" An unknown voice said

The team notices a Mesprit, but not just any Mesprit, but it's Francis the Mesprit.

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How many of these medical insurance miscreants exist in this story?! How many contrivances can this author shove into his mess?! When will my suffering end?!

All caps moment for Francis the Mesprit

"YOU DARE TO ALLOW RANDAL TO ERASE MY BROTHERS MEMORIES HUH. GUESS WHAT, YOU FAILED DUE TO MY PRESSNCE IN THIS ROOM. WELL GO AHEAD AND TRY TO, ONLY IF YOU TOUCH ME!"Francis the Mesprit said as he got closer to Darktwo.


There are better ways of asking for a handjob, dude.

Darktwo attacks Francis the Mesprit with Black Hole Away (Another move I made up)

Darktwo forms two black holes, one above Francis the Mesprit, and one in an unknown location (find out where this is in chapter 57 on Friday of next week).

Oh, so you mean itís currently up the authorís ass, then.

Francis the Mesprit was sucked in, and was sent to the unknown area.

Darktwo attacks his own attack

His what where how, now?!

Darktwo attacks his black hole, and destroys it. Meanwhile, in the battlefield, Darktwo uses the exact same move on Francis the Snivy. Francis the Snivy gets sucked in, and is sent to another unknown area. Darktwo shatters the black hole.

First off, I donít think black holes work that way. Second, good luck erasing Francisí memories, when heís now nowhere near you, captain dumbass!

Yuneri revives to find Francis the Snivy missing. Yuneri is worried about Francis the SnivyÖ.

(Location- Unknown Location 1)- Francis the Mesprit's area

Francis the Mesprit wakes up to beautiful flowers, and a nice scenery. She finds a sign that reads "Welcome to Washington D.C- Home of the Washington Hunters Gamers League Basketball team"

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You literally just told us, that we would find out about this location in Chapter 57, and now you just tell us?! What. Is. Wrong. With. You?!

"Wow, this is nice" Francis the Mesprit said

(Location- Unknown Area 2)- Francis the Snivy

Francis the Snivy was still unconscious, when a Pichu discovered him. This Pichu carries him to the hospital. Francis the Snivy is being examined. After 10 minutes, Francis the Snivy revives, but several answers from him tells you the next two parts of this story.

You call this a story?! To call this absurd collection of words a story would be the same as calling an M.C. Escher painting an accurate portrayal of reality!

"Im glad you are conscious." The Pichu said

'Where am I?" Francis the Snivy asked

"Las Vegas, Nevada" the Pichu answered. "Where are you from?" the Pichu asked

"UmÖ.I don't rememberÖ.." Francis the Snivy answered

Honestly, neither do I at this point. The question is, what does it even matter?

"Ok, next question is, What is your name?" the Pichu asked

" My name isÖ..I Ödon't ÖrememberÖ" Francis the Snivy said

"What! I bet that your memories were erased by Darktwo" the Pichu said

How the fuck would you know?!

That's all for now.

Tomorrow:

Chapters 55 and 56 are introduction chapters for part 3


You could tell me they were bangers and mash, and it would still make the same amount of sense to me.

Chapter 2 of "Francis the Snivy's Abused Life

Next Weekend:

Chapters 57 to 60


I canít really fault him for putting down an itinerary, but thereís no way in hell he could ever hope to stick to it Ė off all the people he fails, himself is the most frequent victim.

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Iím back for one chapter, and already it feels like Iíve treated myself to staring at the gibberish of insane asylum arts and crafts. Still, the end is getting steadily closer, so itís just a matter or perseverance at this point.


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post Jun 7 2017, 02:31 PM
Alright, Francis has had his memory erased, again. AGAIN. And heís been shipped off to Las Vegas, because the author canít stop returning there. So, now that weíve been hit with this plot hook, whoís ready for absolutely nothing to happen? I know I am. Enjoy.

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Chapter 55: Introduction For Part 3

FrancisTheUnconsciousSnivy101: This is the introduction chapter for part 3. This is just an outline on what is going to happen in Part 3, and will change without notice.

And without logic, Iím sure.

I do not own anything.

Characters in Part 3

All characters from part 2 will be in part 3

No shit, next youíll probably tell me the plot will persist as well.

New characters:

Jackie the Pichu- The Pichu that carried Francis the Snivy to the hospital, while he was still unconscious

Evelyn (Pokemon to be determined)

Thatís A+ literary skills right there Ė I donít know what kind of character Iíll put in next, but their name is going to be Evelyn, whether theyíre anything from a collection of magnets to a two-hundred pound sentient boulder. I swear, if this author decides on Pokťmon nicknames, before he even knows what heís catching, then heís dead to me.

New rivals:

Arceus? Ė Arceus is listed as a neutral character at this time

Old Rivals Returning:

Gengar- Regenerated by Darktwo after Darktwo erased Francis the Snivy's memories

Yeah, about that. Youíre telling us it happened. We saw the effects of it having happened. But it never actually happened, you scatterbrained imbecile. Not only was it Randal who was supposed to do the memory erasing, but Darktwo did nothing to Francis #1 that he didnít do to Francis #6, and he didnít seem to be suffering from amnesia.

Darktwo- Team Angeles has to battle Darktwo's basketball team to recover all of Francis the Snivy's basketball team

Serperior and Ninetales- These two abuse Francis the Snivy

Not as much as the author does, though.

Plots and happenings:

. Francis the Snivy has his memories erased

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The only thing more tortured than the authorís self-insert is this goddamn plot point, which is just as useless and contrived.

. Basketball season starts

. 1st half of the season

.Yuneri the Snivy is injured

.Transfer Window- Chapter 55 has the rules

Author, please. This is Chapter 55. How do you keep doing this?

Special Segments:

E3 happenings- E3 is fast approaching. Are you ready?

Oh, fast approaching, is it? I didnít know the fucking planet had begun spinning faster.

Top 5- Many top 5 segments before June 5th

Game Previews (E3 edition)- I will make my own preview on the upcoming games from E3

That's it for the introduction for part 3, but we have the transfer window. Look for chapter 55 for the rules of that. More characters= More fun!

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That was short but painful, almost like ripping off a Band-Aid. Letís do another while the sting is still fresh.


Chapter 56: Transfer Window is Open

FrancisTheUnconsciousSnivy101: Here are the rules for the transfer window. I do not own anything.

What is the Transfer Window?

Youíre defining terms now? Fifty-six chapters into the story?! This should have been written in Chapter 3, you maniac.

The Transfer Window is a period of time where teams buy players with the teams money. It is also the time when teams can also let players go. The sport where there are transfer windows is in soccer. Soccer has 2 windows. In "Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: The Mystery of Francis", we will also have 2 transfer windows, but for basketball.

Yeah, I have no expertise on the subject of player transference between teams, but Iím pretty sure it applies to all team sports Ė not just soccer.

How does a transfer window work?

The transfer window works in a way where teams scout for players. In this story, the readers will have to opportunity to add to team Angeles. The team does have their budgets. Team Angeles has a 5,000,000 poke dollar budget, and teams can't pass their budget.

And after paying for the teamís medical bills, how much will they have left?

How to participate

To participate, look at my profile, and look for the Transfer Window section. Then look at the players and their skills, abilities, etc. The most important feature is the budget. Here is an example using Francis the Snivy (In the story, Francis the Snivy joined the team due to the fact that he and Orion are friends)

By that wording, Iím not even sure Francis is at all interested in playing sports, or if heís just humoring his friend.

Francis the Snivy:

Abilities: 3 point specialist, assist specialist

Skills: Crossover dribble

Average points: 4.2

Average Assists: 14.8

Average Steals: 2.1

(There are more stats)

But they donít matter. None of this matters. Francis will do whatever he needs to do, so that his team wins through his self-sacrifice, so that this rejected looney tunes plot will keep going.

Current team: Team Angeles

How much to get this player: 40,000 poke dollars

By my math, the team can afford over a hundred players of Francisí caliber. Even by monetary value, itís obvious they can do a whole lot better given their budget.

To ask for this player, PM team Angeles.

Now, that's just an example. Here is the PM line

Subject: Transfer Window- Buy or Sell player

Message: Team Angeles is interested in (Players name) skills. Please respond back


Response: The suggested player will be included but add nothing to the plot. Thanks for wasting your time.

Warning: Look at my profile every weekend because players will be taken from other teams.

That's all for now. Chapter 57 and 58 is Friday!

Nah, next chapter is now, because itís better to get it over with right away.


Chapter 57: Transfer Window Update 1

FrancisTheUnconsciousSnivy101: The following is not a chapter, but is the transfer window update as of this week. The following characters are offered for this weeks transfer window:

Jacob the Buizel

Current team: team Wonders

Specialty: Speed

Sorry, but I will only accept players that do cocaine.

Average Points: 12.9

Average Assists: 7.2

Average Steals: 2.1

Average Blocks: 5.0

Price for character including fee: 20,000 poke dollars

Overall the guy has better averages, and yet heís half the price of the injury collector that is Francis? Why is Orion even keeping Francis on the team?!

Kat the Servine

Current team: team Works

Specialty: 3 point specialist

Abilities: tail play, and crossover

Be careful with your terms, author. You could give some furries the wrong idea.

Average points: 13.9

Average Assists: 7.0

Average Blocks: 10.9

Average Steals: 1.2

Price for character with fees: 30,000 poke dollars

Mark the Floatzel

Current team: Team Volts

Specialty: All Around Defence

Average points: 10.1

Average Assists: 1.9

Average Blocks: 2.9

Average Steals: 8.7

Price for this player with fees: 200,000 poke dollars

Yikes! Price gouging much, Mark?

To have interest for these players, PM me with the following. Don't forget to put your pen name so that I can give you credit and add you as a favorite.

Subject: Transfer Window- Buy or Sell player

Sell Francis! All of them!!

Message: Team Angeles is interested in (Players name) skills. Please respond back

The next chapter of the story is tomorrow.

It certainly will be another day, because Iíve had about all I can take for now.

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Nothing. Three chapters of nothing. Granted, they were simply short, intermediary notices, but they still rack up the chapter count. We wonít be so lucky in the future Iím afraid. The final stretch is now in sight Ė only eight chapters left.


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post Jun 16 2017, 12:05 PM
After that whole lot of nothing, here comesÖ something. Oh, sure, itís more of the story, but I find it hard to dignify it with the very word. Itís almost like the authorís grasp on his own narrative is deteriorating, risking collapse like a game of Jenga at a Parkinsonís ward. Letís just get through this. Enjoy.

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Chapter 58: The Fight Continues, Evelyn is in

FrancisTheUnconsciousSnivy101: This is the start of part 3. In today's chapter, we have Randal and Darktwo as the starting characters for part 3.

First off, what does it matter telling us which characters we open up the chapter on? Second, why the fuck them, and not the newly amnesia addled Francis?

In this installment, Randal finds out that Francis the Snivy's memories are erased by Darktwo, and Randal seeks for revenge.

If Darktwo was perfectly capable of doing it himself, then why was Randal even a part of this? Is it the author who has amnesia now?

We also have the countdown to E3, as we are only 4 days away from the event in Downtown LA. As a gamer myself, I will share the announcements from the last E3 that I liked. Here we go, and without further delayÖ

Team Angeles: FrancisTheUnconsciousSnivy101 does not own anything.

Warnings:

Death of Randal the Uxie: 23.9098398%

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Okay, author, either you are pulling our legs, or you are actually doing some kind of calculations to come up with this absurd number. Seeing as nothing is ever rational with you, I will bet a paycheck you are doing the latter. The only thing that makes this even more baffling, is that you think weíd believe youíd kill off a named character.

Last lines of Chapter 54:

Randal runs forward to tackle Darktwo, but Darktwo grabs Randal by the throat. Darktwo squeezes Randal until he faints. Darktwo celebrates his victory, until Yuneri calls Darktwo offside.

"We have an offsideÖ" Yuneri said before Darktwo grabbed Yuneri by her arm to send her flying. Yuneri hits a wall, and faints on impact.

Can we have more scene descriptions that arenít contingent on characters impacting against them?

Darktwo laughs at team Angeles.

"HAHHAHAHA! It looks like Uxie (Randal) will erase Francis the Snivy's memories" Darktwo said

Even though the author has contradicted this multiple times. Who the fuck even knows whatís going on at this point?

"NOT ON MY WATCH!" An unknown voice said

The team notices a Mesprit, but not just any Mesprit, but it's Francis the Mesprit.

With how many people the author is slapping this name on, Iím surprised they arenít fighting someone by that name too.

All caps moment for Francis the Mesprit

"YOU DARE TO ALLOW RANDAL TO ERASE MY BROTHERS MEMORIES HUH. GUESS WHAT, YOU FAILED DUE TO MY PRESSNCE IN THIS ROOM. WELL GO AHEAD AND TRY TO, ONLY IF YOU TOUCH ME!"Francis the Mesprit said as he got closer to Darktwo.


Darktwo attacks Francis the Mesprit with Black Hole Away (Another move I made up)

Which, given what it does, would actually be a good escape move Ė only I have to assume it can selectively erase memories as well, so it still doesnít make sense.

Darktwo forms two black holes, one above Francis the Mesprit, and one in an unknown location (find out where this is in chapter 57 on Friday of next week). Francis the Mesprit was sucked in, and was sent to the unknown area.

Darktwo attacks his own attack

He made another black hole and threw the first one into it.

Darktwo attacks his black hole, and destroys it. Meanwhile, in the battlefield, Darktwo uses the exact same move on Francis the Snivy. Francis the Snivy gets sucked in, and is sent to another unknown area. Darktwo shatters the black hole.

Yuneri revives to find Francis the Snivy missing. Yuneri is worried about Francis the SnivyÖ.

Francis the Mesprit can die for all Yuneri cares.

(Location- Unknown Location 1)- Francis the Mesprit's area

Francis the Mesprit wakes up to beautiful flowers, and a nice scenery. She finds a sign that reads "Welcome to Washington D.C- Home of the Washington Hunters Gamers League Basketball team"

Author, there are other things that a city can take pride in other than their sports teams, I hope you realize this.

"Wow, this is nice" Francis the Mesprit said

(Location- Unknown Area 2)- Francis the Snivy

Francis the Snivy was still unconscious, when a Pichu discovered him. This Pichu carries him to the hospital. Francis the Snivy is being examined. After 10 minutes, Francis the Snivy revives, but several answers from him tells you the next two parts of this story.

Ten minutes? Does no one else ever get hurt in this crazy world, if hospital service is this quick?

"Im glad you are conscious." The Pichu said

'Where am I?" Francis the Snivy asked

"Las Vegas, Nevada" the Pichu answered. "Where are you from?" the Pichu asked

"UmÖ.I don't rememberÖ.." Francis the Snivy answered

"Ok, next question is, What is your name?" the Pichu asked

What happened to Francisí celebrity status? The guy is mentioned in just about every news broadcast on television, how does this one Pichu not know him?

" My name isÖ..I Ödon't ÖrememberÖ" Francis the Snivy said

"What! I bet that your memories were erased by Darktwo" the Pichu said

And we have to assume youíre right, unnamed Pichu, since thatís how the author wants it to be.

(Current Situation)

Team Angeles has just witnessed a attack on the team. Rose the Snivy finds out that Francis the Snivy, and the Mesprit are missing from the area. They are also watching live video from a hospital in Portland, Oregon (Francis the Snivy's location).

LAS VEGAS, NEVADA! YOU FUCKING IMBECILE!! It says so right up above, how do you even manage to keep breathing?!

They find out that Francis the Snivy has no memories of who he is ,or what happen. All of team Angeles is pointing their fingers to Darktwo. Randal agrees to what team Angeles is saying. Randal starts getting mad at Darktwo.

He should be getting mad at the author, because we didnít open up the chapter on him and Darktwo, like the author said it would. Every fucking time, every goddamn fucking time.

"DARKTWO! WHAT HAVE YOU DONE TO TEAM ANGELES!" Randal the Uxie screams

"Oh, nothing really" Darktwo said trying to hide something

"FRANCIS THE SNIVY HAS HIS MEMORIES ERASED! HOW DO YOU FEEL?" Randal asked

Asking a villain for remorse in this fanfic is like asking the sun for shade Ė stop being pointless.

"Oh, I feel great that I got rid of 2 pesky pokemon" Darktwo said

"WELL I DON'T FEEL GOOD ABOUT IT! YOU DESTROYED ONE OF MY BEST FRIENDS! YOU EVEN ERASED HIS MEMORIES FOR YOUR PLEASURE OF THIS MEMORY ERASING STEAK OF NOW 700 POKEMON! FRANCIS THE MESPRIT SHOULD HAVE DRAINED ALL YOUR EMOTIONS, BUT YOU DECIDED TO MAKE HIM DISSAPEAR! YOU EVEN TOOK AWAY FRANCISCA THE PIPULP (Darkrai's soul games tournament)! YOU ARE MEAN DARKTWO! FRANCIS THE AZELF SHOULD HAVE DRAINED ALL YOUR WILLPOWER, BUT YOU GOT AWAY WITH IT WHEN YOU MADE HIM FAINT, AND TRANSFORMED INTO DARKTWO! TEAM ANGELES WILL NEVER BE THE SAME!" Randal said as Darktwo laughed

Hold on, I thought Darktwo was Darkraiís twin brother. Can this story keep any kind of continuity anymore?

"HAHAHAHA! I SEE YOU WANT TO BE LOUD! I WILL SHOW YOU LOUDDD! I ERASED FRANCIS THE SNIVY's MEMORIES BECAUSE HE AND HIS TEAM DEFEATED GENGAR! YOU SHOULD KNOW THAT!" Darktwo said as Randal spoke up

"EXCUSE ME! YOU ARE THE ONE WHO IS SUPPOSED TO HAVE HIS MEMORIES ERASED, NOT FRANCIS THE SNIVY! HE NEVER DESERVED TO HAVE HIS MEMORIES ERASED! HE IS A NICE POKEMON WHO HAS MANY FRIENDS! WATCH ME DARKTWO, I WILL ERASE YOUR MEMORIES ONE DAY, AND WHEN I DO, I WILL GET HELP FROM FRANCIS THE UNCONSCIOUS HERO SNIVY! I EVEN HAVE A MEMORY LOCK!" Randal said as Team Angeles spoke up

You would sooner get more help from a narcoleptic possum with a heart condition. All of Team Angeles is right there with you, Darkrai is at low health from his fight, just fucking attack him now!

"THAT'S RIGHT!" Team Angeles said

"What is a memory lock Randal?" Rose asked

"A memory lock is a lock that makes sure that once I erase memories of a pokemon, they will never remember anything until they break the lock" Randal answered

Whatís the point of erasing memories if they donít stay erased? Putting a ďlockĒ on them is just a poor patch job for an existing problem.

"I see, so are you planningÖ" Suyapa said as she got cut off by Darktwo

"QUIET! THE MEMORY LOCK SHOULD BE ON FRANCIS THE SNIVY, NOT ON ME! I DON'T EARN THAT MEMORY LOCK! FRANCIS THE SNIVY DESERVES TO NEVER EVER REMEMBER HIS FRIENDS! YOU RANDAL, YOU SHOULD NEVER TRUST FRANCIS THE SNIVY! IN FACT HE'S A GAMER! I HATE GAMERS!" Darktwo yelled

Wow, gee, what complex character motivation, how nuanced a conflict, and how amazing that my desk is still in one piece after the repeated impacts from my forehead.

"SO WHAT, EVEN IF HE'S A GAMER, HE DOSENT DESERVE THIS!" Randal yelled

Its time to take a break. We will be back to "Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: The Mystery of Francis" right after this

Oh, right, the E3 thing. At least it gives some reprieve from the outright lunacy of this chapter.

This weekend is the last weekend before the E3 press conference. E3 begins Monday June 4th. What happened at the last E3? Here are my top announcements at the last E3 1 year ago.

1st: Call Of Duty: Modern Warfare 3

2nd: NBA 2K12- They brought LA Laker Kobe Bryant to the E3 stage to demo the game

3rd: Halo 4- This Halo trilogy is not over yet!

4th: Super Mario 3D Land

5th: Nintendo Wii U

Do you think there will better announcements? Find out in our review, next week.

You pull a complete stop in the middle of the chapter to give us old news? Bloody hell, this story canít end soon enough.

We are now back to the explosive chapter of "Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: The Mystery of Francis"

Before the break:


Oh, for fuckís sake!

"EXCUSE ME! YOU ARE THE ONE WHO IS SUPPOSED TO HAVE HIS MEMORIES ERASED, NOT FRANCIS THE SNIVY! HE NEVER DESERVED TO HAVE HIS MEMORIES ERASED! HE IS A NICE POKEMON WHO HAS MANY FRIENDS! WATCH ME DARKTWO, I WILL ERASE YOUR MEMORIES ONE DAY, AND WHEN I DO, I WILL GET HELP FROM FRANCIS THE UNCONSCIOUS HERO SNIVY! I EVEN HAVE A MEMORY LOCK!" Randal said as Team Angeles spoke up

"THAT'S RIGHT!" Team Angeles said

"What is a memory lock Randal?" Rose asked

"A memory lock is a lock that makes sure that once I erase memories of a pokemon, they will never remember anything until they break the lock" Randal answered

Alright, sure, but what is it, though? Is it like a headband? A microchip? Is it a psychic conjuration? What the fuck is the manifestation of this plot device?!

"I see, so are you planningÖ" Suyapa said as she got cut off by Darktwo

"QUIET! THE MEMORY LOCK SHOULD BE ON FRANCIS THE SNIVY, NOT ON ME! I DON'T EARN THAT MEMORY LOCK! FRANCIS THE SNIVY DESERVES TO NEVER EVER REMEMBER HIS FRIENDS! YOU RANDAL, YOU SHOULD NEVER TRUST FRANCIS THE SNIVY! IN FACT HE'S A GAMER! I HATE GAMERS!" Darktwo yelled

If this is how the author thinks everyone who disagrees with or dislikes him justify their behavior, then he deserves every single word Iíve ever written about him.

(Current Situation)

The conversation continuesÖ.

"I WANT ANSWERS DARKTWO, AND I WANT THE REAL REASON!" Randal yelled to Darktwo

I donít recall you ever asking a question, what the hell do you want from him?

"YOU ALLREADY GOT IT! Darktwo said as he launched a Shadow Ball attack at Yuneri. Yuneri could not dodge in time and got hit. Yuneri fainted, and Darktwo laughs at Randal

"HAHAHAHAHA! YOU SAW WHAT I DID THERE TO ONE OF FRANCIS THE SNIVY'S FRIENDS! I MADE HER FAINT ON SPOT! YOU CAN NOW DO WHAT YOU FAILED TO DO WITH ME! ERASE HER MEMORIES!

No, please, I volunteer. This shit is starting to be more insanity inducing than a Lovecraft fable.

"MY ANSWER IS NO! I DON'T ERASE NICE POKEMON MEMORIES!" Randal yelled

"DO IT, OR ELSE!" Darktwo yelled as he pulled out a needle with a life draining machine attached to it.

Itís time for Randal to work in a sweat shop sewing t-shirts.

"I WILL STAY AS IS! NO, EVEN IF I HAVE TO FAINT TO NOT TO ERASE YUNERI's MEMORIES!" Randal yelled

"YOU LEAVE ME WITH NO CHOICE!" Darktwo yelled as he grabbed Randal, and put him inside the machine

"HELP ME!" Randal yelled as he was attacked by the machine

"FOR EVERY TIME YOU YELL "FRANCIS NOOO!" I WILL ATTACK YOU!" Darktwo yelled

"YEAH RIGHT!" Randal yelled

The machine heard the response and a needle went into Randal's arm and sucked the life out of him.

Thatís some shoddy voice recognition software in that machine. Whoever Darktwoís contractor is, heís going to get a bad review.

Darktwo sucks in the drained life points of Randal. Randal is starting to get weaker.

"Randal NO!" All members of team Angeles yelled

Donít help him or anything, I mean, itís not like heís requested it or something like that- oh wait!

"HAHAHAHA! I get more pokemon to join Randal inside this machine" Darktwo said

The machine opens and sucks in all members of team Angeles. All of a sudden, a Amzumaril enters the scene and uses Water Gun on the machine, and the machine is now disabled, allowing Randal to be safe for now.

Always waterproof your death trap machines, people, I canít stress this enough.

"Thank you Amzumaril" Suyapa said

"Call me Evelyn the Amzumaril" Evelyn

Darktwo got so mad that he wants to injure Yuneri the Snivy.

Not Evelyn, the person responsible for stopping his plan, or Randal, the one he was already torturing. Logic?! Pff, whoever heard of such a thing?!

"I WANT TO INJURE A FRIEND OF YOURS FOR WHAT FRANCIS THE SNIVY DID TO GENGAR!" Darktwo yelled as he launched a Shadow Ball attack

Yuneri tries to avoid the attack, but the ball was so fast that Evelyn can't get to help Yuneri in time.

Once youíve squirted, you got to wait a bit to recharge, you see.

Yuneri falls unconscious for the second time in the conflict. Evelyn tries to revive Yuneri, but can't do it. Nurse Karla comes in, and tells that Yuneri will have to be in the hospital until further noticeÖ.

Because of course she does, right in the middle of Darkraiís castle. Whatever you are smoking, author, stop Ė it canít be the drug you think it is.

Chapter 58 is tomorrow, and a side story on Randal the Uxie is tomorrow as well.

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With the notice of the forum closing down in late August, I believe I should still have enough time to finish off this mock, and potentially the side stories that still pertains to the authorís chronicling of Francis the Snivy. I still have another project on the side, but I believe my main focus will be here for the time being.


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post Jun 18 2017, 02:57 PM
In trying to keep up the pace, here comes another chapter of this mess a bit earlier than usual. Hey, you know what would be good in a story with a titular character and almost five dozen chapters to its name? Not having the titular character appear in the chapter and a whole lot of flashbacks, thatís what. Enjoy.

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Chapter 59: Hospital Visit: Yuneri the Snivy

FrancisTheUnconsciousSnivy101: Welcome to the chapter 59 of the story. In this chapter, it's about Yuneri the Snivy in the hospital.

If you assume we read this intro, how do you not assume weíre reading the chapter title as well?

If you guys recall from yesterdays chapter, Darktwo attacked Yuneri to try to get revenge for what happened to Gengar. We also have a side story on Randal the Uxie, and a gamer moment from me based on the E3 show (There was a hint of my E3 moment during part 1 of the story).

Heavens know I try to forget, but unfortunately memory loss does not come as easy as it does in this fanfic.

Here we go, and without further delayÖ

Team Angeles: FrancisTheUnconsciousSnivy101 does not own anything

Last Lines before the bell:

"I WANT ANSWERS DARKTWO, AND I WANT THE REAL REASON!" Randal yelled to Darktwo

ďWhy do kids like the taste of cinnamon toast crunch?!Ē

"YOU ALLREADY GOT IT! Darktwo said as he launched a Shadow Ball attack at Yuneri. Yuneri could not dodge in time and got hit. Yuneri fainted, and Darktwo laughs at Randal

"HAHAHAHAHA! YOU SAW WHAT I DID THERE TO ONE OF FRANCIS THE SNIVY'S FRIENDS! I MADE HER FAINT ON SPOT! YOU CAN NOW DO WHAT YOU FAILED TO DO WITH ME! ERASE HER MEMORIES!

"MY ANSWER IS NO! I DON'T ERASE NICE POKEMON MEMORIES!" Randal yelled

Because personal perception of an individualís character is definitely reason enough to decide on the destruction of their personal identity.

"DO IT, OR ELSE!" Darktwo yelled as he pulled out a needle with a life draining machine attached to it.

"I WILL STAY AS IS! NO, EVEN IF I HAVE TO FAINT TO NOT TO ERASE YUNERI's MEMORIES!" Randal yelled

Why is Darktwo even asking Randal to do it, when heís already managed to erase Francisí memories on his own? Randal is completely superfluous.

"YOU LEAVE ME WITH NO CHOICE!" Darktwo yelled as he grabbed Randal, and put him inside the machine

"HELP ME!" Randal yelled as he was attacked by the machine

"FOR EVERY TIME YOU YELL "FRANCIS NOOO!" I WILL ATTACK YOU!" Darktwo yelled

"YEAH RIGHT!" Randal yelled

The machine heard the response and a needle went into Randal's arm and sucked the life out of him. Darktwo sucks in the drained life points of Randal.

ďTangy with plenty of helplessness, self-sacrifice, and a hint of self-righteousness. Funny, that almost tastes like Francis himself.Ē

Randal is starting to get weaker.

"Randal NO!" All members of team Angeles yelled

"HAHAHAHA! I get more pokemon to join Randal inside this machine" Darktwo said

The machine opens and sucks in all members of team Angeles. All of a sudden, a Amzumaril enters the scene and uses Water Gun on the machine, and the machine is now disabled, allowing Randal to be safe for now.

Heís bleeding from a puncture wound and weakened by life drain, but sure, weíll say heís safe. What about everyone else, though?

"Thank you Amzumaril" Suyapa said

"Call me Evelyn the Amzumaril" Evelyn

The extra Ďmí in her name stands for Ďmiseryí. Mine, to be precise.

Darktwo got so mad that he wants to injure Yuneri the Snivy.

"I WANT TO INJURE A FRIEND OF YOURS FOR WHAT FRANCIS THE SNIVY DID TO GENGAR!" Darktwo yelled as he launched a Shadow Ball attack

Yuneri tries to avoid the attack, but the ball was so fast that Evelyn can't get to help Yuneri in time. Yuneri falls unconscious for the second time in the conflict.

And for the second time, I donít care. Okay, itís more like the fifty-sixth time, but you get my meaning.

Evelyn tries to revive Yuneri, but can't do it. Nurse Karla comes in, and tells that Yuneri will have to be in the hospital until further noticeÖ.

(Current situation)

Team Angeles has just witnessed an attack on Yuneri the Snivy by Darktwo. They see that Yuneri is unconscious from the attack, and Nurse Karla tells the team that Yuneri has to go to the hospital to be examined.

Treatment directly on the battlefield does not come with any medical bills, you see.

"We have to get Yuneri to the hospital now!" Nurse Karla yelled as Darktwo laughs

"HAHAHAHA! HOSPITALS ARE FOR ROOKIES!" Darktwo yelled as he laughed out loud

ďAnd while weíre at it, vaccinations are for chumps, too!Ē

The team heads to the Glendale hospital to treat Yuneri for her injures on her.

(Glendale Hospital)

Team Angeles along with Randal arrive at the hospital. The team checks in at the desk. The pokemon behind the counter knows team Angeles very well.

What hospital staff wouldnít know Francis or his friends by name at this point?

"Hello team Angeles" the pokemon behind the counter said

"Hi Jenifer" Suyapa said

"What brings you here today?" Jenifer the Sunflowera asks

ďItís Francis again, isnít it? You know we have a bed on standby for him, you can just go to its room.Ē

"We are here to check on our unconscious friend, Yuneri the Snivy. You see, she was attacked by Darktwo during a fight between Darktwo and Randal" Kavi the Servine said

"I see. What happened to my favorite Snivy?" Jenifer asks

"Which Snivy?" Suyapa asks

Unless Darktwo erased your memories as well, you have no fucking reason to ask that question.

"Francis the Snivy" Jenifer answers

"You see, Darktwo made him disappear to someplace, and what's worse is that he lost his memories of his life" Suyapa answered

And they know this, because they somehow got a camera feed from his location to a television that was somehow right next to them at the time. Iíve learned to stop questioning these things.

"No way! Darktwo should be punished for that!" Jenifer yelled out loud so that every nurse can hear her

"Francis the Snivy is gone?" A second nurse asks

"Where is he?" A third nurse asks

ďHeís our major source of income! Weíll be ruined!Ē

"His memories are erased!" A fourth nurse yelled

"Erase Darktwo's memories!" A fifth nurse yelled

Team Angeles has found out that Francis the Snivy has a lot of friends in LA. Suyapa agrees that Randal should erase all of Darktwo's memories, and put a memory lock on him.

They needed the encouragement from a third party in order to seek revenge? Just how helplessly unmotivated can someone be?

Randal is about to have a practice lesson, when Team Angeles guild is damaged by an intruder.

"INTRUDER ALERT AT TEAM ANGELES GUILD, PLEASE RESPOND NOW!" The message was announced on the team's GAS (Guild Alert System)

Please tell me the alert sound is called a Ďtootí.

The team heads to the team Guild to find Serperior destroying materials in the guild.

(Guild Area)

The team finds out that their practice room is being damaged by Serperior, Gengar, and Ninetales. The team recognizes Gengar.

Because only one of them exist in this world, apparently.

"Gengar! How did you come back?" Suyapa asks

"I came back because Francis the Snivy has his memories erased by Darktwo!" Gengar yelled

I donít think thatís how it works according to any kind of feasible logic, in any alternate dimension, or within every imaginable plane of existence.

"You know what Gengar, your memories are about to be erased for what you did to Francis the Snivy for those times" Suyapa said as she and the rest of the team had flashbacks

Flashback 1- Chapter 3

Excuse me, what? A numbered flashback? Thereís going to be more?!

The duo continued to battle each other, and dodging each other's moves, so much that Kavi is starting to regain his memory of Francis back. The battle was about to get a huge game changer that starts up a rivalry that starts up again.

(Back to the battle)

Ugh, again the author is copy-pasting entire parts of his story in as flashbacks. I wonít cut them out this time, because, a) these events are ancient by now and I can barely remember them, and, b) if I did, the chapter would be over already.

Kavi uses Leaf Blade

Kavi runs toward Francis and jumps and extends his blade, but just as he was about to hit Francis, a purple shadow attacks Francis knocking him unconscious. Kavi, instead of finishing the attack, goes and help Francis to the bench and tells Joey what happened during that exchange.

"Joey, please do not make the call that I won this battle. It's not fair that someone attacked Francis unconscious instead of me doing that." Kavi said to Joey

I just realized. This sequence of flashbacks is Gengarís highlight reel.

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"Yes Kavi, I understand" Joey said

Suyapa, who was watching the battle, noticed and shouted "GENGAR" to make the purple shadow reveal itself to be Gengar. She knew that this rivalry is about to start again. Joey also knew something was not right; he makes the call of who won this battle.

ĎTwas dumb that won the battle.

"Ladies and Gentlemen, your attention please. Francis is unconscious and is unable to battle; however, since Gengar has interrupted the battle by attack Francis, this battle is declared No Contest!' Joey said out loud.

Thatís assuming there even was one to be had.

Flashback 2- Chapter 6

(Location- Same Area- Audience area)

The fans were cheering for the two combatants as they took a break for the two minute warning period. Joey was examining the last play where Rose deals 60 damage to Rose.

I do hope she talks to her psychiatrist about that. Itís not healthy for her.

He spots a purple shadow as Kavi got hit. He then noticed a cup in the shadows hands. He also noticed that the shadow put something purple inside what looks like water.

(Location- Kavi's Locker Room)

Kavi received a notice on his FAS that Francis fainted, but he questions that because Francis did not even enter this battle.

Itís almost like there is a world that exists apart from him.

He tries to find out why Francis fainted, and he found out that it was poison. Kavi runs toward Joey to issue a poison alert.

(Location- Rose's locker Room)

Rose also got the same FAS alert that Kavi got. She was still questioning how Francis got poisoned.

Itís always customary to question how the injury occurred before doing anything to treat it, didnít you know?

(Location- Battle Field)

The fans were still cheering for both Kavi and Rose as they ran to the field, but what the audience got was a huge change in the schedule as Joey announced something that makes the crowd boo someone familiar.

"Ladies and Gentlemen, I have received word that Francis fainted sometime during the battle; however, he was not even battling.

ďSo letís ruin everyoneís fun, because this unrelated event occurred.Ē

During my viewing of the replay, I saw a purple shadow entering the battlefield and putting something purple in a water cup. I am officially calling this battle as No contest" Joey announced

The crowd boos as they see the exact same purple shadow that Joey just announced. The crowd holds up their signs. The crowd knows that it was Gengar who entered the stadium. They also see Francis being carried out of the stadium.

Seems weird they would bring signs for this specific occasion, doesnít it?

(Location- Outside Angeles Guild)

Gengar was looking for a empty spot making sure that no one will find him. He found a empty parking lot with a lot of cars. Gengar uses Drain Punch on Francis while unconscious (this will for sure not end well)

I want it to end, author. Whether well or not is besides the matter.

(Location- 3rd floor)

The audience, including team Angeles hears a car alarm from outside. Everyone heads outside to check what is going on.

(Location- Angeles Guild Parking lot)

The team hears shouting from Gengar and the team does not like what they see. They saw Gengar beating Francis up badly.

How dare he?! He should be beating him up well instead.

The teams (there are 8 soccer teams which include team Angeles) try to help Francis, but Gengar attacks everyone he sees. Gengar made 92% of the teams faint, leaving Suyapa, Kavi, and 1 member of team Charm by themselves. Gengar attacks Milo the Thyphosion of team Charm with Shadow ball.

Milo tried to dodge, but he got hit from behind and he fainted.

Assuming Gengar attacked Milo from the front, who the hell taught him to dodge that way?

Kavi tries to help, but Gengar attacks him using Shadow Punch and makes Kavi faint for his first time, leaving Suyapa defenseless and speechless at what happens next to his lover.

(Location- Same Area- Francis's area)

Gengar kept on attacking Francis while unconscious. He keeps using Shadow Ball to push Francis to a wall. Gengar holds up the unconscious Francis while flinging him toward a building.

He had brought a doll house in case the author couldnít be bothered with descriptions.

Francis gets thrown toward the three floors building hitting the wood. Suyapa tries to catch Francis falling down, but Gengar hits Suyapa to prevent her from saving Francis from a lot of pain. Francis's right leg hits the ground hard as he landed on the cement. Francis started bleeding severely.

Just another Tuesday, really.

Flashback 3- Chapter 10

All of the pokemon that were inside the building are now outside waiting for news on what happened. Everyone see's Francis (the Snivy, and the Buizel) come out from the building. Gengar was just outside and appeared in front of team Angeles. Everyone who was watching started booing Gengar.

"Boo!" The fans of both Francis's said

Jumping straight into this without context makes it look like either Halloween or a wrestling match.

Gengar starts attacking everyone he sees. All of a sudden, it became a disaster for a certain Snivy.

"So, you have a bro huh" Gengar said to Francis

"I think you should get yourself outa here" Francis said to Gengar

"What if I give you a cookie, will you be nice to me?" Gengar asked Francis

Chocolate chip or raisins? Itís a very important question.

"NEVER!" Team Angeles said

"So, you refuse the cookie, now you will get this as a punishment!" Gengar yelled as he took out a cookie from a wrapper

"A cookie as a punishment, you got to be crazy" Francis said

Well, heís definitely putting something in the cookies to think like that, if you get my drift.

Itís poison. What did you think I was implying?


It was too late for Francis to refuse after Gengar attacks Francis with Shadow Ball.

Gengar is being defended by Orion & Edge , but in the end, Gengar matches up to the two and attacks Francis on the head. Francis faints on contact or FFOC for short.

FFOC off, author.

"FRANCIS NO!" Suyapa yelled so loud that the nearby crowd started booing Gengar as if this was a basketball or soccer game. Suyapa was about to witness the real power of Gengar.

"Hey you! Yes you!" Gengar yells at Suyapa to try to attract her attention away from the unconscious Francis.

"GENGAR, YOU SHALL PAY!" Suyapa screamed loud so that everyone can hear.

That wasnít too hard for Gengar to do. For being the center of attention, people are very inattentive around Francis.

The nearby crowd cheers Suyapa on.

"Let's go Su-ya-pa" The crowd cheered

Gengar was mad at the crowd's reaction, so mad that he decided to try to put Francis in another coma and lock him up inside a dungeon.

Gengar uses Poison Gas on everyone. Gengar produces a poisonous gas that poisons everyone who breathes it in. About 95.9 percent of the crowd got poisoned, including Francis the Buizel.

"Hey man, you smell weird" Francis the Buizel said to Gengar

I could come up with another fart joke, but I donít want to imply that Francis #2 has a fetish.

"Quiet!" Gengar yelled and without letting anyone see him, he grabbed the unconscious Francis, and took him straight to a 40 floor dungeon.

(Location-" Dungeon 1"(name to be determined)

Gengar puts Francis on a trap door and makes sure no one is around. Gengar puts a explosive device on Francis' s neck and activates the door. Francis drops about 15,000 feet below ground level and lands in floor 40 of the dungeon. The doors leading to floor 40 locks as Gengar presses the "lock away" buttonÖ

I wish the author would have treated this sequential indulgence of literary incompetence in a similar fashion. Lock it all away and donít leave a key.

(Present time)

Team Angeles is now ready for Randal to erase Gengar's memories, but they have to wait until tomorrow on the next chapter to do it.

And now here is a little bit of my gamer moment:

Your what now?

Chapter 18

The team is now on the Golden State freeway north. Suyapa checks the map. She sees a building with the words "Staples Center" written on it. She also spots a building with 4 sections. She tells the team that the 4 section building is the convention center. The team agrees as they are now 12 minutes away from their destination.

Yeah, this certainly is something that happened back in Chapter 18. Where are you going with this?

(Location- Freeway exit off Figueroa St.)

The teams are now moments away from saving Francis the Snivy from Gengar's friends, little did they know that Francis is already unconscious and is bleeding, but the worst was yet to comeÖ

I donít even know if it has yet to pass, and Iím forty chapters ahead of this mess.

(Location- Convention Center- Nintendo booth)

Gengar, Serperior, and Ninetales are enjoying what they have done to Francis the Snivy. They see that Francis is now unconscious and is bleeding. Gengar wants to get rid of what they have done to Francis by hiding Francis behind the Microsoft (Xbox 360) booth.

You see, in chapter 18, Gengar tries to get rid of evidence of he done with Francis the Snivy. He tries it at the Microsoft booth. Microsoft is famous for the Xbox 360 game console, and of course, being a gamer myself, I love Microsoft because of the Xbox 360. The future of my gaming years are on Microsoft. Now as far as Nintendo is concerned, the only time I go back to Nintendo, is for pokemon, and Dragon Quest. I am more of a Microsoft fan now. For Gengar, in chapter 18, there was no place to hide Francis the Snivy.


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What are you even trying to convey here, author? Your adherence to Microsoft as an Xbox fanboy? Thatís your ďgamer momentĒ that you needed to wedge in here by copying yet another part of your own fanfic into itself? I canít decide if I should continue to ridicule your lack of human logic, or if I should study you, to find out how aliens have invaded our society.

And now, a look at the next chapter:

Gengar, and his friends have returned, but will Randal the Uxie be able to erase all the memories of Gengar, and put him on a memory lock? Find out tomorrow on " Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: The Mystery of Francis"

Latter tonight:

A side story on Randal the Uxie!

And a bottle of gin. Nah, Iím kidding. Iím going to need two.

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You can almost hear the author scraping the bottom of the barrel by this point. Heís resorting to so many flashbacks thereís barely any new material anymore, so I really have no idea how the story will end. Even if I had a clue though, I doubt it would be anything actually indicative of its climax. This author is unpredictable in every sense possible.


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post Jun 21 2017, 12:53 PM
Moving right along, hereís more dumb from the dumb-dumb. Francis still doesnít make an appearance, despite how every character in this mess keeps moping about his condition. At least the author is dialing back on the amount of flashbacks, so thereís that. Enjoy.

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Chapter 60: Update on Yuneri the Snivy 1

FrancisTheUnconsciousSnivy101: Welcome to the next chapter of "Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: The Mystery of Francis" In this chapter, Evelyn the Amzumaril is a hero by finding out that Yuneri the Snivy will be unconscious for 14 days (14 chapters, 5 weeks).

Get off the front page, Spider-Man! Put down the lasso, Wonder Woman! Hang up the tights, Wolverine! This is what makes a true hero!

We also have a review of the E3 convention that happened here in the real Los Angeles (SUNDAY). I have some good news. Francis the Snivy regains his memories in 2 chapters, and he will get his revenge.

Spoilers? What spoilers? I donít see any spoilers here? What does that word even mean?

Seriously though, it doesnít happen. Not in Chapter 62, anyway. This fanfic is the reason I have trust issues.


Here we go, and without further delayÖ

Team Angeles: FrancisTheUnconsciousSnivy101 does not own anything.

Last lines from last chapter:

Team Angeles along with Randal arrive at the hospital. The team checks in at the desk. The pokemon behind the counter knows team Angeles very well.

Then why arenít they heading for the hills yet? They should know people have attacked them with explosives before.

"Hello team Angeles" the pokemon behind the counter said

"Hi Jenifer" Suyapa said

"What brings you here today?" Jenifer the Sunflowera asks

"We are here to check on our unconscious friend, Yuneri the Snivy. You see, she was attacked by Darktwo during a fight between Darktwo and Randal" Kavi the Servine said

Youíre dragging her in behind you in critical condition, but sure, you keep on doing small talk.

"I see. What happened to my favorite Snivy?" Jenifer asks

"Which Snivy?" Suyapa asks

"Francis the Snivy" Jenifer answers

Take a fucking guess, Jenifer. It shouldnít be hard given your profession.

"You see, Darktwo made him disappear to someplace, and what's worse is that he lost his memories of his life" Suyapa answered

"No way! Darktwo should be punished for that!" Jenifer yelled out loud so that every nurse can hear her

ďOnce he gets admitted to the hospital, I will personally see to it, that he receives no cake on his lunch tray.Ē

"Francis the Snivy is gone?" A second nurse asks

"Where is he?" A third nurse asks

"His memories are erased!" A fourth nurse yelled

"Erase Darktwo's memories!" A fifth nurse yelled

Now, now, there is no need to incite thought crime.

Team Angeles has found out that Francis the Snivy has a lot of friends in LA. Suyapa agrees that Randal should erase all of Darktwo's memories, and put a memory lock on him. Randal is about to have a practice lesson, when Team Angeles guild is damaged by an intruder.

"INTRUDER ALERT AT TEAM ANGELES GUILD, PLEASE RESPOND NOW!" The message was announced on the team's GAS (Guild Alert System)

I guess the alert system smelled a rat Ė or something like that.

The team heads to the team Guild to find Serperior destroying materials in the guild.

(Guild Area)

The team finds out that their practice room is being damaged by Serperior, Gengar, and Ninetales. The team recognizes Gengar.

"Gengar! How did you come back?" Suyapa asks

Iíll remind everyone, that Francis was shot in the fucking head, and yet no one questioned his miraculous recovery.

"I came back because Francis the Snivy has his memories erased by Darktwo!" Gengar yelled

(Current situation)

Half of team Angeles are at the battle site, while another half are at the hospital to evaluate the unconscious Yuneri the Snivy.

(Hospital- This chapter)

Normally, I shouldnít question what chapter the events Iím reading actually occurs in. Given the previous chapter though, this is almost a necessity.

Francis the Riolu, and Evelyn the Azumaril and other teammates are at the hospital evaluating the progress of the unconscious Yuneri the Snivy. Francis the Axew was reading a magazine on Francis the Snivy's basketball career. The rest of the team was playing cards. All of a sudden, the nurse walks in.

How unexpected, and in a hospital of all places!

"Hello team Angeles" the nurse said

"Hello" Francis the Riolu said

"What brings you guys here?" the nurse asks

How many different nurses are we going to have by the end of this?

"We just want some information on Yuneri the Snivy's condition" Evelyn said

"So far, all we know is that Yuneri is unconscious, and she has an injured right arm from the attack of Darktwo" the nurse said

"I see. We just need to hope she will be alright" Evelyn said

"That is correct" the nurse said

ďItís not like we provide medical treatment in a hospital. We just put people into beds, keep our fingers crossed, and then charge them for the upkeep.Ē

The team decides to spend the night at the hospital

Because the other half of the team can certainly deal with their enemies by themselves, right?

(8PM)

Evelyn is thinking about Francis the Snivy, and Yuneri the SnivyÖ.

Evelyn's taught on Francis the Snivy

"I hope you are ok Francis. I just hope that you recover your memories soon, so that you can remember me. A lot has happened since you lost your memories to Darktwo.

It hasnít even been a day! Stop the fucking pity party!

We are trying to help you out in any way possible, including erasing Gengar's memories. Randal, and his party are underway with getting Gengar's memories erased. Please come home soon. I miss you my best friend.

You didnít exist before the previous chapter, who the fuck even are you?!

Evelyn's taught on Yuneri the Snivy

I hope you are alright. You are like my second sister to me.

Who is the first one? Did the author forget to introduce her?

You being attacked by Darktwo, and being unconscious with an injured arm is a no-no. We will stop Darktwo and Gengar. We will erase their memories and Francis the Snivy will be back"!

(9AM- the next day)

The team wakes up to news that the team wanted to avoid. Evelyn delivered news that was sad enough to make her cry.

Oh please, cry me a river. I long to drown myself and escape this literary version of purgatory.

"What's going on Evelyn?" Francis the Riolu asked

"It'sÖ.notÖ.good news" Evelyn said as she started crying

"It has to be bad" Ania the Snivy said

"Yes it is" Evelyn said as she continued

"I just talked to nurses, and they said that now Yuneri the Snivy has a arm injury, and a leg injury, furthermore, according to the nurses, she is expected to be unconscious for 15 days, and you know that the basketball season starts in 2 days" Evelyn said as she continued crying

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Because if thereís something that takes precedence over the physical and mental health of the characters in this story, itís their ability to participate in sports.

"Je deteste Darktwo!" Everyone in the hospital said

Next chapter: Part 1 of Randal and team VS Gengar to erase Gengar's memories

Sounds interesting but highly unlikely. Letís see what comes of that, right now.


Chapter 61: New Rivalry Francis the Buizel & Gengar

: Welcome to chap 61 of the story. It's all about Yuneri trying to recover from her leg, and arm injury.

The title would beg to differ, but if you insist.

The team has taughts on her recovery. We also have a little on the battle with Randal and Gengar. Here we go, and without further delayÖ.

Team Angeles: FrancisTheUnconsciousSnivy101 does not own anything!

Last lines before the bell:

"I see. We just need to hope she will be alright" Evelyn said

Or, you know, you could throw some health restoratives on her. Berries, potions, anything really. Even a sloth could not write a more lazy plot progression.

"That is correct" the nurse said

The team decides to spend the night at the hospital

(8PM)

Evelyn is thinking about Francis the Snivy, and Yuneri the SnivyÖ.

At night, presumably in private. Do I need to say more?

Evelyn's taught on Francis the Snivy

"I hope you are ok Francis. I just hope that you recover your memories soon, so that you can remember me. A lot has happened since you lost your memories to Darktwo. We are trying to help you out in any way possible, including erasing Gengar's memories.

And the moment Gengar sees Francis after the fact, heíll go, ďGee, that guy looks ripe for a beating. Woah, dťjŗ vu. Oh well, better get to it.Ē

Randal, and his party are underway with getting Gengar's memories erased. Please come home soon. I miss you my best friend.

Evelyn's taught on Yuneri the Snivy

I hope you are alright. You are like my second sister to me. You being attacked by Darktwo, and being unconscious with an injured arm is a no-no.

Author, a kindergartner saying a bad word is a no-no. Being unconscious with injuries is an unfortunate circumstance. Some of us prefer to sound like reasonable adults.

We will stop Darktwo and Gengar. We will erase their memories and Francis the Snivy will be back"!

(9AM- the next day)

The team wakes up to news that the team wanted to avoid. Evelyn delivered news that was sad enough to make her cry.

Is it any surprise that the water-type Pokťmon has an easy time opening up the waterworks?

"What's going on Evelyn?" Francis the Riolu asked

"It'sÖ.notÖ.good news" Evelyn said as she started crying

"It has to be bad" Ania the Snivy said

"Yes it is" Evelyn said as she continued

"I just talked to nurses, and they said that now Yuneri the Snivy has a arm injury, and a leg injury, furthermore, according to the nurses, she is expected to be unconscious for 15 days, and you know that the basketball season starts in 2 days" Evelyn said as she continued crying

If patients develop new injuries after getting admitted to a hospital, something is horribly wrong with the staff there.

"Je deteste Darktwo!" Everyone in the hospital said

(Current Situation)

The hospital where team Angeles is evaluating Yuneri the Snivy is talking about Francis the Snivy having his memories erased, and wanting team Angeles to defeat Darktwo. The team is talking to each other about the plan to deal revenge to Darktwo.

You mean the plot is finally moving again? Heavens to Betsy, I had nearly given up hope.

"We need to work on a plan out something" Evelyn said

"How about an all out attack?" Francis the Riolu asked

"We need Yuneri, and Francis the Snivy for that. Yuneri is unconscious, and you know that Francis the Snivy has his memories erased" Evelyn said

Because everyone else on the team are worthless, expect for the walking wound collector and that other one, for whom I canít even be bothered to recall a defining character trait.

"Our basketball season starts in 1 day. We need to act fast!" Francis the Axew yelled

"I just hope Yuneri is alright" Evelyn said

"I bet she will revive in 14 days. We just have to hope for the best at this point" Francis the Riolu said

Meanwhile, youíll just sit with your thumbs up your asses. How inspirational.

"I hope the others are erasing Gengar's memories" Evelyn said

(Location- Team Angeles Guild)

The team that is at the guild is watching Randal and Gengar battle.

They arrived there yesterday, might I remind you.

If Gengar wins this battle (according to Gengar), Yuneri the Snivy will have her memories erased. If Randal wins, Gengar has his memories erased, and is put under the memory lock.

(Randal VS Gengar- Day 1)

Not that I donít believe that Gengar could keep battling for days at a time Ė because I sincerely do Ė but Randal, on the other hand? That lie is so blatant it doesnít even qualify as a joke.

Possession: Gengar

Randal: 10,000 LP

Gengar: 10,000 LP

Gengar uses Life Drain

Gengar runs toward Randal, but Randal uses Psychic to stop his attack. Randal counters by slamming Gengar to the wall. Randal deals 500 LP damage

Randal: 10,000 LP (First lead)

Gengar: 9,500 LP

I feel like Iím missing out on a lot of great comedy opportunities by never having played Duel Monsters. Sorry.

Randal uses Psy Beam

Randal uses his eyes to shoot out beams of light. Randal strikes Gengar, and deals 1,000 LP damage

Randal: 10,000 LP (1,500 point run)

Gengar: 8,500 LP

Gengar uses an unknown move

Asspull off the starboard bow! Brace for impact!

Gengar makes a copy of himself, and the duo surround Randal. The Gengars enter Randal's body, and suck out the life and blood out of him. The Gengars exit Randal's body, and become one (This attack sounds familiarÖ..)

No shit, itís the same move that Darktwo used in Chapter 51, which means it is a known attack Ė itís just not named yet. Most likely because the author canít be bothered with original thoughts.

Randal almost fainted from the attack. Suyapa, the referee, calls the move offside.

"We have a offside on Gengar for using a unknown move. The attack counts since it is a life draining move" Suyapa said

Francis the Buizel remembers a similar attack

Oh, for fuckís sake, not another flashback, please!

(Flashback- Chapter 51)

Darktwo attacks Francis the Snivy with an unknown move

Darktwo creates a copy of himself. He and his copy surround Francis the Snivy, preventing Francis the Snivy from escaping what is about to happen to him. The two Darktwo's enter Francis the Snivy's body, and attacks him from inside. The two Darktwo does also suck the blood and life out of him. The two Darktwo's exits Francis the Snivy's body, and become one. Francis the Snivy faints on impact.(Result: The move was called offside by Yuneri)

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I hate pointless flashbacks. No, you listen to me here for a bit. Flashbacks that are inserted merely for the purpose of reiterating what has already transpired Ė what the reader already knows Ė are a fucking plague upon literature. Why? Because it is a condescension of the readerís ability to memorize the story. Itís the authorís admittance that their narrative is worthless and forgettable, so people must be reminded what happened in order to understand current events. Only here itís pointless to do so, because itís the exact same event that is happening, just to someone else. Itís like your own parents pulling out the photo album, to show you pictures of events that you were present for Ė photos that you shot yourself! It doesnít even qualify as filler! It is novelistic dead space, a subtraction of literary worth, a zero sum addition to an already failing narrative, the vapid flailing of the clueless monkey that somehow got their hands onto the typewriter Ė WASTE OF EVERYONEíS FUCKING TIME!!

(Present time)

Francis the Buizel remembers the move well, and tries to protest against the move.

"Yo! Gengar! You better not use dat move again!" Francis the Buizel yelled

I would put a lot more stock in your threats, if any of you actually tried to back them up.

"Oh..looks like the lover of an unconscious Snivy has chosen to speak up" Gengar said

"Oh no you didn't!" Francis the Buizel yelled

"Oh yes I did! Your lover, Yuneri the Snivy is having the best "fun" in her life!" Gengar yelled

"Excuse me! She is unconscious! She is not having fun!" Francis the Buizel yelled

Itís more fun than this though, isnít it?

"You know what Buizel? You need a punishment! Take this!" Gengar yelled as he launched an unknown attack

Gengar makes a copy of himself, and the duo surrounds Francis the Buizel. The Gengars enter Randal's body, and suck out the life and blood out of him.

Author, hereís a little tip for you. The first time you see something, anything, then it is unknown to you. After that however, it becomes that. That thing. The thing you remember. It may be vague; it may even lack a word for which to describe it. But it is no longer unknown. You, as an individual capable of penning thoughts into words, have been defying my every attempt at comprehension towards your mental functions for FOUR YEARS, but you are not an unknown to me. Stop using that fucking word!

The Gengars exit Francis the Buiizel's body, and become one (This attack sounds familiarÖ..) Francis the Buizel fainted from the attack.

Suyapa tries to call the move offside, but she is now afraid of being the next target. The team does not blame her. Nurse Karla now evaluates Francis the Buizel, and finds out that Francis the Buizel will have to be in the hospital, and will be unconscious for an "X"( Variable to replace unknown number) number of days.

You donít need to tell us what you learned in math class today, author.

FrancisTheUncosciousSnivy101: Tomorrow we have..

1) Francis the Buizel is unconscious

2) Day 1 of the basketball season

3) FINALS ARE OVER- That means Next Monday, its double chapters daily time!

Double the lack of quality.

4) Yuneri the Snivy now has both legs injured

What whe fuck is going on at that hospital?!

5) Francis the Snivy's Abused Life story update?- Stay tuned!

Team Angeles: We love our city of Los Angeles! We love LA! We also love all the cities in the world!

Sure, all three of them appearing in this story.

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Iíve got to say, this story continues to be an absolute mess. There isnít an overarching plot so much as repetition of the same pointless conflict over and over again. Definitions of insanity aside, I have no idea how this story will end. The author said that Yuneri would be unconscious for 14 chapters, which exceeds the amount of chapters left of this fanfic. Honestly, I donít even expect a resolution, I just hope the story itself will acknowledge that its over, when it happens.


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